|Reviews for I Don't Want To Give Up|
| Gypsy Jingles chapter 25 . 3/12
A tough story to read, but written well considering the dark content. I am excited to see what the sequel has to offer... everyone needs some healing 3
| nannygirl chapter 24 . 3/11
First off I’m really glad to see that this story got updated even if they are the last two chapters. It’s okay because the sequel is coming next—Yay! And this first chapter of the two was terrific!
I loved how this chapter was really a letter for Jackie from Donna giving us not only a recap of the things that happened in the story but also giving a few answers to some questions we had too. It also gave us an insight to how Donna was feeling with all of this. You did an exceptional job at capturing her emotions and her voice. Something that can be really hard to do with her character.
Loved the part that talked about how Donna realized how strong of a person Jackie was when they were growing up and how she shouldn’t have been annoyed as she was. And then the talk about Jackie not being the type to have a Plan B. That I think is very true, Jackie was one who always liked things to go her way and if they weren’t going that way she’d try to make them, even though sometimes it didn’t work out well.
Then Donna starts telling her about her and Hyde and what she did. Trying to explain why it had happened, but t looks like she couldn’t get very far.
I loved how you ended the chapter with Donna crumbling up the letter. I’m hoping she’s decided to tell Jackie about this face to face and that between then and now no one finds that letter and shows it to Jackie.
Wonderful work once more! I really did enjoy reading it! I will be back to read the epilogue soon! Till then keep up the very good work!
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/28
When will this be updated? Soon I hope it's good
| Guest chapter 23 . 2/26
Love this I feel so bad for everyone. When will there be more?
| Guest chapter 23 . 2/26
Please write and post more of this amazing story!
| Guest chapter 23 . 2/20
| caitlhasa chapter 21 . 2/12
I really want to like this story. I think you have a good scenario for what could be a great story, but for me you have not treated Jackie with enough sensitivity and the PCP is playing too big a role in everyone's forgiveness. You have set it up so that when everyone learns about the PCP they immediately forgive Eric - this is the kind of scenario I could imagine if they didn't know the girl that he raped and were happy to find a way to call him innocent.
But he is NOT innocent. Yes, he has been wronged by being tricked into taking the drug, but it's not OK that you've had all of the characters forgive him for this. He raped her. The way that you've had people forgive him because he was under the influence is the exact problem that victims of rape face in courts in the real world. Jackie was still raped, and Eric did that to her. Her forgiveness for Eric and coming to terms with the feelings of violation and possible infertility are two separate matters. Maybe the PCP discovery was the beginning of the forgiveness, but it sure as hell would not lead to her DEFENDING her rapist a few hours later. Intoxication is never an excuse.
That aside I am enjoying the story and I do hope you continue, perhaps with my comments in mind. As I said it's a great storyline, but maybe it needs a little more refining. You've got the characterisation quite well, my only criticism (aside from the above about Jackie) would be at the end of chapter 21 - the big fight scene - Red uses the word 'fuck' way too much. Red Foreman is still a gentleman and I don't think that he would use that word directed at his wife, or other women (Donna and Jackie).
| msstock87 chapter 23 . 2/11
Really great chapter. This story is really sad, but you are doing a great job. I can't wait to read more of it.
| nannygirl chapter 23 . 2/11
Great work on this next chapter! It was a much sadder one but one that’s helping us understand what everyone is going through at this time, this really tough time.
I thought the first scene with Hello It’s Me Playing and Jackie’s thoughts on everyone in the room and how they were her family was very sweet. They’re all trying to be strong for each other. The talk between Donna and Jackie was great but at the same time I can’t help but wonder again how this is all going to change when Jackie finds out about Donna and Hyde. It’s no doubt she’ll be very upset and the longer they keep this from her and Eric the more upset it’s gonna make them but at the same time, there’s all of this going on they can’t just blurt it but loud. Loved the moment with Fez, I feel like we haven’t seen too much of him in this story, but I hope that changes. He may not be part of the drama but maybe he can help his friends out.
Loved the Donna and Eric scene, that was such a heartbreaking scene to read, to picture. Everything. Poor Eric.
