Good srory, keep it up

Well, I finished this last night and wow. I couldn't stop reading it. I love how Loki changed toward Kenna. Really wonderful story!

I know this is complete and it's been for a while but I just found this yesterday morning and I've been addicted to it since. I love dark Loki and you write him very well. I'm supposed to be doing more important things right now but I just can't stop reading this.

Chapter 4:

First paragraph, you wrote, "She couldn't even being to explain..."
Should be "She couldn't even begin to explain..."

Chapter 3:
You wrote, "You're brother..."
You're translates into "you are".
I believe that you meant to write "your".

I loved this story! Exlent read. I couldn't put it down. On more then one occasion my tablet died in mid chapter because I forgot to plug it in. Exlent story. I have one sing question. Do they ever have kids?

AAAAAAAAAAAAAH! I need to sleep and I just want to continue reading. *throws Loki tantrum*

Well, I surely would pay for that snake.

LOL. Ever so changeable, Loki? Giving the papers, regretting giving the papers. He's such a lovely bundle of contradictions. I wanna keep her; I don't like this sentiment I'm feeling. Your portrayal of him is quite superb. It's exactly how I'd imagine he'd behave. And of course, hiding that he can already take her there in an effort to win her over is definitely the scheming Loki we all love.

Ah, there was that bit of doubt that he might not hold up his end of the bargain, which definitely makes sense to have on her end, especially after that display of not wanting her to quit the bargain at all.

And wow, he already told her about her new life. I'm shocked. I suppose dragging it on would only be more hurtful. Fortunately, there are plenty of chapters to come, so I know this fic ain't over yet. Lucky me.

I absolutely loved this chapter. How she changed the balance of power by simply letting go of their deal that was a brilliant plot twist. I liked how it showed that he already has formed an attachment to her, because he doesn't want to let go. *sniggers*

And indeed, well played. I loved that bit, loved how she tossed that line back into his face. When she pulled out that kerchief, I could feel it coming and was already lolling about it in advance. She didn't disappoint.

Aha! New FFnet review comments allow you to log in without taking you away from the story or deleting what you wrote in your review. Finally a change I can be happy about. I just saw your comment in your AN of chapter 10 about this chapter and recalled how often that happens with explicit scenes and how discouraging it can be.

So, here goes: I think you did a marvellous job at this chapter. I love the tenseness of it and the way he presented her that book and takes joy in her embarrasment - he's the god of mischief after all.

I really like how you write Loki. I absolutely loathe the many overly fluffy, poor misunderstood sad little boy versions out there, so it's a relief to see a scheming, mischievous, clever, dominating one. He's certainly keeping her off balance with his reactions.

I also want to thank you for having her make a face when he asks how he tasted. Finally some realism in a (word ffnet will undoubtedly censor) well, such a scene. You really write the explicit scenes very well and they're quite an arousing read.

I also quite like your OC. No Mary Sue alerts, thank Loki. ;) Her reasoning to want to get away from her arranged marriage is sound and explains why she would put up with such a bargain (even though I'm surprised she hasn't yet questioned the possibility he might just be using her and not hold up his end of the bargain - I was expecting her to point that out during the negotiation, but then again, they're not exactly on even footing, with him being a prince and she of far lower nobility, so in a way that could be the reason behing her not pointing that out. Or maybe I'm talking too soon. I'll just wait and see). Anyway, I like the idea of her being a Healer in training (I haven't seen that before, so brownie points for originality), and you've given her a believable past without overly dramatising that past. All in all, nicely done on characterising your OC.

Anyway, I'm really enjoying your fic and am truly sorry for not reviewing more, but that's due to me wanting to just read on and on and on. So, take it for the compliment it is. I duly thank you for writing, (now I have to go because I wasted so much time typing this when I could've read on in this amazing story),

xx Nerys

I have so much to praise you for! The past few chapters have just been sitting in the abyss, that is my email account. I have been vacationing at the beach, & do you know what goes great while lying under a parasol? Reading. Nothing but relaxing & enjoying a good read. (That's where you come in!) What'll you know, I just happen to have a few delicious chapters about a certain Mischievous God.

These past few have really blown me away. There is a perfect continual rhythm you carry from chapter one to 93. Keep up this kind of writing, & I could definately see published work in your future. Happy writing!

omg i read your whole story in less than a week.
it is absolutely PERFECT. ugh.
man so many tears have been shed. you are AMAZING.
thank you for existing and writing this

The bright rays of sun woke Kenna from her fitful sleep, poking at her eyes with their accusing glares.

That line just took me. I love it!

You are really really good at the dirty talk. Makes me wonder if you dom, sub or switch _