|Reviews for Those 30 Days|
| Hawki chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
-Little tidbit, and maybe you’re aware of the issue (or lack of it), but the stanzas/lines are all bunched up together. I use ellipsis (…) to separate sections myself but it’s readable in the end. Anyway, concerning the poem itself:
-“has leaft for a month, leaving night as our host.”
“Leaft” should be “left.”
-Concerning the poem, it strikes me as something more to be read than sung, despite being rhyme-based. In terms of tempo, it isn’t that consistant in line length or beat. Still, I think it captures the ‘essence’ of the situation well. Probably have to have seen the film or read the comics to get full said ‘essence’ but regardless, got something out of it.