|Reviews for Revenge of the Ten Tails Revamp!|
| Griffoth chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
Appearance:Ash black hair with streaks of white and blond hair with red highlights. Tall about 6'5 and lean and muscular. Wears a black cloak with a large kanji for 20 surrounded by the kanjis for 1 through 19 engraved in red. Carries a sword on his back that's gold and black with a serpentine design. One eye is ice blue and the other is chaotic red when the doujutsu isn't active.
Personality:shy and timid. A sly person with an intimidating personality, very determined and chaotic and has a voice in the back of his head driving him into insanity.
Bijuu:pseudo-jinchuuriki of all of the bijuu including the twenty tailed griffin and excluding the 9 and 10 tails.
Elemental affinity:all basic and advanced nature.
Bloodline:the kamigan allows the user to manifest an orb of every element and advance to sub elements and so on. The orbs act as a subconscious defense and float above your head in a protect even when your not paying attention.
History:was orphaned by the sage of 6 paths and was swallowed by the twenty tails but bit part of its tongue off which caused him to be spit out. Later when it was split up he was able to take a bite out of every bijuu except the 9 and 10 tails before being locked up by his father. Awakened almost 15,000 years later and is on a conquest for the 2 bijuu he never acquired.
Jutsu specialty:fuuinjutsu, genjutsu, taijutsu, and ninjutsu.
| Sasaui7 chapter 5 . 12/3/2012
It's really nice to get a look into Honda Lee's past. It's interesting to see more of his personality unfold and I am glad you did this. I look forward to the next chapter!
| San child of the wolves chapter 5 . 11/25/2012
Nice chapter. I can't wait to read the next one. Good luck with it. I'm glad that we get to see more of Honda's life from the past.
| azure blue espeon chapter 5 . 11/24/2012
Interesting story, but I'm kinda confused about the.. Well the whole thing actually.
| Sasaui7 chapter 4 . 7/19/2012
Wow. That was total epicness. I loved it! Honda seems like a great character, and I loved the battle. It was sort but great. And so now we find out some stuff about the mysterious Honda. Again, great job, and I can't wait for more.
| Meatbun Attack chapter 4 . 7/19/2012
Nice prolouge! ;)
| clarinetti chapter 4 . 7/18/2012
Liking the prologue, I'm definitely interested to see what happens next. Glad that the OC has come in handy. Good luck :)
| San child of the wolves chapter 4 . 7/18/2012
Wow this prologue was lovely. I can't wait to read the first chapter. Good luck with it. And thank you for using Aisu Oki and Hyou, and Ayama Okiwaya and Rin.
| Meatbun Attack chapter 3 . 7/18/2012
Yes! You chose Katsuya! :D
Good teaser, now i really wanna know what happens. ;)
| RetroShizen chapter 3 . 7/18/2012
Great job so far bro, glad to see you decided to use my OC, can't wait to read the rest of it!
| Sasaui7 chapter 3 . 7/18/2012
Wow. Nice start so far. It seems really cool and you wrote it very well. I'm very excited to see Zakaru, and I'm excited for the plot. Good luck with this!
| clarinetti chapter 3 . 7/17/2012
Hi, this kind of took longer than I thought it would, but hopefully it will help with getting this story on the go :)
Name: Rei Murakami
Appearance: Rei is short for someone of her age, 5'5, with an average figure, big feet, small hands, and tanned skin. Her hair is long and a light brown, which she often either ties into a bun, or lets it fall in tangled waves. Her face is heart shaped, with a straight nose, rosy lips, and light shadows under her eyes, one which is dark brown, while the other is a pale violet. On her arms, chest, and back, there are swirling tattoo like marks, a trait from her bijuu, but it is not clearly visible unless one is looking specifically for it. She generally wears bandages on her forearms and thighs, a mauve tank top, a beige tailcoat (where she stores her weapons), dark capris, and comfortable leather sandals.
Personality: Rei is first and foremost a patient person. When others may rush into things, Rei likes to watch first, and only taking action when the situation gets out of hand. This generally follows suit in her strategy- she waits, analyzes the situation, comes up with multiple plans, and considers the implications of all plans. However, the downside to this extensive pondering is that it leads her to worry about things often, ever when there is nothing truly to worry about.
Along with patience, Rei is a kind hearted person. She is a good listener, able to comfort those who seek it, give advice to those who want it, and most importantly, keep a secret. Furthermore, when someone has gained Rei's trust, she quickly grow to care deeply for them, and would do anything for them. Whenever someone needs help, Rei is always willing to provide assistance. However, sould her trust be ever betrayed, Rei, despite all appearences of forgiveness, will hold a grudge for a long time after all is said and done. What is also interesting about Rei is that despite being willing to listen to others, she does not enjoy discussing her own issues, as she does not wish to burden others with her problems.
