|Reviews for Desert Bloom|
| Hawki chapter 1 . 2/23/2015
I suppose it would be remiss of me not to comment on the fact that you comment that the 'Dark Cloud' section is a dead end for reviews, only that you have two reviews, but those reviews aren't even reviews. Go figure.
Unfortunately, given the length, I can't add all that much either. It's on the cusp of...something, I'll give it that much. Toan is coming off as being self-aware of fantasy tropes, that a hero may have some lady love waiting for him back home, or that there's the chance he may go through the formula of "x and y fall for each other over the course of z." So, I can get behind that. But it ends weakly because it states that he has Devia in his heart because of...some reason. Seriously, there's more reflection on every other character BUT Devia. It also comes off as being a but shallow for him in that she's simply described as "beautiful" and they're already in the position of sleeping together.
So, in short, nice idea, but really needed expansion.
| sierragust chapter 1 . 8/11/2013
She's one of the villagers in Muska Racka.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/15/2013