Thank you. Thank you for such an amazing story and wonderful take on this world. I've read a LOT of HP fanfiction, but yours is by far my favorite and I'm not even a fourth of the way through. Thank you for sharing your gift of writing on a site like this for avid readers and fans like myself.

Everytime Elize has been brought into your chapters has absolutely killed any drive I had to read this story. Everything she teaches and pushes into the story turns it to trash imo. I respect your creativity but I dislike where the tale is at this chapter and feel you kinda ruined it for me.

I understand what you’re doing by making him regret his actions but it doesn’t make the chapter suck any less. Move the fuck on. He slaughtered some mermaids. Big deal

Wish I had read the reviews before trying to get through this story, because I agree with nearly all of them. The first few chapters seem alright, with a powerful Harry putting in the study time and effort to get through a dangerous tournament, but it quickly goes off the rails. He instantly morphs into some lustful freak (underage mind you) who spends any time talking to a girl in the story thinking about grabbing her breasts and fucking her face. I’m not a prude by any means, but it’s literally SO in your face that i can’t get over it. Not to mention his raging at Mcgonagal for giving him detention for being disrespectful, not only is she his professor but shes his head of house! Not having any consequences for him treating women in the story this way is weird and i’m dropping it, sorry.

The funniest thing is the least believable thing here is this (a seven from Karkaroff.)

Nice ending, and it seems to leave an opening for a following fic as well. Not sure if you'll ever write one, or if you already have, but that is the hint I take from this last chapter. Thank you for writing this, and again for posting it here for us to read and give our feedback.

I'm not sure if this is a really obscure use of temporal, or possibly a nonnative english speaker situation. Generally, it would be "temporary" not "temporal" in these two situations.
really, really disliked being treated by a Gryffindor. They didn't know that Madam Pomfrey had made him swear a temporal oath, not unlike the Hippocratic
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"Don't worry about it, Harry. The headmaster included Professor Flitwick in our little conspiracy, and both managed to come up with a temporal solution.

As an unrelated note... In the chapter where the champions are told about the maze and everything, you have them told that they will enter based on their points with a five minute gap between them. Then in this chapter Harry has only a 2 minute lead? I have to admit, I think it was a smart move to drasticly shorten the time between entering, but still it is a very big difference between this and the previous chapter.

Thank you for the great read! Regardless your current state of being, I wish you the best.

-Kevoc Kuploc

The small brief moments of happiness Harry gets to experience with Fleur in France is so well written. A nice reprieve from the weight of war. Fleur’s depiction and demeanor in this book has been refreshing from how I’ve normally seen her written in other fanfic.

I choked a bit on the notion that Potter didn’t love anyone enough to go to the ball with them - as if going to your first school dance was about being in love? Interest, attraction, social success, but this isn’t about getting engaged!

This fic went from a 8/10 to a 2/10 really quickly and from the other reviews it seems this gets worse. I don't know which one was worse, the dry humping while dancing, the complete oversexualization of Fleur, or the complete 180 of the MC's personality. Not only did Harry go from a hard-working boy trying to get stronger and survive to a complete horny nerd, it seems the whole story turned into some cheap sex thing.

i like the fact that they didnt go to all the locations

sometimes road trip arcs really drag out the pacing of the story, and this is really tight, so thats good

I almost ditched this story in the beginning but I'm glad I stuck to it, it really improved considerably!

bruh I'd hit the cunt with a blasting curse

Unexpected.