|Reviews for Unatoned|
| Guest chapter 23 . 7/22/2013
Wow absoluty fantastic story very gripping:) i couldnt stop reading till the end and its exam time for me atm:D
I love the way you protraied Daphne am looking forward to reading your other stories:)
| Itzle chapter 23 . 7/9/2013
This is one of the best stories I've ever read. As someone who is interested in writing this story comes as something special, something to learn from.
Perhaps it is not necessary but I want to say it, thank you. And congratulations.
| Guest chapter 23 . 6/21/2013
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| chill guy chapter 23 . 6/9/2013
Excellent fic. I really enjoy how you did the characterization for our two lead characters. I can't say I've come across a fic that had Daphne portrayed as a truly ruthless character without remorse. You did it and did it in such a way that avoided descending into mindless character bashing. This baddy had depth.
Of course all this is bolstered by the fact that the Harry in this fic wasn't some bleeding heart looking to save everyone and everything that glances his direction. Dear god thank you for that. Witty, deeply intelligent, jaded (but not to the point of pointless angst), and not afraid of some good ole sex. Mirrored by strong female characters that aren't afraid to be devious to get what they want, whether it be a romp (oh yeah!) or an inheritance. Bravo my friend.
If you're ever in need of a beta for future or existing projects drop me a line.
| Alexander Derpington chapter 23 . 6/6/2013
It was silly of me to expect a brighter love to develop between the two of them. Heh. You did quite marvelously break the "Ice Queen" image.
Thank you for writing.
| Darren Jaguar chapter 23 . 5/28/2013
Awesome :) I enjoyed it the full way, and couldn't stop reading, as the clock on my computer testifies (it is currently 5 AM where I am). Got halfway and just couldn't stop.
In a terrible way the ending is sort of unsatisfying. The loose ends are tied off, pretty much, but there's still a feeling of a lack of satisfying conclusion. Dunno what gives me that impression. But then again, how CAN you finish this style of fanfic without baffling the reader? :)
Thanks very much for this fic.
| Darren Jaguar chapter 7 . 5/28/2013
A couple of questions are popping into my mind, which doubtlessly will be explained at some point in the future of this fic :)
What happened to Harry's actual friends? We only see colleagues at the moment, no friends.
And then, what happened to all his cash, if he's having to work for the DMLE.
Then again, AU means anything goes. Maybe he didn't have that much cash. Maybe something went badly.
| Darren Jaguar chapter 4 . 5/28/2013
Beautiful descriptions, and lovely story so far. I'm struggling to work out where it's headed... Huh :)
| Guest chapter 23 . 4/27/2013
Fantastic story that was very well written
| The Demon Kid chapter 1 . 4/11/2013
A Harry Potter noir story? The Lord has answered my prayers!
No, but seriously this is a good story, but maybe the genre and the pairing made me biased.
But it's good that you got five starred on DLP. You deserve it.
| AzureStorms chapter 23 . 3/28/2013
OKay this story was just fantastic. I absolutely love how you took a world and characters into the future and made an amazing story that seemed entirely realistic within the bounds already set by the potter universe. Loved it greatly.
| Geo Nova chapter 5 . 3/27/2013
Well, I wanted to like it, and the noir tones are great. But, goddammit Harry calmly accepted the girl drugging and sleeping with him completely goes against his character from the books. Great writing, but I no longer give a crap about your main character.
| JeanDanjou chapter 8 . 3/25/2013
Still a very good story, but you arr doing almost all "maverick competent cop and the femme fatale", but the boggest problem is not the cliche, is the fact that Harry is not simply a cop, never will. And he is too cynical, that ridiculous, 4 years and he is now the Kino of Cynism?
| JeanDanjou chapter 3 . 3/25/2013
Fantastitc writing, really likes your harry. The way you wrote his fame was very original and realistic too.
| Sardonic Irony chapter 23 . 3/6/2013
Honestly, this is one of the finest stories I have read. Disturbing, complex, aristic, hard-hitting - in short noir. I loved it, and the more I think about it, the more I like the characters of Harry and Daphne. The only thing I thought may have been jarring in the story was that Harry was so different and the reasons for it were (intentionally I'm sure) not delved into particularly. Still, I thought it was a really good fic, and may I complement you on your ability to write characters who are completely fucked up. Hope you get some of your other fics finished soon.