Reviews for Wizard Hidden In The Leaf |
---|
![]() ![]() It's been more than 10 years and still this is like, the best crossover I've come across. Please tell me you're not dead bro Update when |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please continue this story at some point soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome so far i can't wait for the continuation of this story. |
![]() ![]() Yonare you gonna continue this |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a really good story and I hope you come back a finish it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It my be 11 years since the last update but this is still such a great story to bad it never got finished |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ive enjoyed the story and wish you hadnt abandoned the fic. I was hoping to see harry interact with itachi and also sasuke more further down the line and see what happened with the invasion or akatsuki. I guess maybe this was writtrn before naruto ended as kurama is never referred to by name and some things in this fic dont match canon but i accepted the story as AU and different with alternate characters so i was still invested. The fic has mistakes but it was engaging entertaining and addictive ill give it that! My thoughts on certain things that i didnt like or found confusing. Someone commented: "JosElynne I'm confused. Dog (who is Kakashi) saved Naruto from a mob before. But now, he blamed Naruto of Minato's death and didn't save him from the mob?" This is literally what had me so confused. I dont understand why Kakashi was like this in this fic or why his whole character was a sort of antagonist. Like he went from regular in character kakashi to as if some fake doppleganger replaced him? And it was never explained... kakashi would never hurt or blame naruto or his senseis legacy. Dont get me wrong i like aspects of this different harry but you flipped his personality too much. Like his personality type is entirely different it wasnt just because of his friends or environment you changed his nature too much. Alos would have liked some explanation as to how and why ron and hermione just sided with the ministry and called him dark? And not fred and george? He is also wayyy too capable intelligent strong and perfect. You gave him zero weaknesses and his ego wayyy to inflated which isnt relatable. I love his relationship with his clan though minus the literal abuse. I dont like that his solution to everything is basically abuse. Lije thats what an abusive narcissist thinks. It just seems like someone who doesnt understand that a healthy relationship cant really stem from this sort of abuse. So i dont get why harry would be selfless and caring then suddenly this way and why no one would resent him. Like yeah he grts people to do what he wants causw he hurts them? Yeah they become stronher causw he hurts them? What lmao Then the obvious problematic obsession with houseelf slaves... i feel like thats problematic in harry potter itself and is canon lore tho so i forgave it. But i dont see harry the one who freed dobby and only used kreacher for crucial war info to stop voldemort needing so many slaves to do everthing. Also thought there could have been much more interesting conversations between harry and sasuke. Harry should also be able to understand sasuke despite his angrr and bad attitide. Harry has had the vengeance and angry wanting to be stronger moments too. Furthermore what sasuke went through (days of psychological torture in trsukuyomi by his brother who he adored rewatching the massacre in his mind) would make anyone a complete sociopath. I feel like harry should have shown somewhat of an interest in helping him too especially considering harrys parents were massacred too and sasuke was force fed the visual of it for hours whereas harry doesnt remember. Its like harry experienced what naruto did but he also experienced a lesser version of sasukes pain so he should have been able to see it but apparently this harry has no empathy for this specifically; having empathy for only your own experience is narcissistic in itself. I just found it bizarre that its like sasuke equals bad because he is rude and amgry (when he has every right to be after what he went through he was immature and hurt thats why he lashed out) but with naruto equals good and deserving because he was neglected. I dont know. Also sasuke and narutos relationship being non existent when theyre supposed to be the reincarnations of indra and ashura then madara and hashirama only leads me to believe this wasnr a thing when this was written which is fair enough. I really hoped as well that harry would ecounter itachi who would attempt genjutsu on harry only for it to fail against his occlumency and for harry to be able to counter it with legilimency and see the truth of the massacre and be able to reveal this to sasuke early on after comvincing the third and taking danzo out way before. That way harry could heal his injuries and sasuke could have his brother. Or if he didnt from itachi maybe find