Rei does not enjoy sheer brutality, which is exactly what she considers being a shinobi includes at times. Nor does she enjoy the sacrifice of so many lives, or the inablity to display emotion. Rei prefers peace above all else. And while she understands that these violent actions may allow for moments of peace, she feels sometimes that it would be wiser to quit being a ninja and pursue other methods to find peace. There are times when she debates instead going into the occupation of the arts, becoming what she describes as 'A lower-class musican who can manage to provide for oneself'. She is still undecided.
Bijuu (Tailed Beast): Mimisu, The 19 Tailed Moth
Elemental Affinity:Wind, and Water to some extent.
Village (if they live in one): Shimogakure
Bloodline or Eye Technique (if they have one. Be creative please): Tsutomai- this is a minor dojutsu that allows the user to target and track a chakra signature so guarantee a no miss on an attack, even when the target is outside the user's visual range. Also, it augments the user's ability in elemental ninjutsu (Specifically ice). When in use, the user's dominanat eye receives amber rings around the pupil's and within the iris, which changes to a dark purple.
History: Rei was born in the Land of Frost to a loving pair of parents and an older sister, Jin, all whom were proficient ninja in the village. Yet despite their anger amidst pleas for mercy at having their youngest child being implanted with the Moth Bijuu, the village elders, in their greed for power and to prove their worth, sealed the beast into the newborn Rei . Unfortunately, the fluctuation in chakra due to the bijuu caused Rei to become a sickly child in her youth, and it was not until many years later that the bijuu's chakra truly adjusted to its host and began to heal her.
While Rei was ignorant to the situation she had been placed in, she was observant in the mocking some gave her for being so sickly and weak, and to the hatred of those who feared the demon's power. Eventually those who feared and despised her rebelled in an effort to kill her- all the guilty members were emprisoned. But not before Rei's father and sister sacrificed their lives to protect her, and the beast was released as result of the child's despair and fury. All had changed from that day on.
Her mother was an empty shell since the event, and it was Rei's job to take care of her. She went to the Academy, joined a squad, and was privately trained by the elders to ensure her strength. Yet she continued to be unable to control the beast within her, the people's rage augmented and eventually the elders deemed her a failure, discharged her from her duties as a ninja, and demanded that she abandon the village. She left the village, for 4 years, to see the world.
She finally began to comprehend the nature of the bijuu, and with the two of them on speaking terms, she honed her skills as a ninja with the assistance of the beast's chakra-it was then that she discovered the Tsutomai she inherited from her father. As well, she increased her studies in music, and mastered both the zither and the flute during this time. Finally, she took odd jobs around the villages and towns as she wandered, seeing all there was to see.
Now, not quite a year ago, she returned to the rage of the villagers, the glee of the elders, and to her broken mother. Despite threats to leave, Rei has plainly stated that she will not leave until she finds someone to permanently take proper care of her delusional mother. So she goes on, amidst the hateful, or curious glances, having an uneasy relationship with the people, planning her next move.
Jutsu Specialty: (Tai, Gen, Nin or Ken): Shurikenjutsu (In concordance with ninjutsu)
| Renjiyamato chapter 1 . 7/17/2012
Name: Mashuu Shinkei
Appearance: A tall(6,4) handsome young man with a lither musculer build, long flowing platinum blond spiky hair with a bang covering his left eye (think of it as a fusion of Madara and Jiraiya's hair) and strking golden eyes, also has a long scar going from his chest to his abdomen, he wears a white long-sleeve top that also covers his neck along with kumo anbu chest plate, a pair of black gloves, and a pair of dark black anbu pants along with Akatsuki-like shoes and white stirrups. On his waist, he wears a thick black belt with a slashed kumo hitai ate attached to it, he has two katanas straped on to his waist and another two on his back and a large sealing scroll on his lower back.
Personality: He is cheerful flirty, who trys to hide his lonlyness of being a jinchuriki behind his perverted not like to show any weakness after being betrayed by his former teammates ( where he got his scar) and becomeing a missing nin, tendes to love anything to do with swords or blades ingeneral. he drinks alot which ends up with him blacking out and waking up with strange woman and leaving half-destroyed towns in his wake, hates any Kumo nin and will attack any member of S.T.O.R.M without thinkning, he will not let any male touch his katanas and will start fighting any that do, loves his body but is hesitant to show his scar to anyone it's a source of shame to him, he'll stop to flirty with any enemy kunoichi in battle but if anyone he cares about is in danger he will fight seriously
Bijuu (Tailed Beast): Eighteen tailed wolverine( nineteen alright if eighteen is taken).
