Reviews for Blood from the East
leesamantha767 chapter 8 . 4/15/2016
I love it! When are you updating? I wish that you will update soon!
jaybird22 chapter 8 . 2/17/2016
when will the story be updated.
DisneyMagic21 chapter 8 . 4/15/2014
Interesting story so far, looking forward for the next chapter
xxxCatsOfTheShadowsxxx chapter 8 . 11/27/2013
You're doing awesome with this story, can you please update soon?
Animecookie13 chapter 8 . 12/16/2012
Wow, unexpected ending much! But really good writing! I'm a little confused though. Did Far survive? Was he a traitor? Oh, come on, keep posting! Really loved it!
Lady Fountainhead chapter 8 . 12/10/2012
The beginning of this was a great idea. I loved the premise and the plot of it. I also really loved the romantic tension between Faro and Sapphire. You played both the plot and romantic interest off of each other and I was really drawn in. There were several parts of this story that were brilliant in my opinion. One was the line "Saldowr told me that courage does not always come in the form of reckless bloodshed." I felt it was really the plot's overarching theme. I also really liked Faro's and Sapphire's confusion of feelings for each other and would've really liked to see you follow that through to a climax.

A couple of suggestions for you and your writing. Your use of semi-colons is a little confusing sometimes. If in doubt, start a new sentence. Otherwise, you're just creating a run-on sentence and your audience has to reread it a few times to understand it. I know it's hard to proofread every detail of the story, especially when you've got so much going on in your own life. But remember the differences between their, there, and they're. You confuse them more than a few times in the story and it just creates more confusion for your readers.

I think you're a fabulously creative writer and would love to see you do more.

On to the ending. This was a definite shock for me. I loved that you did this, because it was so unexpected! I really, really want you to continue this. The idea of the Cannibals being in power, the ones controlling the sea is so fantastic and you could do so much with it. You could have it set in the future with Sapphire's child or Sapphire, herself, be the One. I do so very much want to see a continuation of this. Keep writing!
Trapped In Narnia chapter 8 . 10/31/2012
W-w-what? My favorite fanfic just ended... Like ka-put gone... What about the big battle? Where was that? And faro and sapphire fighting side by side in an epic battle of love and loss and corruption? What happened I'm so sad and confused! :(
AnAussie chapter 6 . 10/12/2012
just saying but sapphire and faro are pretty much cousins, not lovers
Trapped In Narnia chapter 7 . 9/18/2012
No matter how long the chapter, I'll always feel it to be too short. *sigh* So now the big war and Sapphy and Faro are right in the middle of it. To be honest I'm surprised Conor came but I guess he did have to protect her. Good thing nobody told Granny Carne, I know Conor has always had more Air in him. Congrats on another great chapter hope you update soon!
Trapped In Narnia chapter 6 . 8/27/2012
Why you give me a short chapter :( - sad face! But ahhhhhh swim away Faro! SWIM AWAY! (Good Safaro too!)
SellTheeSoul4Bacon chapter 6 . 8/27/2012
I liked the Faro/Sapphire! And the cannibal's POV kind creeped me out...
Trapped In Narnia chapter 5 . 8/21/2012
LOOOOOOOOOOOVE! I feel a war brewing, and Faro and Saph are right in the heart of it. Loved the Safaro too! Keep it up! WRITE FAST!
SellTheeSoul4Bacon chapter 5 . 8/20/2012
Nicely done! :)
Trapped In Narnia chapter 4 . 8/9/2012
2 lazy 2 log in chapter 4 . 8/9/2012
It wasnt bad but u should never write something poibtless ansput it in a chapter. That is a VeryBad thing to makeyour storybetter you should just slowdown abit and add some mire abouttypos and other mistakes. Hard ro typr on a nook.
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