|Reviews for Playing God|
| pandadora chapter 24 . 12/11/2013
I hope writing that novel went well for you. :) Patiently waiting for the new chapter, take as long as you need.
| WhiteLadyDragon chapter 24 . 11/9/2013
I'm afraid I'm gonna have to side with Ruin Takada, on just about everything he said. I'm not crazy about Light/OC stories because of how OOC he tends to get in them; in the end the guy loves himself too much and looks down on everyone too much to truly love anyone or see them as an equal. And this story pretty much showcases all the problems I've seen crop up with that pairing.
Since I said I agreed with RT, I won't repeat what he said. But I will say one thing: stop with the footnotes and posting ANs as chapters. What is this, the sixth time you've done this? Do you have any idea how disappointed you make the readers who subscribed to this when after all this time they click on the link in their inboxes and find yet another excuse they don't care about? It just makes you look and sound foolish.
| ElykaEvelyn chapter 23 . 9/26/2013
I just read all of this and it's so good! I was sad to see it hasn't been updated in a while :(
| gaara king of the sand chapter 23 . 8/8/2013
sorry i've had a lot going on when your story updated i forgot so anyway i like the chapter and well ya here's my review i hope you update again soon till next next message bye
| Ruin Takada chapter 23 . 8/6/2013
Number 1, your notes are still something I have a grudge against. If you must do them, only have one note concerning such as the trascript notes the very first time you do it and then never again. There are superfluous, and render the reader very aware that they are reading a story. That's not a good thing! It really drags down the flow of what could have been a semi-decent story.
The only author capable of using footnotes necessarily and to the benefit of the story is Mark Z. Danielewski, author of House of Leaves, The Fifty Years Sword, and Only Revolutions. Unless you can make the footnotes matter and benefit the story, don't for the love of All Holy Fucking Elder Gods use them. I'd have told you this sooner, but look at the footnotes for this chapter! You are holding the reader's hand and making them feel like a moron! No reader wants to feel like that when they read any book! They want to feel clever, or at the very least content with the world!
Number 2, your RQOTD is just a form of peer pressure forcing your readers to ask what you want them to ask. If you really want a measure of what tyour readers care about and by how much, let them ask on their own merit! Don't use these RQOTDs! If they care, they will ask, and when you use the Random Questions, you remind me of certain Mary Sue authors who think nothing but their work (which is OBVIOUSLY a literary classic in the making) matters to their readers and anyone who doesn't is a big meanie doo-doo head! You're fishing for compliments, stop it.
Number 3, 'chappie' makes you sound like a 13 year old. I can't take you seriously. I know this is a dumb fanfic about an original character with no discernable personality or individuality (I honestly cannot think of one physical or personal quality that Kuro posseses; she's just like every other Death Note fandom OC/Mary Sue (i.e. Completely blank and paper-thin)) but you must still take everything you write as seriously as you would if this was an original work set for publishing.
Number 4, I don't care about your personal life, and I don't want promises. If you take this seriously, and your readers appreciated your work at all, then you'll update when you update and your readers will read it when it's online. Excuses are pathetic, and making them makes me view your work as not only childish, but not worth my time. There's no professionalism here! If you must tell everyone what you've been up to and think anyone cares, get a livejournal, blogspot, facebook and/or twitter account. At the beginning and end of chapters are no places to put your little life updates. I had a haircut this weekend, do you think anyone genuinely gives a shit? Neither do your readers!
In short: Act professionally, don't hold my hand, and don't treat people like morons while acting like one yourself. When you've sorted it out, only then will I talk about the merits and failings of your story.
Please for the love of God improve,
| Time-Dog chapter 23 . 8/5/2013
I hope L doesn't find out about Kuro! Awesome job on getting into Light's head by the way, very accurate in my opinion! Can't wait for me!
| Shadow knight1121 chapter 23 . 8/3/2013
Great chapter I can't wait for the next one though.
| Mazgrl98 chapter 23 . 8/3/2013
You can't find what you're not aware of. That's like being asked to find someone you know nothing about, like what they look like or where they live. Then again, L is a genius, so he could find her if he wanted to, I guess.
Glad you're back. :)
| Southparkfreak101 chapter 23 . 6/30/2013
Hope you update soon!
| gaara king of the sand chapter 22 . 6/30/2013
you know i was just about to review this story this morning and i had to leave with my day to the store to help him get food the the next two weeks and then i come back and find you updated you have to say that is the weirdest thing that's happened to me all day well till next message bye
| dragon matt blue chapter 23 . 6/30/2013
cool hope it soon i have not read any good death note storys but yours
| dragon matt blue chapter 22 . 6/1/2013
great ch and hope for more
| JIMIRMA chapter 21 . 5/29/2013
Cool story. I do hope Light ends up as some God. But what about that dream of Lights at the beginning him having wings and having a Goddess, is that some premonition?Prophesy?
| VampireSiren chapter 20 . 5/13/2013
That was a sweet and adorable chapter! :)
| VampireSiren chapter 21 . 5/11/2013
..wow. read all twenty-one chapters of this story, and omg - it's FABULOUS! :)