|Reviews for To Make Amends|
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/10
Great story! I love the ideas of everything! But I am a bit of a critique... In the future, I would write with a little more color. Add more adjectives, and sensory imagery to your writing. Rather than being so upfront about everything, give the reader's imagination a chance to run wild :) Also, I would use less direct dialogue. We need to understand who's talking to who, but that doesn't necessarily mean every line containing a character's name... Again, I ABSOLUTELY love the story and the ideas that come with it, but when I saw this being your first fanfic, I thought I would add my 2 cents worth :) Take it or leave it! Great job!
| xFlipJamsx chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
please continue this story, i would like to know what happens
| adrianiforever chapter 1 . 7/6/2012
Great start update soon x