|Reviews for Elementals of the Phoenix|
| Guest chapter 4 . 2/26
Stopping here. Your story doesn’t make much sense, and you are rushing through things that need much much more depth.
| Guest chapter 3 . 2/26
This story is friggen stupid. Oh my dads alive? That’s neat. 10 mins to make up for over a decade of abuse, starvation, deadly situations. While James watched his son from afar. Yep. Sorry. Dear ol’Dad would be filling his grave for real by now.
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/26
Sorry. Story already started on a pretty stupid setting. There is no way in holy hell Harry would just go to bed after that.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/12/2016
Interesting idea, but poorly executed.
"It was about seven and they had about eaten already." You need to get rid of that second about.
"Harry moved his head before he realized who this man was." What does that even mean? You tell us that Harry finds the man familiar and that it was someone he thought dead. Obviously Harry has seen the man already in order to think these things, what is he moving his head for? Where is he moving it to?
"All in good time." All in good time?! Harry should be demanding an explanation, not agreeing to go to bed.
The sentence structure is also very stilted. I'm glad you are re-writing this, because the author is right, this version is shitty.
| Karatekid-Ninja chapter 18 . 9/7/2015
I really enjoyed this story I did however think the Epilogue was rushed and didn't seem to end the story... Cant wait to read the re-write!
| Yaw613 chapter 18 . 8/24/2015
Please write a sequel already. Thank you very much. I really appreciate it and liked it a lot.
| Comic Critic chapter 18 . 5/30/2015
Ohhh I liked this one! It was a bit fast, but that's ok because you be a fast read every once in a while!
| The Doctor chapter 1 . 10/14/2014
OH MY FREAKING GOD IM ALREADY IN LOVE
| missgsmith51 chapter 10 . 3/17/2014
"There are four dragons for each champion." I think you MEAN "There are four dragons, ONE for each champion." That's a pretty significant difference.
I keep hoping someone will improve Snape's rotten personality and Skeeter's unethical behavior. Alas, I guess we're stuck with the two jerks as they are, more's the pity.
| missgsmith51 chapter 8 . 3/17/2014
Another question: Has James been in touch with Remus all of these years? He would obviously know that Remus was innocent, as well.
My big question is ... WHO PERFORMED THAT EXTREMELY COMPLEX (according to Flitwick) CHARM? It's an important question, because if it was Dumbledore, then he has known since 1981 who really betrayed the Potters, and yet he has done nothing to rectify the miscarriage of justice.
| missgsmith51 chapter 7 . 3/17/2014
Dramione? It sounds like the name of that medicine for seasickness.
I feel as if large segments of the story that explain important but unclear events are missing, sort of like a mind that has been obliviated. :-/
| missgsmith51 chapter 4 . 3/17/2014
Isn't Luna the blonde reading the Quibbler upside down?
| HP.HG. fan forever chapter 3 . 3/18/2013
Hell of a jump there don't you think?
| starlite22 chapter 5 . 11/9/2012
This is a good idea for a story, you need to add a lot more detail, slow it down and expand a bit more before, after and during things happening, The Ginny bracket thing came out of know where, Hermonie kissed Harry once or twice then he wants to marry her, then we find out she was with Ron who hadn't really been mentioned before. He idea of people as elements though is an interesting one.
| Fyreheart chapter 2 . 10/16/2012
I'm very confused as there's no back story, no explanation of what's happening. No explanation of why James doesn't trust most of the Weasleys (but the jokesters are OK). No explanation of why if Dumbles kept quiet about James for 13 years, then why did he suddenly tell Snape? No explanation about why Dumbles wants to kill elementals.