|Reviews for Daybreak in Nightmare|
| The Keeper of Worlds chapter 3 . 7/5/2013
Awesome job and the OC rules here look amazing! Please update soon:)
| reminiscent-afterthought chapter 3 . 6/19/2013
Exams? Lol, even on two sides of the world people are having exams at the same time.
I like the changes you've incorporated into canon; the bit about Takuya not looking to enjoy his role as a hero was very interesting, as was Kouji's companion with Cupimon. Changes an element of his lone-wolf character for sure. i feel like you've downplayed most of the characters though; while Tomoki seems reminiscent of the pre-spirit one, I think Takuya seems a lot less boisterious and Kouji less walled off (since he had the dog, that interaction with Cupimon shouldn't necessarily carry through to human interactions, and he would be more inclined to ignore Takuya running into the elevator than commenting out loud.) And Izumi and Junpei didn't really come off as very rememberable...and that bit at the end of this chapter? Did Kouji just kill without a second thought? *shudders* Talk about cold.
| Xros-Hero chapter 3 . 6/18/2013
This chapter is really good in all aspects!
| MizuKitsune10 chapter 3 . 6/17/2013
...Is that a mention of Kouichi I see there? I can think of no other boy with dark hair and a red turtleneck in the Digital World. But I may be wrong. Very good chapter though!
| Legendary Biologist chapter 1 . 11/25/2012
Firstly, I want to say that I'm so happy to see another Digimon fanfic author in RT, so yay for that! Frontier is one of my fave seasons, second to 02 of course. :D
Your narrative voice is excellent, even there are the nice poetic flow and rhythm in it. The repetitions in the Italicized text (the first part) worked, giving the more dramatic effect.
Characterization is great. Everybody is in-character:
Takuya is always rash, just like the other goggleheads in every seasons lol.
Kouji, well, he's a lone wolf all the time. Good that you mentioned him wondering. Yes, a loner is likely to dream most of the time. ;)
Tomoki is easily frightened. Poor little boy...
Izumi is sweet voiced and cute - agreed!
When you mentioned a bar of chocolate, I almost want to say out: "It's Junpei!". So true, he just enjoys eating chocolate!
There are some places in which you forgot to place commas. For instance:
A reread can clear up this issue. :)
The ending is much like 'A New Beginning', which is generally a hooker for readers (including myself). Thanks for the epic read and see you later! :)
| Edhla chapter 1 . 11/25/2012
Disclaimer: I am totally unfamiliar with this fandom.
General impression: damn, woman, you write well. :D
I love the italicised opener. It's dramatic and meaningful without being trite or overdone with purple prose.
I do think it loses a little of its impact when subsequent paragraphs are written that heavily, but that may well be my personal preference and disregarded.
"Trampled like a scarf" is interesting, but I'm not sure it totally works, since "scarf" isn't usually synonymous with something being trampled. However, I do like that you haven't picked something completely trite for that, too :)
I love the rhythm of some of your lines. You have a very good... mental ear for it?
"...apparently always do wrong." I love it. You use language nicely and I enjoy the tone you've taken with this, for example, Minamoto Kouji's "wonderings" turning out to be slightly less than profound :)
I don't entirely understand "Mothers made behavior so annoying", I'm afraid.
I LOVE "I didn't want to get on!" "Welcome to the digital world" came across as slightly trite, but then, that may well BE appropriate for the digital world and the universe you're working in :)
I'm interested. This is the first Digi-anything I've really been interested in. Well done x
| Xros-Hero chapter 2 . 9/9/2012
Very awesome chapter!
| Xros-Hero chapter 1 . 7/30/2012
| MizuKitsune10 chapter 1 . 7/29/2012
You've rewritten this! I'm really happy and excited to see where you take this. And if you ever need a beta, I'm happy to help.
| hitomi65 chapter 1 . 7/27/2012
this story look nice