So Ba'el is getting married and she finally got over Wharf; I'm actually really happy for her as well especially since I'm sure she'd feel left out with Anne having married Dove bar, Dove bar I bet is just like Bochra isn't he.. he is isn't he HAH!

I pictured Ba'el and Toq banging their hands together against the table going: "Tonight we feast, feast on kill p'tah!"
Suddenly, Letant's little face comes out of nowhere asking: "Can I come to the feast too?"

For some reason I thought this story had ended; guess not!

You know what that means though... more reviews ;-)

I love this story! My favorite part of this ch. was the trench digging scene.

Love it!

Marabunta is coming! AAAAAHHHHHH!

At last we find out what's in the jungle! I was expecting alien monsters, or maybe some sort of invasion force, but an alien killer ant swarm is even creepier. I like the plot twists, as well as the juxtoposition of the dramatic main plot against the comic Eviess & H'dean subplot.

Awesome! I laughed out loud at Eviess's thoughts, esp. this part:
She had never really listened to his babbling while on patrol, because she had always assumed it was more of the same nonsense he uttered audibly.

Aaaahhh! A bunch of jungle ants coming to eat them up! Eagerly waiting for the next chapter.

I am SO glad you didn't end the story (as intended) when you first brought Toq back. It's getting really exciting!

I like how you wrote this chapter from Toq's point of view, especially how he was worried about not looking weak in front of his father-in-law. :)

I also loved how H'dean got so distracted by the girls' gossip that he ran into the column! Great chapter, cuz!

Romance and chills! Not bad. I like the part where she punches him. The soldier ants are coming. This should be fun.

wow, soldier ants can be brutal. Interesting foe for your group and how will the win.

More please. :) I love this story can't get enough. :)

I got really caught up in the story. I would have run into the column like H'dean. I think that was a great moment. I wonder if they'll get together? What is in the jungle? Lions, and tigers, and bears, oh my!

Oh, no! Dhaval's little joke is going to blow up and humiliate poor Eviess? And here I thought Eviess and H'dean would just fall into each other's arms like Cher's teachers in "Clueless". Thanks so much for updating, but now I'm already impatient for the next chapter!

I've been reading your stories for a while, ByaSouthernLady. Your other stories are well written, with an interesting & unique (romantic) take on the Trek universe, but "Captives" is your best yet. Moreover, it just keeps getting better and better with each chapter.

Ooooh, I hope H'dean isn't too cruel with Eveiss...And what could it possibly be that Toq saw?