|Reviews for Trickling River|
| adk chapter 9 . 3/6
Denozo whould never not know the name of a movie he had seen and it's halloween town. So you can fix it
| Sadie chapter 9 . 1/8
Yeah... so after finishing this chapter I still agree with what I said before. This is a great story, sure there are some things that could be changed but the majority of it is great!
| Sadie chapter 10 . 1/8
I kinda hate you right now! You could totally rework the story or just set this version aside and then post a revised version. But just setting it aside because you feel like you've matured (which you very well may have), it's kind of like giving up!
| Sinopa Ariyana chapter 10 . 1/7
Ya know instead of "retiring" the story you coulda just continued it transitioning it to your new more mature outlook. Or you could always rewrite this fic with your more mature style. Course I know it probably won't be continued but just because you've matured don't mean that ya can't continue something written from a less mature time in your life. It's not easy to rewrite or transition something into that mindset but it can be done. Maybe someday you'll decide to rewrite this fic with your new style and I know I'd enjoy it as well As many other I'd think. I look forward to seeing what his mature style has done to your writing and how it has Changed it. Till the next interesting story.
| mithrilandtj chapter 10 . 1/7
It SUCKS that you're not continuing this story.
I love HP/NCIS crossovers
| storyscriber chapter 10 . 1/6
Since you have abandoned this story it would be better to delete it from . keep it for your self but don't taunt readers with a good story to abandon it in the middle that's just cruel.
| Guest chapter 10 . 1/6
Please, please. please someone take on this story it's too good to let go !
Info on Chapter 6 Mage are said to be more powerful than wizards too !
Plus in what I read and look up it is to be said that Merlin became a Mage !
Here magic levels: Apprentice, wizard or witch, sorcerer or sorceress and than mage but I can think of one high and that's Magic caster.
Apprentice, wizard and witch use a wand plus words.
Sorcerer and sorceress use a staff and words.
Mage: don't use a wands or a staffs but hands and words.
Magic caster : don't use a wands or a staffs but will use there hands, eyes and feet or any thing else !
So there you go !
Hope you had a Happy New Year and that China will have one soon.
The Crimson Mage.
| storyscriber chapter 2 . 1/6
Just a few bones to pick - if it has already been done by others just disregard. Since NCIS work out of the Navy Yard in DC, they cannot get to Naval Station Norfolk in thirty minutes - not even if they fly. I live in Northern Virginia and grew up in Norfolk Virginia, the trip by car takes at least 3 hrs. Now if you had said Bethesda or Quantico or any other naval or military base close to DC it would have been plausible for DiNozzo to get from the Navy Yard to this place in 30 minutes. Othwise this is a great set up for Harry/River in the NCIS universe. I look forward to reading ore.
| Dwyna chapter 10 . 1/6
Thank you for letting us readers know what is going on with this story. While I am disappointed to not get to read an entire story, I can understand why you are retiring it. I will be looking forward to future stories. Good luck!
| royslady51 chapter 10 . 1/6
What to fail to understand is that when you do things like this nobody will trust you to finish one later. We don't really care about your monuments to yourself, either. Your best idea would be to take it down and just store it on your computer cuz we're just deleting author alerts and story alerts now.
Oh, and author notes aren't allowed to be posted as a separate chapter. Didn't you read the rules? Put this note on your profile page, not here.
| Sakura Lisel chapter 10 . 1/5
Aw... No fair! I want to see the confrontation between Leroy and Dumbledore when the old coot arrives to try and take Harry away only to find he legally can't thanks to the blood adoption. *lol* Couldn't you continue this despite what you just said?
| sdoyle1989 chapter 9 . 12/23/2013
this story is great please continue!
| Guest chapter 9 . 10/20/2013
In the beginning, I really liked the story, but the Europe bashing and Americas superiority complexe ruined it for me. I admit, magical Britain is outdated, but you simply reduce them to a pitiful bunch of idiots. Also you sometimes write about Europe, but there is a whole lot more to Europe than just Britain. What about France or Italy or Germany? I think when talking about Europe you have to think of those too.
Something else that bothers me is the interaction of your first mage and the president. It just seems off and not like politicians.
The story really has potential, but the almighty US in the role of the Mary-Sue is the reason I don't like your writing
| nachi potter chapter 9 . 8/5/2013
Oh my goddness please is was fantastic butdont ginny and harry o hermione ewww
| royslady51 chapter 9 . 6/27/2013
I dislike that you haven't updated it in SIX FREAKING MONTHS. Almost seven.