Reviews for Forbidden
clato4eva15 chapter 1 . 9/27/2012
okay olives mother is a downright pain in the ass. please continue! i love it. i've ben to london and i've actually read the full romeo and juliet playby shakespeare, ur story is amazing! luv ya 4 eva gorgeous if u post an update.
Guest chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
Conceptually, it's wonderful, Rayvene, but you definitely need some help. Most critical readers DO notice these kinds of grammar mistakes and are distracted by them - so you need to clean it up in order for the writing itself to be in the foreground rather than the groan-producing errors. I ran it thru a simple web page corrector (of which there are many), which identified these:

Grammarly found 36 critical writing issues and generated 32 word choice corrections for your text.
Score: 61 of 100
(weak, needs revision)

Unoriginal text detected

Contextual Spelling Check
5 issues
Spelling (2)
Commonly confused words (3)
Ignored words

9 issues
Incorrect use of prepositions (2)
Use of adjectives and adverbs (1)
Modal verbs (1)

15 issues
Punctuation within a sentence (13)
Closing punctuation (2)
Formal punctuation

Style and Word Choice
6 issues
Writing style (3)
Vocabulary use (3)
Rayvene14 chapter 1 . 7/7/2012
NOTE: I ment it wouldnt take long to post. sorry:(