Reviews for The Ace, The Queen, and The Two of Hearts
themergitonian chapter 3 . 1/3
Interesting use of teleportation powers, but most ESPers at level 3 and 4 probably have inherent protection from direct teleportation attacks such as having nails teleportated into them. In the same way that Shokuhou's mental attacks don't work on Misaka, Kuroko would probably have to fight indirectly, i.e. kicking and punching and just using her power for mobility.
MitsukiTachibana chapter 51 . 8/29/2016
Is it bad that I kind of enjoy your Kuroko? She gets very abused, has a lot of mental problems, self-worth issues, and despite all this is very much a functional badass. Those OCs of your though, I really don't like them, and they really don't add anything valuable to this story arc. Overall, decent read.
Anonymous chapter 14 . 4/16/2016
It's AIM diffusion field, so An Involuntary Movement diffusion field. Great story, I love it.
CesarBorgia chapter 29 . 2/17/2016
Achei que a mikasa ia dar outro presente para a kuroko quando elas estivessem sozinhas tímida com ela é
Guest chapter 1 . 7/23/2015
You have already completed ss2 of this story, so why don't you continue to writting this story (ss1)?
ZachAttack00 chapter 8 . 9/11/2014
I'm fairly sure a normal person is a level 0, as Saten was uneffected by capacity down in the manga/anime and she is a level 0.
ZachAttack00 chapter 7 . 9/11/2014
I'm fairly sure a normal person is a level 0 as Saten was unaffected by capacity down in the manga/anime and she is a level 0
Guest chapter 7 . 8/26/2014
I started reading this hoping for action, romance, a story, maybe some plot twists. I don't really want to read about kuroko having a mental illness that is brutal and morbid. It ruins the innocence of this manga's character and is rather off-putting to the story itself. That being said, the romance and the action are very good when they aren't interrupted with kuroko being a psychopath.
SatoshiKyu chapter 20 . 7/10/2014
Your policy on OCs is a wonderful thing, and you make the world a better place just by being here. Next time I'm desperately searching for something decent to read and run into yet another ridiculous self-insert or blatant Mary Sue MC/OC romance, I'm going to remember this story and the memory will be as a brilliant light guiding me through the darkness and despair.
DEADPOOL RULES66 chapter 23 . 1/19/2014
good question an example is don boneyard from fossil fighters champions who has good intentions but is portrayed as the bad dude
Otaku4ever chapter 51 . 12/9/2013
This. Is. Amazing.

Finally! I have finished this! I really enjoyed the story that I didn't have time to drop a review since I got so excited. Sorry about that. I was also too lazy to log in thinking that time should be spent reading this story first! I'm going to read the sequel now.

Man! Why did it took me so long to find a story like this...
Spikesagitta chapter 51 . 10/9/2013
That was one heck of a ride through the story! Thanks for sharing!
Crunol chapter 51 . 9/2/2013
You scared me then, I thought she actually died then let her go started playing and I couldn't stop crying! Don't mess with me, how can you write such good stories? I'm just too lazy to log in
ElementalMiko12 chapter 51 . 8/15/2013
:( just came back from a trip exploring Rainbow River and finally finished your story dying to read the sequel!
Cun chapter 2 . 8/8/2013
Oh really, Mikoto shocking Kuroko in her sleep? XD Me likes.
Mmmh temples are sensitive I envy you, Kuroko... Then again not, because that must hurt...

Mikoto's reaction is just what I gave her as well, so naturally I like _

I love how Kuroko teleported the acid off her skin, that was fresh.

... hmm, so they weren't in their dorm room at the beginning of the chapter? I must have missed something? Now I understand why Mikoto was holding onto Kuroko though.
-Oh right, I re-checked the end of chapter 1, and they did find a clinic to sleep in. I forgot about it P

Just to remind the reader you could mention the word "clinic" in the sentence:
"She swung her legs over the bed, stood up, and stormed into the next room of the clinic." near the beginning.

I wonder if the Queen is playing with Kuroko's mind?

Nitpicks that I picked up this chapter...
I feel bad for nitpicking, but it's just meant for help. Sometimes it's hard to pick them up yourself, and sometimes you just didn't know something was wrong to start with. I like having my typos pointed out myself, but if you don't care much for it, just tell me and I won't do it ;)

Anyway, nitpicks here:
"that's not true, my Onee-sama cares about me." She shouted...
- Should be big T, and since she's shouting add a "!" at the end instead of a "." :-)

"was that just a dream?"
- Big W.