Elemental Affinity: Lightning, wind and little bit of earth
Village (if they live in one): Missing nin
Bloodline or Eye Technique ; Burēdo no arashi(Storm Of Blades) lets him control any metal weapon within a 100 feet of him, it a offshot of the magnetic release whilst it dosen't have the raw moving power of the magnetic release it makes for it up in it moveing speed and precision
History: he was born in kumo but his mother( who he gets his bloodline from) was a suna kunoichi who came to kumo after she married his father who died in battle a few months before he was born, he was made a jinchuriki after he was born because his bloodline matched up well with the 18 tailed wolverine his mother who wanted him to be safe started his training in the use of his bloodline and the shinobi arts early and found him to be exceedingly talented sadly she died before he could finish the academy ,Considered a genius in the field of nin and kenjutsu was fasttracked through the academy and graduated by the age of 7 chunin by 8 and jounin by 10, and was a part of S.t.O.R.M( Kumo anbu) by age 11 and captin by the age of 14 was betrayed a year later on a border petrol mission his team mate falcon who wanted to kill him because he was a jinchuriki sold him out to suna hunter nin, after going beseark and using the 18 tails chakra for the first time he knew he couldn't go back to kumo especially in his current state so he became a missing nin. for the next two years he took on odd jobs and avoiding the kumo nins that came to take him back to kumo
Jutsu Specialty: Ken, nin
If you want anymore info let me know.
| xXxAllyRoarsxXx chapter 3 . 7/17/2012
Name: Rima Tsukiyomi
Appearance:She has a slender, perfectly proportioned body, and her hair is a light Purple shade, and is perfectly straight. When left alone it will hang just below her Waist in layered locks of Violent . Rima often uses black hair ribbons(Bells at the End) to tie it up into pigtails high on each side of her head: the only part that is left alone is the bangs that fall just above her eyes and shorter hair on the side of her face. Her eyes are big and of a blue color similar to cerulean. Rima has the natural Light Caramel skin wears a short Red dress with a white stripe going around her stomach and back area with a large Black kimono bow in the back. There are very thin white lines that form a design of intricate irises and vines. The dress is a halter top with long sleeves that go an inch or two past the tip of her fingers, so her hands are never entirely visible when walking normally. Underneath the dress she wears fishnets all over her entire body, except for below her knees. For shoes, she wears the traditional ninja shoe in white.
Personality:She is very arrogant and uses a lot of sarcasm when she talks. She also has a smart mouth. She that Kid that almost everyone hates. She Headstrong, Cold, Reluctant and even Hostile will get grumpy, cross her arms, and won’t speak for hours. She is extremely petite, cold. Most of the boys in her class admire her because of her beauty and passive personality, while the girls are annoyed by her because of her arrogance. She "fake-cry" when People Her Ignore, though Tsunade is the only one who can see right
Bijuu (Tailed Beast): 18 Tailed Hyena
Elemental Affinity: Lightning and Fire
Village (if they live in one): Amegakure (Village Hidden by Rain)
Bloodline or Eye Technique; N/A
History:Rima a Only Child her father ( Ryou ) is a Assassin who was sent with his Older Brother( Mikuo) to kill a wealthy Family of when he meet Rima Mother ( Ami) he kill her whole family when he was going to kill her she told him that she will do any just do kill her. He didn't care but his brother thought it will be a good idea to take her with them so they did. Ami was Really nice to them even tho they kill her whole family. Ryou took interest in her and Watch her often making sure she did get into trouble. He end up fall in love with her and accidentally got her pregnant which they both keep from Mikuo. Ami when the whole 9 months without Mikuo knowing but he soon found out when the baby was born. But he did something they both thought he wouldn't do he love the child. But one day when Ryou was out he came back to a dead Ami and Mikuo playing with Rima . Ryou said nothing and just walk up to his brother and child stepping over the dead body. Mikuo Looked at his brother and smiled saying we have no use in her any more. From That day they trained Rima To Become the Perfect Assassin which she has become. They trained her to work for the Most Wealthy (like Doing their dirty work) For Money And to kill anyone who gets in her she lives on her own
Jutsu Specialty: NINJUTSU
| San child of the wolves chapter 3 . 7/17/2012
Wow this graet so far. I can't wait to read the first chapter. Good luck with it. I'm almost finished with the Nineteen tails. I'll have her finished shortly.