|Reviews for Subtle Variations|
| Crescent Pulsar chapter 4 . 7/23/2012
I'm not sure what variations the title of your story eludes to, seeing as the ones I noticed were at best small rather than subtle (there's a difference); but what's in a name, right?
Anyway, aside from several typos/misspellings (loose and loosing instead of lose and losing, since instead of sense, of the ones I clearly remember), a few missing words and such, the story's written pretty well. It has also caught my interest, so it has that going for it too. ;p Speaking of said interest being caught, a part of it is wondering how significant a role the Negima and/or Love Hina series will have in the story, aside from Ranma learning the Shinmei-ryū. (I've just started to read Negima, so I'm wondering - at least in regard to the Aoyama family - if the sex of the practitioner matters, since I think that there are some male practitioners but I only know of those from the Aoyama family being female.)
Aside from that, I was a little disappointed that Ranma's curse was an issue at all with his mother, since it hadn't been in the (manga) canon. Both when she suspected that Ranma changed sex, and when she found out that it was true, nothing about manliness or seppuku came up; it's the actions and behavior that she was judging.
Also, I'm hoping the aversion to wearing girls' clothes clears up quickly enough. I suppose there could be differences considering this Ranma doesn't have three or so years of memory and experiences that the canon Ranma did, who - depending on your characterization of this younger Ranma - was probably worse off, but canon Ranma was reasonable about it once he had the clothes on the first time. And it certainly didn't stop him from the multitude of times he chose to wear various female outfits on his own initiative, to the point where a lot of his plans seem to have a "turn into a girl and dress up as one" rationale as a default part of them. Far from saying that he should like wearing girls' clothes, what I'm hoping for is that he at least tolerates them enough to consider them and use them for this or that reason.
| Anonymous618 chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
Good story overall. I like that you corrected the fanon error of Anything Goes disdaining weapons from a previous chapter, that speaks well of you. I like what you're doing here so far, just be careful about the fanon and continue to build your story well.
| Jerry Unipeg chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
GREAT CHAPTER! (*x4) Great to see Ranma have a family and good time in his/her life.
| Jerry Unipeg chapter 3 . 7/22/2012
GREAT CHAPTER! (*4) Great to see Ranma with his/her mother as a family.
| irnzenmonk chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
very good chapter ne
| MoonlightBushido chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
Loved the food battle scene between Usagi and Ranma.
| xArtehx chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
great so far looking forward to seeing how it progresses
| ken28 chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
| Menooshuh chapter 4 . 7/22/2012
I noticed all the different series mentioned. Will they be making an appearance in your story?
| Hishin Trueflame chapter 4 . 7/21/2012
just wanted you to know why Ranma should never dress up as a female
wile if he turns into a girl dressed as a male will just mark him/her as a tomboy in public
what would happen if he turned into a guy wile dressed as a girl?
| Guest chapter 3 . 7/19/2012
*Blinks* Cool! I can't wait to see what happens next!
| Hammerchuckery chapter 1 . 7/20/2012
Great start! The story flows nicely and most importantly isn't chock full of cliches. Typos are barely noticeable as well. Hope to see more soon.
| das chapter 3 . 7/17/2012
| Boristus chapter 3 . 7/19/2012
Riniko22 - Ranma took the trains on boy-form, it's just his first time using a subway, and he's doing it in one of the most heavily-populated cities on the world. He's used to being on the road, and in the wilderness with very few people around; being packed into even a normally-loaded train car is going to be out of his comfort zone.
paili-chan - It's also illegal in Japan to marry if the groom is under 18. Didn't stop them from trying in canon, anyways. If anything, dragging Ranma to the Tendo's that early would have been one of his rare "good" ideas; it gives the girls and Ranma the chance to get to know each other before they get them married. This, being Genma and Soun, means that they probably would have gotten impatient and engaged Ranma and one of the daughters a few minutes later, anyways. It makes sense to them.
| paili-chan chapter 2 . 7/16/2012
Okay Genma and Soun HAD to be kidding if they SERIOUSLY thought that they could havd gotten away with marrying off their 12 year old son to the one of the other fathers 12, 13, and 14 year old daughters. One that had to be illegal even in Japan, and what kind of priest would do it in the first place? I'm surprised the girls didn't put up a fight or argument about it when they were told that one of them was expected to marry some boy they don't even know. I mean do the three girls (mostly Akane since this is obviously BEFORE the whole incident with Kuno that would turn her into a major boyhater) even LIKE boys at their age or even interested in DATING a boy let alone MARRYING one before they even have a chance to check their options in what KIND of boy THEY like or WANT to marry?