Reviews for Price of Mischief
caitysays chapter 33 . 8/22/2012
I thought this was brilliant. Always do :) Seriously though, I think this was the perfect way to kinda clear up the air and also make everything seem more complicated. Brilliant. Were the Avengers watching this all go down? That would be interesting, you should write the same chap in their pov and their commentary. Or a discussion afterwards of what happened. Just ideas of course, can't wait to see what you come up with! Love it!
Catherine Spencer chapter 32 . 8/22/2012
I actually like your story and that says a lot. It means that you have kept the characters in character well... most of the time. That means you didn't make Loki sound like a desperate, 18 years old brat who falls in love with the first 16 years old Mary Sue he sees. The original character is also quite well-portrayed and the story is interesting so far.

If you allow me, I will give you some piece of advice.

First, please try to find more ways to express her grief. Just saying that she cried / her eyes were brimming with tears is starting to sound repetitive and, after a while, fails to impress. If you want to find out more about description, I warmly recommend the book "Description" written by Monica Wood and published by Writer's Digest. It is a wonderful and helpful book and it offers you a lot of tips about description.

Then, I beg you, don't ever make Loki whisper love declarations and act like a teenage in heat because I will most certainly lose any interest, and that would be sad. I don't find many good stories Loki/OC. Right now, I really like your story.

You might also consider making your sex scenes a bit more graphic. Not porn or vulgar, but... you know what I mean. The circumstances in which they happen are quite tense and conflictual. Adding a bit more... not passion, but imagery to them would probably increase the overall impact.

I will probably come back later with more comments. If you want to ask me something in particular, I am always available and I answer at my private messages.

Keep up the good work!
Trillen17 chapter 32 . 8/22/2012
Please, don't ever stop.
KeeperoftheNine chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
Yay! I loved your writing of Stark. Very keen for the next chapter ;)
Eristicka chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
Ooh, you are one heartless creature, and I love you for it! lol I simply CANNOT wait to see how the meeting goes! Please don't keep us waiting too long!
Missjlh chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
I loved this chapter, and the last chapter! I really enjoyed the dialogue between Thor and Stark. I loved their interactions in the film and it was fun to imagine this interaction. I am eager to see Kenna and Loki reunited in the next chapter!

And - I have to say, you are awesome at updating so regularly! Kudos, and thank you!
Lae D Snowflake chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
*flails away* gaaaaah! I should've seen the drugging coming! Its perfect for Black Widow!
Idk why but I kept finding myself giggling at Fury's lines. I pictured Samuel L Jackson's voice perfectly XDDDD
Let's see... what else? What else? Thank you for bringing Thor in to talk to Kenna! I've been waiting FOREVER for that to happen. For the man who loves his brother so much to not only learn of his little brother's true love but to actually speak to her?! Magneficent! You've set the bar high, I trust you won't dissappoint us with the next chapter. (Hides weapons in case of certain emergencies) _
Leannelusk chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
I love tony stark and his witty sarcasm!
caitysays chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
Tony was great! As was Thor, both was written perfectly. Actually, all the Avengers were written perfectly! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Dunamess chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
I really do like this story but man, these short updates are killing me. They are sooooo short. Merge em or something? Please? I'm not trying to be all write moreeee ayeeeee! But clearly you are splitting chapters up into smaller groups. It's frustrating. Could you please clump them together more?
jnotjane chapter 32 . 8/21/2012
No need to apologize! This is your fic and I am along for the wonderful ride. I did thoroughly enjoy seeing Thor finally interact with Kenna and throwing TS into the mix was an adding, joyous bonus. And as I used to work with a bunch of ex-EOD military dudes, I am well-acquainted with some of the slang (rolls eyes at how "creative" those guys can get with slang)! It was very much in Tony's character as it was in Iron Man 1 (which i watched just last night). And, yeah I thought about my remarks when I read Hawkeye's dialog, but I still don't like him or BW, and that's my thing not yours.
lokiworshipper13 chapter 31 . 8/21/2012
I just found this story last night and just finished all 31 chapters because I couldn't stop reading! Your writing is so good, the story and characters are awesome! I am anxious for the next chapter but welcome for the break cuz honestly my emotions are all over the place! :)
harleyquintessential chapter 31 . 8/21/2012
This may be the first time I can say an original character is part of my OTP. I love Kenna to pieces.
KeeperoftheNine chapter 31 . 8/21/2012
Splendid! I could see how this was difficult to write, but you did a damned fine job of it! Now that everything is out in the open, I am curious to see what life holds for Kenna - and for Loki too!
Lae D Snowflake chapter 31 . 8/20/2012
Shit just got real! Damn you black widow and your estrogen charms! Woooow I'm sorry but I agree it was time for Kenna to break. What did you make Kenna take at the end? What's going to happen next? _
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