|Reviews for Fractured|
| CajunBear73 chapter 11 . 9/24/2012
And the curtain comes down on Act I.
Sad, but with promise, as the recounting of how the world got to this point.
Sly is the prophecy and fleeting is what we hold dear to us.
| Mr. Wizard chapter 8 . 9/23/2012
If Yori had had the services of certain Yamanouchi women in regards to her present, Fiske would really have been a grumpy monkey.
Especially like how Kim is adapting to it all, and the line with Betty knowing what is going on is very good. You're right, I feel right at home, though the odds...
| Eddy13 chapter 10 . 9/22/2012
That was a pretty sad fate for the Kingdom of Middleton. I do hope there's a way to reverse it.
| Taechunsa chapter 10 . 9/20/2012
Another good chapter.
We got a good resolution to the Middleton Kingdom reality and we saw IT come after Kim left, which was really nice since it is starting to tie it all together.
Kim is now back to 3019 and looking to actually get some answers, which I cannot wait for as it should also provide some for us.
Again, I didn't find any errors on the first reading.
Keep up the good work.
| Joe Stoppinghem chapter 10 . 9/18/2012
Man, another chapter with a lot of words.
My lips were so tired from reading this one.
(Let's see how long it takes for TRS to get it.)
Fantastic chapter, one hell of a battle for this and last chapter.
More and more of the story is starting to come together.
I guess I was wrong, Spock didn't die in this one... yet.
Thanks for returning to this one.
| Darev chapter 10 . 9/18/2012
Ricardo Montalban, the voice of Senior. May he rest in peace...
Finally we're about to get some answers! Like Kim I've enjoyed the ride, but so much of this story has me scratching my head and wondering just what the hell is going on and what this IT thing really is. I get the sense that she's been hoping between alternate dimensions, but where's the real Kim? And where does she belong?
Poor Tam. To find Kim only to die at the hands of a straggler. It sucks.
| Sentinel103 chapter 10 . 9/17/2012
Yea for Hana Side Kick, I mean killing ole Monty boy seems to be a hobby. Anyway things seem to be moving now and I like Betty's words "version of you".
| CajunBear73 chapter 10 . 9/17/2012
Man, so that's what happens to a series or version of it when it get cancelled. Wow! LOL! The magic corporate vacuum comes along and just sucks it up.
Nice to see the end of the Kingdom delayed by Senior and his army. Bonnie's persona fit well there I see...
But it seems things are now moving very quickly to the end. One AU world down, countless to go and with Kim's return here, the Prime location seems to be ahead of schedule to oblivion now.
Yeah Betty, you've got some 'splainin to do...
| Wanderer chapter 10 . 9/17/2012
Nice to see the continuation of this story. Hopefully you'll end it this time instead of leaving us hanging like last time.
I'm glad to see the reference to Corinthian leather here. I was hoping you'd say something about it when you first introduced him and to see it here was just icing on the cake.
But now we'll finally get some answers. Hopefully Betty can explain all that is going on to us and give Kim whatever she needs.
Wanderer of the Mist
| Darev chapter 9 . 9/11/2012
I still catch a few errors here and there, but nothing major.
Welcome back! Vacations are overrated. We love our craft!
You've sated my need for bloodshed in this chapter. The Siege was an epic display of fantasy warfare and doom and gloom. I felt sorry for the dragon, however. But I'm sure Monty will get his when Senior's reinforcements arrive. You didn't think I forgot about them, did you?
I do have one nitpick, though. Ballistas are very powerful weapons. They're basically overgrown crossbows that can skewer half a dozen men in a row. That Monkey Fist was able to easily parry one with his arm seemed a bit out of place for me. If he raised a shield barrier would be one thing but as with the dragon breaking down the gate, it comes down to simple physics for me.
| Magic Flying Spud chapter 9 . 9/10/2012
I just wanted to comment that I love this story. I'm not sure what you're trying to say with it, or where you're going to take it, but I love the war story approach. And I love each layer of this and I'm a fanboy, but yeah. Keep writing, yo. )
My only real critique of this chapter is the "And you think that gives you power over me?" line. That's a direct line from The Dark Knight Rises. I'm not sure if that was intentional, but it sticks out, and not much has come from it yet. I'm wondering what Montey's going to do about Amy.
| CajunBear73 chapter 9 . 9/10/2012
No you can't leave me alone, stuff happens. Oy.
Quite the war going on here. So much destruction and pain from Fist's Army and to more than those he's attacking. Got Amy and Drakken on a string there. But what of Shego?
Kim made good out there, but now a slip up of sorts may lead to some very bloody fighting.
And Betty now has a countdown to the end of everything. Unless.
| Taechunsa chapter 9 . 9/10/2012
Wow! Not a lot else to say about this one.
This was a very good chapter and I didn't notice any errors at all on the first reading.
It still seems that Betty in 3019 has something to do with all of this, at least given her whole spill on being bored with the peace. Just wonder how much?
Anyway, excellent chapter that moved somethings forward a little and gave us some nice action. I look forward to seeing where it goes from here, and when Tam meets up with Kim.
Keep up the exceptional work.
| Sentinel103 chapter 9 . 9/10/2012
Well a bit of a cliffie, nice last line Side Kick 'an advancing army wanting to kill her'. Loved that part, so anyway Kim became a dragon rider in an impromtu manner. Yori was slicing and dicing. Well it looks like Monkey Fist has a shot, I sure hope something can stop him.
So lots of nice mayhem SK and none of it was over the top...but we still need more. Now who's gonna take out MF? Hana? How about Amy...oh another long shot from Tara?
| Katsumara chapter 9 . 9/10/2012
Always sad. RIP Felix :( So many different universes have had 'main' characters die. It's so sad! Here's hoping Kim can still save the day and get back to 'her' Ron so she can tell him how video games helped save the world.