Reviews for Cause and Mass Effect
Makarainen chapter 16 . 1/24
Author SI: (Implicitly) asks for name
Author SI: asks for favorite color
Also author SI: fails to seize opportunity to stall Shepard for one more question by asking for airspeed of unladen swallow
Makarainen chapter 13 . 1/24
Why is your character being such a pathetic whiner? "Shepard's a pyromaniac, Shepard's explosion-happy." Dude, he's acting like she's incompetent, irresponsible, reckless, ruthlessly endangering allies, or jeopardizing mission objectives, when in actuality, all excitement notwithstanding, the cover right next to Shepard is a place about as protected as it gets. You're having him say yourself: "Not that there's anything wrong with that." Exactly. So, let her unwind a little. Hell knows she can use any opportunity she can get to do so.
Makarainen chapter 6 . 1/22
Author: fucks and fuckings and yeahs, fucks and fuckings and yeahs everywhere, even for Miranda "Miss Perfection" Lawson
Also author: complains about Udina saying "shitstorm" too often
Welcome to Hypocrisyville! Population: You
Makarainen chapter 38 . 1/15
You "could" care less? So, right now you care at least somewhat? Also, "rapidly cooling to absolute zero"? You do know how Thermos flasks work, yes?
Makarainen chapter 37 . 1/15
That is not what the word "belie" means. At all. In fact, it means the exact opposite of what you're using it here for. Why do you think it has "lie" in it? I swear, one really does not qualify as a fanfiction author unless diagnosed with a pathological aversion to dictionaries…
Makarainen chapter 35 . 1/15
Ah, yes, "preordained". Can't possibly write English prose without insisting on tacking the prefix pre on words simply to indicate that it happened in the past even though the word is already in the past form, not to mention that the word itself already implies the establishment of something to be relied upon later. Couldn't possibly leave the vanity points from pulling some pretentious wording out of a special place and faking non-existing eloquence on the table, now could we?
Makarainen chapter 30 . 1/14
"Till" is not "until". One is the thing tallying your purchases at a checkout, the other is a preposition to denote time before some event, literally or figuratively. The two are not interchangeable. Hell, "until" doesn't even have a double-l. So, out of what common-sense-shattering brainfart are you using it like that anyway?
Makarainen chapter 24 . 1/14
Any particular reason that prevented you from adding Kahoku's name to the dictionary and addressing the squiggly red line every time you obstinately insisted on spelling it as Kohaku? A rockslide, perhaps? Meteor impact? Total protonic reversal? Stepped on a LEGO? General incompetence with modern information technology?
Makarainen chapter 23 . 1/13
Don't drink and Google Translate. It never works.
Makarainen chapter 22 . 1/13
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Mud in a shingle, are you being ever so obnoxiously Murrican; it's almost comical.
Makarainen chapter 17 . 1/13
And of course another tool who just parrots "beg the question" for vanity points without knowing what it actually means, rather than not looking like a pretentious tool trying to fake eloquence and using the perfectly appropriate and existing phrase "raise the question" instead. Nothing to see here, move along.
Makarainen chapter 10 . 1/13
Ah, yes, another idiot who refused to learn the difference between lying and laying without a very good reason.
amerikhan786 chapter 15 . 11/10/2023
So far the MC hasn't changed much, all he is doing is going along and not preparing for what's to come in any way. And worse is you established that he has nothing special to bring to the fight so what's the point of this Story? At least it would have been fine if he saved Benezia or brought the Rachni with him safe from the Reapers but none of that Happened, instead he killed her and didn't care even tho he knows the effect of Indoctrination are unstoppable yet he has the nerve to judge her for it... Pathetic.
Nipplegunz chapter 44 . 10/5/2023
Great story! is there a sequal?
strengthofa1000 chapter 44 . 4/26/2023
i also enjoy this story and would like to read more :)
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