|Reviews for A Mother's Journey|
| khffbleach9 chapter 15 . 12/24/2013
I saw Rebellion as well and hot a Charlotte phone holder. The movie was awesome right!
| Jimmy CWL chapter 15 . 12/24/2013
How does Fiona "arrive" in a timeloop? Consider Homura's situation. On arrival, she's either been a prisoner insider her own body or insensate for most of the next few weeks. Quite unpleasant after what she's been through, don't you think? Either that, or there's only one Homura and she's developed an extra personality to cope with the extra memories.
Compare that to Fiona. From the opening blurbs of the first chapters, we know she remembers Fiona's history in Reality Alpha (to use your own terminology) while she's now in Reality Beta. From the most recent chapters, we also know she remembers the history of the Fiona of Reality Beta as well. Yet, she doesn't have an extra voice in her head. Why the difference?
One thing I would like to see someday is Fiona's reaction on arriving in Reality Beta.
Another item I would like to raise is that you have the Angel of Death (Madoka) seen by quite a few people as she goes about her task, as well as TALKING to someone who isn't dead yet (by proxy, but still). If events like those happen as often as you suggest, there ought to be legends about her among the magical girl community.
| Evan Monahan chapter 13 . 12/3/2013
This really handled the Israeli-Palestinian conflict quite well. It combines two of my favourite subjects. I find it interesting that you would place a Madoka Magica fanfic in Palestine. When I clicked on the link, I was hoping it would be pro-peace, and not fanatically pro-Palestinian or pro-Israeli. I was pleasantly surprised.
Thank you! You have really shown that Madoka Magica fans are actually quite thoughtful, intelligent, and sensitive. I'll read more if I get the chance.
| Jimmy CWL chapter 14 . 12/1/2013
When you started this fic, I thought I would like Fiona when we got to see her. But now that she's been in action for a few chapters, I have to say I DON'T like her. The way you write her thoughts, she reads more like a villan. If that was your intention, all well and good. If not, you might consider toning down her arrogance. It may be justified arrogance for having survived so long in the face of magic, but it is annoying.
| Drinkie chapter 14 . 12/1/2013
I wonder what your reaction to Rebellion will be since i've now learn't even more about what happens in it i've got mixed and very confused feelings i won't spoil anything for you however but i hope you enjoy the film
| Guest chapter 12 . 11/12/2013
It looks to me that our Fiona might be wee bit obsessed with the mitihikara group.
| CelticX chapter 13 . 11/9/2013
What else can I say, but that I love it :-)
I know how busy you are IRL and hope and pray that all is going well with you, but that doesn't mean that I don't also hope and pray that you will once again grace us with another chapter to this wonderful story, even if you do "give yourself to the dark side." ;-p
I'll be looking forward to it.
| Sacchin chapter 4 . 10/27/2013
Wow! This is really interesting! I like your ideas about Homura moving into another Homura's dimension, along with your descriptions on the differences in the timelines. I will be reading on!
| CelticX chapter 12 . 9/21/2013
I'm still waitiiiiiiing...next chapter please ;-)
I can easily see why this story is taking up so much of your muse's time and efforts. Being a parent places us in a unique position to observe and report on the happenings of our "children," both good and bad. Personally, I don't know how Fiona has managed to stay sane all these years (except for that one little episode). Watching over our little ones as they try to make their way through life and trying to help whenever we can is both greatly rewarding as well as painful and frustrating to the nth degree. Here's hoping that these littles have a much better life than we did.
Until next time
| Guest chapter 12 . 9/20/2013
There's a slight matter. Yuma lives in Kyouko's old territory of Kasamino. By this point in time, they have virtually no reason to go patrolling there.
| Acer One Three Four chapter 12 . 9/19/2013
I always smile a little whenever the Oriko Magica characters get some play. The original is deeply flawed; the pacing is weird and the artwork is incredibly inconsistent, but the one thing everyone seemed to like was the characters. It's a story that's tailor-made for fanfic, because it means they can get more play as far from the original narrative as possible.
It's a real pity that the trio tends to get shoved out of character a lot, particularly Oriko, whose twisted messiah complex and unhealthy-but-genuine relationship with Kirika get turned all too often into cartoonish supervillainy and one-sided stalking. But this is your first run of Yuma, and you've done right by her. She feels timid and insecure, but still capable of bravery and still tending to heroify those around her. She feels like a kid, moreso than she did in the original. Even her speech pattern is down pat. Given that, I look forward quite a bit to seeing how you handle Oriko.
| Gateman chapter 11 . 9/4/2013
This...this was an epic. Dragon, Phoenix, and Qilin huh? Japan and USA. China. Europe. Nationalism. America.
Like I said, this quiet story is an epic.
Still, I disagree with your characterization of the Incubators as malicious. They're certainly evil and psycopathic, but that stems from greed rather than sadism. With demons propogating independantly of magical girls and Madoka stealing all the energy that would be released when a magical girl gives in to despair, there's no benefit for the Incubators to interfere with the state of magical girl relations.
Also, what exactly did Tomiko do to Jessica? Did she stick the mind of another puella into her head? Qilin huh?
| DschingisKhan chapter 11 . 9/2/2013
Thank you for keeping me guessing through all of that. And how very elegant, that end; yet still so fraught with uncertainty!
I don't recall if I've mentioned it before, but your originals are quite potent. This time, I'd especially like to call out the arc of Jessica's internal state as exceptional in its subtlety. The way that final scene clicked into place serves as as good a reminder as any that falling in love can happen before you even realise it.
Unrelated to the story, have you seen Shigofumi? Since you like Kino, you might like that as well.
| Karrin Blue chapter 11 . 9/2/2013
Woohoo Oriko! Since neither her not Kirika's wishes came about because of witches they should have the same powers and such... Can't wait to see what's changed!
| Acer One Three Four chapter 11 . 9/1/2013
Woohoo for Oriko! I've always thought the whole "magical girls through history" concept was a good one, and this is definitely one of the better plays on the concept.