Instead her face bore a sweet look of such childlike innocence it made Kuroko smile
- Add a "." to end the sentence.

As it drew close her hand was assaulted by a stream of small sparks which issued from her other temple.
- "her other temple" sounds a bit strange, I wonder if it should be about Mikoto's temple? Like "from the other girl's temple"?

Soon her hands hovered an inch away from it's destination.
- "Hands" equals the use of "their" instead of "it's". If it was just one hand, then "its" is correct instead :-) her thought the voice from her dream suddenly echoed in her head again again.
- One "again" too many.

She sat there for a couple of hours brooding, even as the first spears of dawn's light pierced the barely intact windows of the building
- Add a "." to end the sentence.

I controlled myself all night and endured her little shocks for hours, just to make her happing.
- "Happing" I suppose should be "happy"?

Did I really go that far overboard this time.'
- It's a question, so end with "?" instead of "."

"I'll make this better Kuroko, I swear I'll make this up to you. But for now I'll give you a little time to yourself.'
- Starts with " and ends with '. Is it speesch or thought?

"Now I suggest you surrender nice and peaceful, or do you think you're little zaps are faster than our bullets."
- Trade "you're" with "your". Also, end with "?" instead of "." since it's a question.

Soon he would have the mighty railgun begging for her life.
- Railgun with small r - as a name, that's not right, but this is truly nitpicky.

"They pulled a gun on us," Misaka retorted defensively
- Add a "." to end the sentence.

"A gun which had been disabled when you began shocking them to hell and back. You have absolutely no restraint whatsoever do you?'
- Starts with " and ends with '.

Misaka thought to herself, her (despair) slowly turning into anger 'Uihara doesn't face any problems, Saten-san doesn't.
- Can't see a reason for despair to be in brackets (), so just pointing it out. Add a "." after 'anger'. 'Uihara' should be 'Uiharu'.

"Attacked twice in 5 minutes by people who seemed to know who we are and want something with us," Kuroko began
- Add a "." to end the sentence.

she saw where this was going, "I doubt it's a coincidence," she agreed.
- I suppose it's Mikoto we're talking about, start the sentence with "Misaka" instead to make that clear, or add "." to the former sentence and start this one with big S. Still prefer using her name to clearify though.

"The Queen could have forces outside the faction at school,"
- End with "." instead of ",".

"but what other explanation is there."
- End with "?" instead of "."

"I don't know who you're talking about," he yelled with hate and fury in his voice
- End his yell with "!" instead of "," to add emotion. Add "." to end sentence.

"If you know who I am than you know what I can do to you if you're lying."
- Trade "than" with "then".

sensing danger the moment before she teleported in front of misaka, intercepting the caustic projectile.
- misaka should have big M.

she immediately registered a sharp, biting pain and a hissing sound as the acid ate away at her shirt and the flesh underneath.
- Sentence should start with big S.

"If you don't want to end up fried like you're boss than you'll tell me..."
- Trade "you're" with "your" and "than" with "then".

"Someone spread the word around the streets that if you capture the railgun you get 2 million yen, and told us you would be in district 17"
- railgun as a name should start with big R. Add "." to end sentence.

"Yeah. what a mess...
- Big W after "."

they had checked 5 buildings and each of those buildings had been a dead end,
- Big T at beginning.

Normally Academy City was lit up by numerous streetlights and other lights, but these ones seemed to have been turned off, and she couldn't risk giving away their positioning by powering them up.
- Use Mikoto's name (Misaka) to clarify which of the girls we're talking about, instead of simply 'she'. Avoids immediate confusion that breaks immersion.

...and if it's connected to the main grid I should be able to find out the location "
- Add "." to end the sentence. And by the way, smart idea _

Misaka heated up the kettle with her they were soon eating.
- With her power, I assume? :-)

after that, however, came the difficult part.
- Big A.

blankets took up a lot of room as well so it was a logical explanation.
- Big B.

"no, you brought it, you use it"
- Start with big N. Add a "." to end sentence.

"I brought it for you," Well... us... but still *Push*
- Instead of using *actions*, try to use descriptions instead. *This* breaks immersion fairly quickly. Proper descriptions will flow better for you as well :)

when she had regained her composure she turned around and pushed Kuroko away.
- Big W.

"Onee-sama doesn't mind?" Kuroko asked, slightly surprised at the reaction
- Add a "." to end sentence.
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