"It's not always about fun, Spike. This is serious business and I want to do this as quickly and cleanly as I can."

Spike bit into his sapphire and grunted, leaning his head on his hand. Luna chuckled and cleared her throat.

-That's what she said.

PLZ UPDATE! ITS GOOD!

Love your story, but I'm not a big fan of Naruto being puched around all the time. You'd think he'd put his hoof down by this point. But at least the Mane 6 knows not to bother him about his past anymore.

Great story. But you need to make some edits. You say 'people' instead of 'pony' or 'ponies'. The same with saying 'hand' or 'hands' instead of 'hoof' or 'hooves'. And don't use 'person' or 'persons'

Okeydokey. Well, I'm finished with all the chapters you've posted so far, and I've got to say that between this and the Google searches I was doing to learn more about the characters and what they were, I now know more about My Little Pony than I ever wanted to.

That being said, in your first chapter, you mentioned that part of the reason you were writing this was to see if you still had it. If you were referring to the motivation to be a FanFic writer, then I suppose that's really something only you can answer (although if you could muster up enough to post a new chapter, it would be appreciated). If you were referring to your skills, then I can tell you honestly that they haven't diminished at all.

Best wishes.

SJ84

Gonna post a full review when I get to the final chapter that's been posted, but I figure that since you requested us to report errors if we caught them, I'd let you know what I found.

First, right in your beginning author's note, you use the word "entertwined," when the correct spelling is "intertwined."

Second, though I can't find exactly where in this chapter it was, you used the word "persay," when the correct way to spell it is "per sé."

SJ84

You simply must continue this story...it's a crime against nature if you leave this story where it's at right now..

This is a surprisingly well thought-out plot. To say I was blown away is an abysmal understatement.
I. Love. It.
That's the best way to say this without writing in all caps to express my enthusiasm and adoration for this masterpiece of an unorthodox crossover.

To understand how much I love this, I'm going to tell you exactly what I'm doing. I am sitting here, giggling like a madwoman with intermittent little fangirl squeals peppered within.
That still doesn't quite express how excited I am at the concept of reading more of this story, but it's the best I have to work with. *shrugs*
Anyways, I hope to read more soon, but for now, I wish you well and bid you adeau. *bows*

God damn this is awesome!

It's been awhile since I've found a story so incredible That I read it twice in an hour. If the pairing is still undecided I really hope It's Rarity. I was starting to lean towards her in chap. 5, but was completely in her corner after seeing how vehemently she defended Naruto. Also because out of all the girls in the mane six she seems to be the one that understands him the best.

Please update soon.

Did you quit?

Chapter 8 coming soon I hopedont leave use hangin man.

Keep on goin! Dun dun duuun! Keep on writing! Dun duuuuun! I'll keep on likin ands sayin thanks to you for the chapters then! Dun DUn duuuuh

So this is, yeah, kind of ridiculously adorable and I don't even usually watch My Little Pony. (Although I just watched a handful of clips on YouTube...absurdist that it is.)

I hadn't realized you have a new story (for a given value of new) out since The Melt, and was pleasantly surprised to stumble across this. It works amazingly well given the potential crackiness of the premise. I'm enjoying everyone in this story, and it holds together plot-wise. Nice job! Here's to your muse.

I really hope that this story is still in the works! I love the idea and I hope you continue to write for it!

I absolutely love this story. Keep up the good work!