Reviews for Cake and Lies |
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Rabbtgirl Portal Fan chapter 14 . 6/12/2015 This is probably the best fanfic that includes Wheatley. I couldn't stop reading no matter what. The way Wheatley interacts with all the characters is amazing and all the plot twists were completely unexpected. I cannot ever imagine Wheatley the same way again, all thanks to this! |
Toraso chapter 14 . 5/10/2015 God damn. That was, without a doubt, one of the best Portal stories I've ever read. Can't even really think of anything else to say, here; the literary critic inside me is silenced. And that, that only happens with the very best. Props to you, MVTK42; props to you. |
Fishapedvanilla chapter 9 . 3/23/2015 THAT'S DOCTOR MORON TO YOU! This line was amazing. Pennies lol Caroline... Will give me nightmares... Urgh... Kittens. And. Unicorns. I. Can't. Even. |
Fishapedvanilla chapter 6 . 3/23/2015 This is so GOOD. It's so good! Like, best. Writing. Concept. Characters. Everything. Ever. |
Wanderinghobbit chapter 14 . 1/7/2015 So I found this fic when I was browsing through TV Tropes, and I have to say, you exceeded every expectation I had. I love how you actually worked in so much of Wheatley's canon personality, while adding a slight twist of utter badass. The whole bit with the corpses was really good too, as it was a pet peeve of mine. Don't get me wrong, I love the whole 'miraculous cryogenic freeze' thing, but it was much more realistic to have the bodies not in the best shape. All in all, this fic was lovely and amazing. Good job you- |
Guest chapter 14 . 9/10/2014 I literally have no words. That was...wow. Great work, the portal fic I've been waiting for since getting into the fandom! Will there be a sequel? It seems so... if so, if you still want to, please write it soon! I'd love to read more of your amazing work :) |
Yarrow chapter 13 . 9/6/2014 Goddamnit Wheatley! You didn't have to turn her into a quadriplegic! But you did manage to maintain Wheatley's total bastard-ness. |
Silverstreams chapter 4 . 7/21/2014 So I started reading this chapter on my lunch break and ended up forgetting to keep eat about halfway through, ahaha. Stuff went down in this chapter and I wanted to be sure I had everything straight. I really liked the description of Wheatley being like a drunk newborn antelope, and I especially like how you gave him a creative solution to the test chamber with the lab coat. I like that you give him more depth than just an idiot. Also, the appearance of Bendy (I think that's what they call him? I dunno) definitely surprised me. I don't think I've seen him show up in a fic before! And I also liked how GLaDOS monitored the chambers. That was really cool for him to be able to see her and watch her body language. And the video feed! I was wondering if the mysterious test subject would be someone other than Chell, and WOAH. It's so awesome to see a vengeful Caroline like that. And poor Craig. He didn't know what was coming (though I'm VERY curious to hear more about why she wants to murder Wheatley). Excellent chapter! This raised a lot of questions that I look forward to seeing answered! |
Silverstreams chapter 3 . 7/12/2014 Aaah I LOVE what you did with the multiverse! Since you hadn't mentioned Aperture's president by name in the earlier chapter, I was curious to see if you were going to change it! I don't think I've seen anyone else right about Doug being CEO, so it was AMAZING to see him in charge and how he acted. As usual Wheatley was wonderful, and I liked your portrayal of Rick as well! I could definitely see him as an Aperture security guard. I also really liked the oracle turret girl! Kind of an eerie but very cool moment I especially liked how Wheatley's comment about girls going missing ties back into the whole bring your daughter to work day thing, and how it implied that girls have gone missing in Aperture before. |
Silverstreams chapter 2 . 7/11/2014 Ooooooh I like this chapter a lot! I absolutely love the setting of this fic and also loved seeing several minor characters make an appearance! (Jerri, Atlas, P-body, Rick, etc). Wheatley's thought processes are so cool, and I especially liked the bit about him figuring out the correct way to knock on the door. I also enjoyed the description of the chair capable of holding a gorilla. I look forward to reading more! |
Silverstreams chapter 1 . 6/13/2014 Figured I'd finally start reading this, since I've been meaning to forever. I really like how you're writing Wheatley's dialogue, and also how his babbling carries this entire chapter. It's amazing how much you can describe just through his observations, like when he sees Space Core's dark optic. I look forward to reading more! |
Anonymous chapter 14 . 6/10/2014 That. Was. Amazing. After reading "Blue Sky" for the first time, I figured all other Portal fanfics would be ruined for me, but that was a really great story. As I said before, your Wheatley voice was great, and I loved all the little references to dialogue and in-game stuff that you put in. I loved the call backs and foreshadowing. I love how you've not only given Wheatley a three-dimensional personality but also made Rick at least enjoyable. As it says on the Tv Tropes recommendation for your story, it took my expectations and threw them out the window. This story is dark in places and funny in others (I actually laughed out loud a lot, which may have been weird for the people around me. Especially the parts where I went "Oh, I see what she did there," and cackled a bit.), and I didn't actually lose interest, even with the test chambers and humanized Wheatley, with is another thing you did well and in a logical way. (I just realized how illogical the whole story is, what with the portals and everything, but in the context of a video game's logic it made sense, and it's much better than "find old body in that vault and re-install Wheatley" (not that there's anything wrong with that. I will forever love "Blue Sky".) GLaDOS finding the PeTI and running with it makes a lot more sense to me.) But anyway, long ramble aside, seriously, awesome job. |
Anonymous chapter 7 . 6/10/2014 "something about just looking at it made him feel mentally reinvigorated." You're awesome. I also like how you've put in game dialogue in the form of this Wheatley coming to terms with what the other Wheatley had done. It's nice seeing Wheatley realize what Wheatley's done, but in a more sane way than usual by making Wheatley an actual, functioning human with a mother and father. If he ever does apologize to Chell, I think it will seem much more meaningful and sincere than if just core!Wheatley had apologized to her from space. |
Anonymous chapter 6 . 6/10/2014 I only just now realized you are writing a human!Wheatley story where he's recaptured by GLaDOS and punished. A lot of other fanfictions have totally ruined this whole concept, but you have managed to do it really well. It's funny and shows an extensive knowledge of the Portal universe. This next comment is on every fanfiction in here, but your Wheatley voice is great. My disbelief is being willfully suspended. Well done, good madam. |
ThisGuy chapter 10 . 5/21/2014 Don't beat yourself up. No one's written stories sound quite as great to ourselves than they do to others. You actually did a pretty good job on the scene without overdoing it. |