Reviews for What Makes a Man
Deleted18 chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
Awesome chapter
SomeofAwe chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
Very impressive new story!
candinaru25 chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
oh yes harry you have met tony stark. and now the man is never going to leave you or teddy alone with all the science and explosions he heard you guys talk about. i hope if paired it is these two.
HikariNoTenshi-San chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
THIS, is what Harry's life is summarized; SNAFUBAR Situation Normal : All F-ed UP Beyond All Recognition. xP Update soon!
Maximus Potter chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
Oh why does trouble have to find Harry, Tony is only going to make it worst and fun at the same time. Update soon.
Guest chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
Well, I'm glad you took my advice and made those changes to the first chapter (although you forgot to edit out Hermione's comments about Ginny's reaction, which makes no sense when Harry had earlier on already informed her). And while I still think the story has a really great premise that I would love to see explored, it's gotten a bit too unrealistic for me, even for an HP/Avengers crossover fic.

Harry was never that great a student; it seems completely unrealistic to me that Harry could ace his SATs on such short notice, especially when he would have known very little of the material, seeing as he left his Muggle education before he turned eleven. And it's not just about academic knowledge; there are histories and recent events that Harry would have no knowledge of, which would make any Muggle suspicious of him.

Also, while it's great that you incorporated Teddy and Andromeda, Teddy as a genius isn't canon; and even if you were to discard that, Harry and Andromeda's reactions are way too unrealistic. A child causing a potion explosion would have been met with worry - certainly for Teddy's safety, for who knows what might have happened and what possible side-effect the exploded potion had on Teddy besides turning a part of his arm blue? - and at least some form of discipline, rather than them just shrugging it off. Even if you say that they got him to promise he would never do it again, that clearly he is very responsible, it just doesn't jive with what we know of Andromeda. Harry might think it cool or whatever, but she certainly wouldn't. And she would never have agreed to let Teddy practice with Harry's wand.

There are a couple of other things in there that bug me, but I'm tired, especially because this fic held such promise, and it seems like it's being completely wasted. I hope you think about where you want the fic to go, and rewrite major parts of it to make it something that would be worth reading, because as it stands, all of your characters are reading like giant Mary/Gary Sues.
9shadowcat9 chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
That was awesome! :D Please have a scene where Teddy confuses Thor with sciency-stuff! X3 That would be epic!
SeaBreeze2Ga chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
Great chapter, very well done, can't wait to see what happens and where things go from here and what happens when Tony finds out about magic, keep up the great work, can't wait to read more.

SeaBreeze :-)
Exolibris chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
Very interesting! Like your story! If you want one of the interesting fic try reading "An Iron Magic" by mortenavida. Though it is cross of Harry Potter and Iron Man, but it is very interesting. I highly recommend it. Please update your though : ). Good job on it! Can't wait for next chapter.
Vukk chapter 2 . 7/21/2012
There is only a few hp/avengers, just look under the x-over with more than 25 reviews.
9shadowcat9 chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
Never dare the universe Harry, it comes back to bite you.

Please update soon! :)
WaterLilyOfLife chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
Very promising. I'm looking forward to more!

...Saying this twice because the site said that I was logged in but I really wasn't. -.-'
Guest chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
Very promising. I'm looking forward to more!
A Kira reviewer chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
This is very interesting! Wonderful read. I can't wait to see more.
darkcutey chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
That was great cant wait for next chapter!
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