|Reviews for Necessary For Survival|
| Lex chapter 1 . 8/19/2012
I thought this was really nice.
The only real piece of constructive critisicm I have for you is your opening sentence. It wasnt bad; no, not at all. But in order to really bring it up a notch, take your story to the next level; you gotta think of ways to use one sentence; a single word even to draw your audience in. The beginning of your story can decide if your reader chooses to continue on or gets bored and abandons it all together.
I was really rather fond of your story; this is actually one of the few generic fics I can stand to read.
I liked the plot around the story, and it was refreshing to see what other people thought of how Scipio would react to Prospers feelings.
Ive always thought that despite the other orphans having more of a history with him; Scipio seemed to be almost dependent (in a strange, backwards, totally not litteral way,) and more attached (while still being strong-willed and stubborn, excuse my redundancy,) to Prosper.
All in all; you did a very good job. I look forward to seeing more from you.