out from danzo himself or the third. It wasnt mentioned and was very important considering the massacre happened because the uchiha were blamed and ostracised for the kyuubi attack as obito/madara planned? As it was known only a sharingan could control kyuubi. Which again i guess hadnt been written yet? With itachis info on akatsuki they could have wrapped all that up without wver starting the fourth war possibly saving obito from madaras will too. Sasuke could have gained stretgth from itachi instead of orochimaru. Anyway its a shame this was never finished and i hope that wherever the author is theyre doing well and had their reasons for not finishing this crossover. Ill say i liked the idea and a lot of the events and found the mix of chakra and magc really cool. I hate how most potter and naruto xovers end up making the wizards super weak and useless compared to the ninjas (they would be physically) but im glad in this you gave the magic strength and harry shinobi training just amplified waaaay too much. So it has the oppposite problem of shinobis being too weak compared to magic. I think there needed to be moments where harry struggled more with ninja abilities but accepted he just trained hard and studied a lot. I did like haku having magic but then that made me look forward to more ninja characters having it and that never came about so it felt very standalone. |
![]() ![]() Great story. Are you ever going to update again? |
![]() ![]() ![]() really love this story can't wait for new chapters |
![]() ![]() ![]() Orochimaru: *invades village* Hari, Naruto, Haku and Jiraya woth their summons: You have entered the "fun" zone. Unfortunately for you, the fun is only available to residents. |
![]() ![]() ![]() No updates? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is an outstanding story with a lot of potential; I really hope that you return to finish it one day as it is entirely too good to be abandoned. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Helluva good start! |
![]() ![]() Since Hari has had the House Elves scouring the lands for anything of interest, did they find the Uzumaki Clan Mask Storage Temple mentioned in chapter 618, "The Ones Who Know Everything", and all surviving copies of Uzumaki Clan Scrolls? Will they have also aquired copies of Jutsu scrolls from the collections other Hidden Villages? (i.e. Futon Jutsu for Naruto and Asuma?) Will Hari supply Hiruzen Sarutobi with the Luck Potion, Felix Felicis, to give him an edge against Orochimaru? Will Hari help in the search for Tsunade? Will Hari aquire a Time Turner at some point? Will Hari show his Genin how to fly on a broom? Or a Flying Carpet? Will Haku be creating the Ninto (Nin-usagi, Ninja-Rabbits) summoning contract? Also, will there be a Ninja Mongoose summoning contract? (Given that Mongoose eat snakes). What will the Ninsen, (Nin-Gama, Ninja Toads), reaction be to Naruto having already signed a summoning contact with the Ninko (Nin-Tora, Ninja Tigers)? Will Hari either bring other magical creatures, (i.e. Unicorns), Dragons etc, to show his Genin, or will he take them to see these beasties in their natural habitats? Will Hari ever introduce Jiraiya, Hiruzen or Tsunade to Oak-matured Mead or Firewhiskey? What would Tsunade make of Firewhiskey and hangover remedies? What will Tsunade's reaction be to Hari, (Hari's skills as a healer etc)? Will Jiraiya ever get his hands on a dose of Polyjuice potion, a strand of Tsunade's hair and then lock himself in a room with full-length mirrors for a hour with a camara? How will Hari deal with the problems back in England? Will Hari ever be asigned to fill-in for the other jounin senshi while they have their hands full with missions, and do to/for them what he did for Naruto? (Improving their skills, (Hinata, Shikamaru, Chouji), breaking them of bad habits, (Sasuke, Sakura, Sai, Kiba, Ino, Neji), and helping them all around, (Shino, Tenten, Li). Will Hari ever reveal a potion that when mixed with a sample of blood/hair/DNA of someone, and then drunk by a woman who's not pregnant, make a woman pregnant with that person's child, via Immaculate Conception, (thereby easily reviving lost clans, i.e. the Uchiha, Yuki, (Haku's birth clan), Uzumaki, etc)? When Hari claimed the Elder Wand, did he also claim Riddle's wand of Yew wood and Phoenix tail feather, via Right of Conquest? Will Hari ever tell Jiraiya and Hiruzen of Horcruxs, Deathly Hallows and of the Philosopher's Stone? Will Hari ever create Magen Genjutsu based off of the works of Edgar Allan Poe, (i.e. The Raven, and The Tell-Tale Heart)? Or William Shakespeare's MacBeth, ("Out! Out, damned spot! Out, I say!") Will Hari ever make use of Basilisk Venom? That would really make Anko's day? How will Hari deal with Sauke's Cursed seal? Will he transfer it onto another host, (i.e. a Pig)? Will Hari's Ninja World Mauraders Map grow to include the rest of the Land of Fire, or even the other Nations? Will Hari ever cross paths with Uchiha Itachi and use the Conjunctivitis Curse against him? |
![]() ![]() It is good but, it needs more chapters in it |