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I just started this chapter and I don’t understand the logic that Patrick is using here. He comes to this conclusion by “realizing” that Saren never appeared on Ilos yet got to the Citadel before Shepard but that is just plainly false. Saren is seen multiple times on Ilos and the VI even blatantly mentioned him passing by. Plus the bit that Saren would be stupid to use the Conduit since he’d be surrounded by himself in itself is stupid. Saren very clearly walks through the conduit with an army of Geth. In my opinion, the way the game did it is a smarter tactic than your “They hitched a ride on a Reaper and just showed up” theory.

Best canon divergent SI i've read so far. Thank you for sharing, I had an enjoyable time reading this.

Author SI: (Implicitly) asks for name
Author SI: asks for favorite color
Also author SI: fails to seize opportunity to stall Shepard for one more question by asking for airspeed of unladen swallow

Why is your character being such a pathetic whiner? "Shepard's a pyromaniac, Shepard's explosion-happy." Dude, he's acting like she's incompetent, irresponsible, reckless, ruthlessly endangering allies, or jeopardizing mission objectives, when in actuality, all excitement notwithstanding, the cover right next to Shepard is a place about as protected as it gets. You're having him say yourself: "Not that there's anything wrong with that." Exactly. So, let her unwind a little. Hell knows she can use any opportunity she can get to do so.

Author: fucks and fuckings and yeahs, fucks and fuckings and yeahs everywhere, even for Miranda "Miss Perfection" Lawson
Also author: complains about Udina saying "shitstorm" too often
Welcome to Hypocrisyville! Population: You

You "could" care less? So, right now you care at least somewhat? Also, "rapidly cooling to absolute zero"? You do know how Thermos flasks work, yes?

That is not what the word "belie" means. At all. In fact, it means the exact opposite of what you're using it here for. Why do you think it has "lie" in it? I swear, one really does not qualify as a fanfiction author unless diagnosed with a pathological aversion to dictionaries…

Ah, yes, "preordained". Can't possibly write English prose without insisting on tacking the prefix pre on words simply to indicate that it happened in the past even though the word is already in the past form, not to mention that the word itself already implies the establishment of something to be relied upon later. Couldn't possibly leave the vanity points from pulling some pretentious wording out of a special place and faking non-existing eloquence on the table, now could we?

"Till" is not "until". One is the thing tallying your purchases at a checkout, the other is a preposition to denote time before some event, literally or figuratively. The two are not interchangeable. Hell, "until" doesn't even have a double-l. So, out of what common-sense-shattering brainfart are you using it like that anyway?

Any particular reason that prevented you from adding Kahoku's name to the dictionary and addressing the squiggly red line every time you obstinately insisted on spelling it as Kohaku? A rockslide, perhaps? Meteor impact? Total protonic reversal? Stepped on a LEGO? General incompetence with modern information technology?

Don't drink and Google Translate. It never works.

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Mud in a shingle, are you being ever so obnoxiously Murrican; it's almost comical.

And of course another tool who just parrots "beg the question" for vanity points without knowing what it actually means, rather than not looking like a pretentious tool trying to fake eloquence and using the perfectly appropriate and existing phrase "raise the question" instead. Nothing to see here, move along.

Ah, yes, another idiot who refused to learn the difference between lying and laying without a very good reason.