|Reviews for Wizard Hidden In The Leaf|
| Tigress817 chapter 21 . 3/12
Finish the story!11 OMFG! THIS IS THE MOST AMAZING THING I HAVE EVER READ!
| Menjiko chapter 21 . 3/12
| SasuNaruDrarryFanGurl1994 chapter 4 . 3/7
Okay as I said in my review for chapter 3 this story has potential...and considering how much I detest crossovers, and how high my standards are that's saying something good. However, your grammar sucks. Horribly. You frequently use the incorrect word (as in the example I gave in the chapter 3 review), you the pacing is rushed...like a hyper squirrel with ADHD that is simultaneously overdosing on caffeine and crack, rushed. 4. Seriously? You have Harry (Or Hari as he is going by) a modified version of the chunin exam from actual series? Do you realize how cliched that is? Now having said that, this story DOES have potential. I would suggest you do some...extensive fixing up, going over the computer documents for each chapter, editing them to fix the problems mentioned (which you seem to have a lot of trouble with in your other stories as well) and possibly finding someone to be a betareader.
| SasuNaruDrarryFanGurl1994 chapter 3 . 3/7
Okay this story has potential but you seriously need to fix a lot of issues, mostly oriented around grammar and rushing (I shall detail them in my review for chapter 4.) You also frequently use the an incorrect word for the context. For example in describing Gaara in this chapter (even if he wasn't named as such) you referred to him as a "murderous sycophant" when I'm assuming you meant "murderous psychopath" since sycophant refers to someone who is a "brownnoser" who "grovels and insincerely flatters a superior" which I highly doubt is what you wanted to describe Gaara as.
| God1801 chapter 1 . 2/24
Magic is better than chakra? I would think Chakra would be superior to magic not the other way around
| HayabusaDragonForce chapter 21 . 2/15
Any more updates coming up?
| Indecisive Bob chapter 21 . 2/2
Nice story so far! Some of Harry's ancient secret family spells and potion recipes are WAY too convenient, but I suppose they're just ends to certain means. For those people who are saying that you're making the main characters too powerful: stuff it; there are still people out there in Narutoverse that are more powerful than Harry and gang. Plus, this is magic mixing with chakra that we're talking about here; you should expect OPness.
Why you no update for almost a year?! :(
| He-who-runs-into-walls chapter 12 . 1/27
Jiraya is getting punished for nothing Naruto is all ready showing pervasion heheheheh
| Thebeautifulbick chapter 19 . 1/21
Great work as always
| Thebeautifulbick chapter 12 . 1/21
Yep, way OP-ed, but I love it! :D
| thebeautifulbicky chapter 10 . 1/21
Hari and Haku are so kick ass. Slightly overpowered, but still kick ass.
| thebeautifulbicky chapter 8 . 1/21
LOOOOL Hari makes a great teacher.
| entelejent chapter 1 . 1/19
Sigh. Okay, c'mon. Forced myself through the first chapter; no depth whatsoever, just a bunch of clichés.
| rowanlyn-mirrim chapter 21 . 1/13
Please continue this story. I would really like to see more.
| charm13insomnia chapter 21 . 1/11
cant wait for the next chapter