|Reviews for Sins of The Father|
| circeanTransient chapter 20 . 2/10
Aw shit, there isn't a sequel. That has traumatized me, I'm uncertain I'll ever trust an author again. Wow.
| circeanTransient chapter 20 . 2/10
This was pretty good! I was on the edge of my seat til the end. The only points that had me raising an eyebrow were the lack of consequences of bro/Dirk, essentially murdering and assaulting three people after he had the upper hand. Although you do get an allowance for self-defense it was after he disarmed (hehe get it) them, so he'd need to go to court at the very least, likely with mandatory counselling sessions. Also dave lost his trust in Dirk startlingly fast, I feel like you should've stretched that out a little longer. But overall this was a good fic! I look forward to reading the sequel.
| HomestuckCreepypastaLover chapter 20 . 8/10/2016
PLEASE DO A SEQUEL PLEASE I LOVE U!
| Guest chapter 20 . 6/19/2015
"If you give a Derrick Bro's pesterchum, he will want to meet Bro.
If Derrick meets Bro, then he will want to meet Dave.
If Derrick meets Dave, he will turn into a possessive little shit.
If Derrick turns back (already is) into a possessive lil shit, he'll kidnap Dave.
If Derrick kidnaps Dave, chances are, Dave will be molested.
If Dave gets molested, Bro will be unhappy.
If Bro is unhappy, he goes apeshit.
If Bro goes apeshit, heads will roll and bodies will build up.
If bodies build up, but if Bro saves Dave, Bro and Dave will reunite.
If Bro and Dave reunite, they will be happy.
If Bro and Dave are happy, the story will end.
If the story ends, we will be unhappy.
In fact, we (I) will flip shit out if it ends in a cliff hanger.
And if it ends in a cliff hanger, we (I) will demand a sequel. Because the only things that're allowed to hang are my clothes and Mufasa.
| MagicWriterK chapter 17 . 4/21/2015
I ADORE CLAUDIA I SWEAR THAT WOMAN IS SUCH A HERO.
And at last Dave sees the light. HURRY DIRK, HURRY!
I find it a tad surprising how the Striders have this vast amount of luck in your fanfictions. It makes for a rather pleasant plot twist, but it also means they would be done for if not for luck.
| MagicWriterK chapter 14 . 4/21/2015
YOU MESSED WITH THE SHADES
YOUR STUFF IS WRECKED
| MagicWriterK chapter 12 . 4/21/2015
Can I kill him now?
Can I please jump into the story and remove him from the equation? NOW? PLEASE?
| MagicWriterK chapter 11 . 4/21/2015
YES let us bestow gifts of torches and pitchforks upon Derrick.
The hard way.
ALSO, DID NO ONE THINK OF SIMPLY CALLING THE STRIDERS. COME ON.
AND WHAT ABOUT THE BETA KIDS, DAVE? ARE YOU REALLY AS ALONE AS YOU BELIEVE?
| MagicWriterK chapter 10 . 4/21/2015
Oh my gosh...this just took quite the dramatic turn...
I CALLED THE PART ABOUT BEING IN TROUBLE WITH THE LAW.
| MagicWriterK chapter 9 . 4/21/2015
*slaps him* IT'S DAVE NOT DAVID GET IT RIIIIGHT!
I stick firm in my belief that Derrick wants Dave to inherit his tycoon. Or maybe Derrick is on the run...
OH YES ROSE LALONDE DO YOUR STUFF I swear I love that character. She's so smart/clever and sassy at the same time. This time her intelligence could be the key to saving Dave.
P.S. You may want to use the word 'dragged' instead of 'drug'.
| MagicWriterK chapter 8 . 4/21/2015
"I guarantee you officer, if I saw that man lay so much as a finger on my baby, you would be arresting me for murder right now. "
Sounds like something I would say. ;)
What's Derrick's deal, anyway? Does he want Dave to succeed him when he retires from his business corporation? Or is his mental disorders just driving him off the deep end?
| MagicWriterK chapter 7 . 4/21/2015
DERRICK STRIDER *punches*
YOU ARE *roundhouses kicks in the stomach*
THE MOST *uppercut*
DESPICABLE MAN *knee where it hurts*
I HAVE SEEN IN A LONG *elbow in face*
TIME! *kicks him off his feet*
| Shadow Hunter chapter 11 . 12/22/2014
A pitch fork? More like drop kick him off a 30 foot tall cliff into shark infested waters!
| foxfairie chapter 19 . 10/20/2014
get that son-a-bi***!
| foxfairie chapter 17 . 10/20/2014