|Reviews for When a Dream is Done|
| Anon chapter 21 . 4/15
You better make a freaking sequel right now, you jerk. :(
| Firsttimernoob chapter 1 . 3/7
Look, I want to start the review by saying that I really wanted to like your story.
You have great grammar, great ideas and you even do a fine job of conveying emotions.
That being said...I couldn't muster the patience to get past chapter 4. Angst is not something I'm against in a story. I find that it is a very important part of the development of the characters, but it shouldn't be the only moving force of a story and I feel like that's what it happened in this particular tale. Yes, I get it, Ash made a mistake and he regrets it, but I could never see him being that much of a coward about facing his problems.
I'm sorry about the rant, but good writers in the pokemon universe are rare and I really wish that I got into the vibe needed for your fic.
| JordanMax chapter 21 . 1/1
Wow that was awesome. Its kinda odd now that the battle is actually over. Im interested to see what happens next if Ash is truly back to "his normal self"
And no probs lol once again I figured you'd want to know and everything :)
| Winnow chapter 21 . 12/29/2014
I'm going to go with that Ash is the 6th Grandmaster as well, only because Quentin says that he could count the number of worthy Grandmasters on one hand, and there were four peaks at the battlefield.
| Popopoyotl chapter 21 . 12/29/2014
Contest: Ash is the sixth grandmaster. That is my conclusion.
| Winnow chapter 20 . 12/28/2014
I thought this has been a very well done fight. It's taken quite a while, so maybe it could have been shortened in some respects, but considering the caliber of the trainers, it makes sense their battle would take time. The fights were very well planned out, and flowed well. It's clear some real thought was put into them.
I enjoyed them, but I'm glad the battles are over. I'm really interested to see what will happen from here on out.
| jeannot1978 chapter 13 . 12/27/2014
Ash and Dawn traded pokemon. Ash's Aipom for Dawn's Buizel. So for Dawn, it is Buizel.
| jeannot1978 chapter 10 . 12/27/2014
Masato Shigen, the first Grandmaster.
| JordanMax chapter 20 . 12/26/2014
Awesome to read back to back updates! Hopefully we get another soon? :)
| TheNiemand chapter 19 . 12/25/2014
FINALLY! Ash got back to his sense.
| lordrednight chapter 19 . 12/25/2014
And now the true battle begins... Took him some time to figure this out, but in the end that's the result who truly matter... I think. Still ! I can't wait to read the true fight and see what Ash's, going to do to fix everything he messed up. And you better not abandon now ! One can't just bring a so awesome story and left it at it ! You wouldn't be a prick no... Something much, much, worse... A betrayer yes sir ! So please... I want to see him get what he deserves. A good slap from May and Down and, first and foremost, a slam of a mallet on the head, and a kiss. For good measure of course, the poor guy has suffered enough didn't he ? Or maybe not... Your call !
| lordrednight chapter 18 . 12/25/2014
That was an hell of a fight ! Can't wait to read what happens next !
| RightHandOfPalpatine chapter 19 . 12/24/2014
Ash turned his hat backwards... Shit just got REAL, son!
In all seriousness though, I'm glad you included the turning-the-hat-backwards thing. Not only does it show that ash is about to delivering one hell of an ass-whooping, but it signifies Ash's remembering who he IS, who he's supposed to BE. Not a man broken and lost in bitterness and a veritable lust for fighting, but the old Ash, one who put his friends and pokemon above anything, and dreamed of becoming a TRUE Pokemon master. If I hadn't already favorited this story, this is what would have made me do it.
| TheeFirstEvil chapter 19 . 12/24/2014
wow say your the worlds biggest prick but its not updateing that is giving you he title its the fact that this battle has been going on for like 5 chaps
Is the answer 10 for the age they get there first pokemon
| GaruAlpha chapter 18 . 12/24/2014
Next guess! I'll be honest, all your riddle did was make me scratch my head. The only thing that came to mind is that he might be the only Grandmaster that uses an unevolved Pokémon, but I highly doubt that.