|Reviews for Evil Rises Again series: The Awakening|
| isabella chapter 4 . 8/19/2013
pls right more
im dying from the suspence!
| EnigmaticPerson chapter 5 . 4/3/2013
Wow, I must say, nicely done! I feel like your style improved in this story, in comparison to 'The Darkness Awaits'. I still think longer chapters would help, though these chapters were longer than others, and it might be the me who wants to find out about what happens saying that, but I AM a picky reader [who is really a weight; really, I sit here and sift through stories and be picky and naggy about them, don't write at all]. On another note, your videos on Youtube were helpful. The character describing one saves you the time of describing them here, though in my opinion, It's good to find a way to still mention characteristics, since it helps, even a little, to improve style in writing.
Alright, three things I want to mention: to start, you repeated sorting hat songs. I am quite aware that thinking of a rhyming poem takes a while, but the sorting hat isn't supposed to repeat songs. I believe that was the one you reused appeared in Harry's first year, 'The Philosopher's Stone'? I'm not sure, and I don't feel like checking [even though the bookshelf is, like, one meter away, and I can actually SEE 'The Philosopher's Stone right now...].
Second: Maybe Hogwarts current transfiguration professor is a little off, but turning live animals, birds, to be exact, into goblets? First of all, birds and goblets have nothing in common to each other. Second, even though I don't do magic myself [that would be FREAKING amazing!], I would think transfigurating a live creature would be harder than solid object to solid object. Third, it troubles me that it took Scorpius NO time at all to practice [or so it was implied], and he still did the spell properly. I just think something's off about that. I think they should have started with matchsticks to needles like in 'The Philosopher's Stone', or something like that.
Third: Originally, this point was to address the how you've put something I really appreciate into this story, but I've expanded it the point altogether, so to start, I want to point out that in your video, there are a whole ton of Weasleys present at Hogwarts right now. Just a comment. I want to note this Nukpana Seth character. He's definitely cut out for the job of bully, and antagonist [I don't actually know what to call it... not the big bad guy, but a sort of minor antagonist? That's just what I'll call him, I guess...]. I can see him being the next Draco Malfoy [in the books. Your Draco Malfoy is cooler]. But, wow, this whole thing off of the fact the professor called on Al instead of him? Well, Draco got mad at Harry over a small matter too, so...
Alright, I'll have to turn it into 4 points now. I can easily see myself loosing it and ranting here, so you have been warned: I really like how you implemented the entire,'all Slytherins are bad people' conflict into this story. I agree wholeheartedly. Why are all Slytherins like that? Because, in my opinion, all the older students expect that, and because of that, end up with rotten Slytherins. But here in this story, someone else finally noticed. Will Al ever try to do something about it? Probably, I'd say [YES! I managed not to rant].
So, good job, and I think all of us readers will stick with you, until whenever you come back. See you then!
P.S. Sorry, I meant to post this review last night, but my dad caught me writing this, like, one minute after bedtime and got mad at me. Sheesh.
| Aleksandryna-Zinnaella chapter 4 . 11/18/2012
Please update soon! This is really good, and I can't find anything bad to comment on (which is especially good, as I am extremely pedantic).
| Pikachu087 chapter 3 . 11/3/2012
| Pikachu087 chapter 2 . 11/3/2012
CAN SOMEONE EMAIL THIS STORY TO J.K. ROWLING? OR AT LEAST TELL A NEWS REPORTER?
| Pikachu087 chapter 1 . 11/3/2012
| ThankfulPotterhead chapter 3 . 10/19/2012
i love it :) you are an amazing writer :) update soon :)
| mj chapter 2 . 10/4/2012
update saw your video and i love the first few chapters please update!
| ThankfulPotterhead chapter 2 . 9/7/2012
DUDE I GOT CHILLS IT WAS AMAZING I CAN NOT EVEN WAIT TO READ ANOTHER CHAPTER. THE WAY YOU CAPTURE EVERY MOMENT AND EMOTION IT IS SO AMAZING. AND THE WAY YOU CAPTURE EACH CHARACTER IT IS LIKE YOU ARE J.K. ROWLING HERSELF :) YOU SHOULD SEND THIS TO J.K. ROWLING AND HAVE HER PUBLISH THIS FOR THE NEXT GENERATION BOOKS I LOVE IT PLEASE UPDATE SOON :)
| Guest chapter 2 . 8/25/2012
I rhonk that albus shouldnt be like that he is too tough but it is your story so you choose pleaae write more
| weasleyjumper chapter 2 . 8/7/2012
Hey! It's SlytherinRoseStar, you might not remember me, I commented on your video on youtube? Wow! I just finally found this and I love it! Is it going to stay in first year the whole time, because the romance can't be too evident then. Actually, scratch that, lily is in your character videos, so it can't stay in first year, sorry. Awesome, amazing story,update soon please ...
P.S. SCORROSE FOREVEEEEEEEEEER!
| 4ntisocial chapter 2 . 7/24/2012
I love it! (: Really Good :D. I love how you put a twist to the story and made Al WANT to be in Slytherin. Please update soon! (:
| LilDevyl chapter 2 . 7/24/2012
Damn! I thought Rose might be the sensible one and not criticize Slytherin since she was the one who broke tradition as well. Update soon!
| sara253xxx chapter 1 . 7/13/2012
heyyy interesting first chapter! please update soon! XD cant wait!
...is this story going to be rose/scorpius? :/