|Reviews for Pokemon Best Wishes Remix: Black and White|
| Guest chapter 2 . 11/27/2013
| ultima-owner chapter 2 . 10/13/2013
Trip is very annoying
| Nyan chapter 3 . 7/9/2013
| LightRayPearlshipper chapter 3 . 6/4/2013
Why does it seem that you're making Ash still look like a complete fool? I get that yu want to follow canon events but still, he learned a lot over his years of experience at it's like he's hitting the reset button.
| LightRayPearlshipper chapter 2 . 6/4/2013
A lot of people hate you for this chapter, you know? Pikachu has taken much worse beatings than that. He took on a freaking Latios and Regice! Seriously, a lot of people hate you for making Trip win.
| Um neji chapter 1 . 3/10/2013
Dude no offense but it's pretty hypocritical to say he has no right to judge a story then out right call his mediocre. There are also people who enjoy this story as others enjoyed the other author so it works both ways.
How can you complain about Misty and Gary's character without any solid facts for some reinforcement?
Your comment on Ash in this story he's known her for years, it's called realizing your feelings.
Too many characters? Are you counting pokemon because the balance here may not be the best but it's decent.
What's wrong with the battles? Maybe you're just expecting too much.
You wanna talk about overused? Try your use of the phrase fall flat.
Dude were not wore. Also h a/n was only opinion. You could've just ignored, it wasn't anything important. I agree it wasn't needed but so are a lot of things on planet Earth.
Standard wise this isn't supposed to be like the original, it's a rewrite. He doesn'teven like that story, why would he try to match it's standards?
| nejikungasuki chapter 2 . 1/8/2013
I'll be honest. I'm being harsh in that I'm only nitpicking the negative aspects of your work.
Unfortunately, the only reason I can't see anything positive is because your work is so remniscent of another piece I read which had Ash, Misty and Gary journeying into Unova. And it's a pretty popular, well-liked piece in the Pokemon world. And yours, at every stage, simply fails to match up to the standards that story set.
I think on it's own, this could be a fair enough story. It's decent. It's definitely not terrible. However, in comparison, it pales, which makes me also wonder how delusional you wore when you wrote that author's note. Unless you were referring to another story, but given that I've pretty much plundered PokeCommunities for Ash/Misty in Unova stories, I don't think this is likely.
| nejikungasuki chapter 3 . 1/8/2013
There are too many characters here, and they are all falling flat.
Also your battle scenes, which honestly, with your knowledge I expected to be better, are just about as blase as any other writers. I don't know if you're aiming for a video-game style of prose in regards to the battles, but it doesn't work for a story.
Also please take a dictionary and look up some new verbs adjectives. The number of times you simultaneously use shouting for instance, makes this rather tedious to read.
| nejikungasuki chapter 1 . 1/8/2013
There is technically nothing wrong with this story. Grammatically, it isn't incorrect. However, your writing style falls completely flat, as does your dialogue.
One thing I noticed was your Author's Note. It is rather pompous, and I would edit it if I were you. It is okay for multiple authors on the site to have overlapping story ideas. However, you have clearly ripped off many aspects of the plot from another writer. I have actually read this writer's work, and I must say, it was leagues better than yours in my opinion. She may have been factually incorrect, deviated from canon in some instances, but it was for the reader's gratification, and it worked, earning her reviews and praise. It was funny, and it was meant to be a romantic comedy, and functioned perfectly as such. Creative license is allowed in any work and your high-handedness has no place in a community like fanfiction. You have no right to judge that writing as 'bad' and honestly, there may be those who prefer your writing... but there are also those who prefer hers.
Let's be honest. You have a lot more knowledge about the Pokemon World than many people. However, in terms of writing, you are mediocre.
Moreover, you claim to be writing a love triangle. However in the four chapters you have attempted so far I sense absolutely no chemistry or romance. If anything, you are doing a disgrace to Misty and Gary's characters alike. They both have so much more passion, so much more scope for development, and you let them fall flat.
Also I couldn't help but notice that you copied the cheeseburger scene/Misty's outfit from the author you claim wrote a bad story (being a fan of hers, I instantly realized). Unfortunately, whereas she made the scene enjoyable and almost epic in a sense, you made it fall flat.
I hope you don't decide to include Leaf. You're going to butcher her character.
Also, Ash would never think he was in love with Misty this early on. And fundamentally, that killed the story. Great job. (sarcasm)
| liamisgreat chapter 3 . 12/6/2012
i love them, do more please?
| Spartan-822 chapter 3 . 12/1/2012
Please up this story, its really good.I'd like to see how the MistyXAshXHilda love triangle continue.
| Guest chapter 3 . 11/25/2012
when is the next episode coming out
| 1rkhachatryan chapter 3 . 10/21/2012
Wow, awesome! More pls :)!
| UniversalGuardian chapter 2 . 9/16/2012
Hello my friend it's UG
Here to give a review you see
Now I read the whole story it's quite fun
And Hilda's Oshawott is number 1
I choose it aswell afterall
And with it I did NOT fall
But on with story there's only one beef
DON"T SPOIL THE STORY CHIEF!
| fanfic meister chapter 3 . 8/15/2012
That Iris when she was introduced I thought she had so much of the original Misty when Misty traveled with Ash through Kanto, Orange Islands, and Johto. Iris always wanting something to prove herself as Dragon master although she didn't say it back then until they helped a Druddigon mastered Draco Meteor.
About the World Junior Tournament Division, the only thing good right now was the exhibition match bewteen Cynthia, the Sinnoh Champion and Caitlin, Unova Psychic Master and Eliter Four. Cynthia's Garchomp vs Caitlin's Gothitelle were an awesome matchup. Why in the World Tournament arc made Trip win and to already face against Alder, the Unova Champion? Trip is angry that his idol Alder is now goofy and not serious in battling, and he feels betrayed because Trip always believed in strength. Still, Trip is a prick.
The younger Gym Leaders I would like to see how about Janine from Fuchsia City in Kanto, Koga's daughter. Also Whitney from Goldenrod City, Bugsy from Azalea Town, Falkner from Violet City. Roark from Oreburgh City, Sinnoh; Maylene from Veilstone City, Sinnoh; Candice from Snowpoint City. Brawly from Dewford Town, Hoenn. I see them as young Gym Leaders. Liza and Tate Mossdeep City, Hoenn.
Finally, it's good to see you back after a month. I know what it's like with having a lot do.