Reviews for Some Cats Get Too Close to the Wire Chapter 1
Teyerin chapter 9 . 8/10/2014
Nicely done!
Teyerin chapter 8 . 8/10/2014
Glad you continued this story!
Great job on building the suspense!
GoldAngel2 chapter 9 . 8/9/2014
A tensely and tightly woven scene here, reminiscent of the scene with Richard Dreyfuss in the episode "Mother of Sorrow"… The urgency and suspense was palatable and strong. And I love the description of Julie as she tried to reason with Ronald... And of Pete's emotions as he chafed against his restraint with wanting to keep her safe.
And so the story has ended… But it seems to cry out to me for an epilogue. Maybe a scene at the hospital while both boys are getting patched up and a little philosophical reflection on how destructive human emotions like resentment can push someone over the edge, if allowed. Apparently, Ronald's resentment of Pete as the "spoiled rich boy" sent him that way. And a final referral to the "cat" allegories that you had going throughout the story... Maybe as the trio are exiting the hospital, their path is crossed by a black cat… A lighthearted yet ironic kind of twist the to end of story. But that's just my suggestion :-).
Your style of writing for this universe is fabulous. Like I mentioned in previous reviews, I could feel myself watching an episode of Mod Squad based on this story. :-) Good work!
GoldAngel2 chapter 8 . 8/9/2014
Boy, you must've ripped this out pretty quick after you heard from me last night! :-) Or you probably had it already summarized or outlined. Anyway, great job!
Your writing really reminds me of the tie-in novels that were written by Richard Deming. Full of genuine atmosphere in your description, it takes me right into the Mod Squad universe… As if I were watching an actual episode, especially in this scene. The perpetrator, Ronald Stilts appears to be somewhat of a sociopath… Complete with the creepy wall full of pictures of the Squad with X's through Pete's image. :-(. Now Linc is the one who experiences the repercussions of his close connection with Pete.
However, all four of them are going to become barbecued pretty quick if they don't find a way out ASAP.
And since you quickly posted another chapter I am off...
Susan chapter 9 . 8/9/2014
that was a great story! Please keep writing and I'll keep reading! Thanks!
Susan chapter 8 . 8/9/2014
Please keep going!
GoldAngel2 chapter 7 . 8/8/2014
You have some really terrific flow in this element in your plot here… The potential of abduction of Julie really brings home the heinous plans of the perpetrator. Pete murmuring "not Julie" has an aching poignancy of its own. His own ordeal forgotten, you can sense how deep inside he's feeling a maelstrom of emotion… Fear, anger, and especially guilt if something was to happen to her. And his relief when they finally do find her… Bound and gagged but thankfully alive. He's the first one there offering his affection to soothe and comfort her. With this last incident, the boys are pissed off… And ready for action :-).
Really terrific melding of elements in a fast-paced and smooth plot that I hope you're going to finish :-)
GoldAngel2 chapter 6 . 8/8/2014
And so the plot thickens… It appears that Pete isn't the only target of this joker. Now that the coward was unsuccessful at getting Pete, he thought that he would turn to what he perceived as the weakest link… Julie.
However, he's going to find out real fast that she has three very protective men ready to crack his skull if he dares to harm one hair on her head. And she's very resourceful and bright… She's a girl who knows how to take care of herself until the guys get there. :-)
Some more stellar writing… Especially the line "wander down the dead end pit of dark might have beens." Awesome line! :-)
Great work and now to chapters 7…
GoldAngel2 chapter 5 . 8/8/2014
Okay, now you've got me. Obviously, Pete knows who the intruder is, that they were responsible for him being in the hospital, and he wants to deliver a few lumps of his own. I like the entry of the two uniformed cops… Stamford seems like a nice guy but his partner has me wondering. I love the camaraderie and support that he got from Julie and Linc… Especially the way they linked hands together; the invincible trio.
Knowing Pete, he'll be obsessed until he can get to the bottom of the whole ordeal and deliver a little just reward :-)…
Your first paragraph was an absolute work of art for imagery :-)
On to chapter 6…
GoldAngel2 chapter 4 . 8/7/2014
It's been a long time… But Mod Squad being back on MeTV for the summer drove me back to reading and reviewing your story :-).
This chapter reminded me of today's episode… Who are the Inmates...Who are the Keepers? when Linc went undercover in an insane asylum to uncover a doctor's brutal method in treating the mentally ill. It's a very haunting story and an amazing display of Clarence Williams III's acting ability. But thinking more clearly about your chapter, I get a feeling of the episode My Brother's Keeper...where Pete's head injury makes him delirious as he tries to find a killer. The fear for their friend and colleague from Greer, Linc, and Julie is raw and believable. I can almost imagine myself a fly on the wall watching them as they anxiously circled his hospital bed. Very well done and now I'm off to the next chapter…
Sue Pokorny chapter 6 . 10/30/2013
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Sue Pokorny chapter 7 . 10/30/2013
I just recently found the DVD's of the Mod Squad! Haven't seen this show in decades! Loved it when it was on in syndication when I was younger. I hope you intend to finish this story - very intriguing set up! There's just not much for the show on .

GoldAngel2 chapter 3 . 1/21/2013
Once again you created a very accurate and vivid picture. I could see everything in active detail as Pete gave his all, fighting with all his might but eventually overpowered by the fire of the gun he was forced to succumb. His situation looks bleak...for now...
BTW, Mod Squad is being shown on ...I live in MA...every day 10 AM.
Off to ch 4...
GoldAngel2 chapter 2 . 1/10/2013
I like the building of the plot here...they follow up on anonymous tip, which yields nothing and nearly gets Pete bumped off after being abused by a surly thug of a boss but still are without hard evidence of the drug trafficking. And Pete's in the hospital after nearly freezing to death...good thing Linc's surveillance and deducing picked up the danger signals. Still why?
On to ch 3...
GoldAngel2 chapter 1 . 1/10/2013
I need to put you on author alert...had I known about this story I would've immediately read and reviewed. As usual, your handle on 60's era imagery is impeccable, I could see the variety store (that's what they called them back then) clearly and then the way you've created the scene is spot on...and your dialogue is natural with great flow.
A small store...a beauty shop...and a warehouse...all very interesting fronts for a cover operation
I wonder what's about to happen to Pete...of to the next chapter...
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