Then the next scene with Jackie and Hyde another wonderfully written piece with lots of tension. I’m really hoping that things will work out between the two of them and they can share with each other all the things they’re keeping to themselves, they’re not good things but they really seem to be eating at them the longer they keep it to themselves. Liked how everyone went back to the Forman house afterwards at first I was surprised that they didn’t go to the basement but after what last happened there it might be awhile before the gang can go back down there.
Wonderful writing in the next parts where we get to see more of what everyone’s thinking. Some of them were really sad and some a little sweet, some even made cause for alarm. Like the Red and Kitty parts, I’m seriously starting to think that this is gonna ruin their marriage or may have already taken a toll on it, I mean Kitty made the sandwiches for the kids but when she’s with Red she *doesn’t* want him to hear her cry? She’s acting find with the kids but not with Red and what’s worse is Red can hear her crying and does nothing? I was ready to hit him over the head with a pillow for that, it’s definitely a tough time and I don’t think he knows quite what to do but he hears his wife crying you would think his instinct would be to hold her in his arms instead their distant, very distant. I loved the Kelso part, that was extremely well written! He’s not the easiest guy to write especially in moments like this but you did it so well! And Fez, poor Fez, he doesn’t know what to do or feel I loved him turning to his prayers, that’s very Fez like.
Hyde’s part was probably my favorite because of how much emotion you packed into it, hurt, anger, a remembering the good old days, all of it was terrific! And poor Eric, I really wish he would stop beating himself up. Maybe if Donna’s answer is he one he’s hoping for he will! Donna’s pov was bittersweet, I so loved the mentions of their happier times and her feeling for Hyde how her feeling for Eric are much different than them. Really great piece there. And then Jackie, you always do a fabulous job at writing her so I wasn’t at all surprised by the very excellent pov you gave her here. Bravo!
Wonderful job on this chapter again! I really did enjoy reading it! I look forward to reading the next one! Till then keep up the good work!
| nannygirl chapter 22 . 2/11
Wonderful work on this next chapter! I really enjoyed reading it there was a lot of suspense and drama in here but with all that’s going on it can only be expected. The way you’re writing it all out it really great too—Nice job! :D
I loved the little flashback scene it was a bittersweet segment with how things back then had been so simple and fun. They all had their whole lives ahead of them, they were excited not tried and warn out by the drama in their life. I especially liked how you captured the light teasing relationship that Eric and Jackie had. That’s definitely one of the relationships that has changed a lot since all of this started.
Then we’re back in t present and it’s just so heartbreaking to think of poor Eric being arrested and being so injured. I hope they do get him to a hospital first, or at least the doctors there at the jail if that’s the kind he’s head to right now, he just needs medical attention and I hope he gets it/ I really enjoyed your interactions with Kelso and the police, it’s nice seeing how he’s taken his job so seriously. I always find it ironic that out of all of them Kelso turned out to be the one with the more grown up life.
Oh and then the part with everyone trying to figure out who called the cops and told them everything—Brilliantly written part. I liked how there was some accusing and some confessions. I could see Kitty having hung up the phone before too much information was given, but wouldn’t the station call back? Like they do with the emergency lines? Either way I really liked the way you handled that.
And then the letter, oh gosh. That was just so sad. You could not only hear Eric’s voice in it but you also captured his emotions very well! I wanted to reach in and give him a hug half was through reading it. And it was Eric! Eric turned himself it! Oh gosh, the poor guy is trying to punish himself when it’s really not all his fault. I really hope someone speaks up about the drugs and other influences when/if there’s a court date.
There’s so much going on and still so much more to go. The DH stuff, and everyone finding out about that, Jackie having to share her news with Hyde, what going to happen with Eric., how will Jackie and Eric react when they find out about the DH stuff? There are just so many questions that I’m looking forward to reading more about! :)
Terrific job once more! I really did enjoy reading it! I’ll be back to read and review the latest chapter soon! Till then keep up the very nice work!
| kzqueen chapter 23 . 2/11
Omg it's so sad. I hope Eric gets off. And I'm excited for a sequel. It would be nice to get a Jackie and Hyde happily ever after. Keep on writing the good stuff.
| Guest chapter 23 . 2/10
OMG! plz update really wanna see Jackie melt down and hyde an her talk! just so good!
| shamelessforyou chapter 23 . 2/10
Are we still going to see Donna debating about Eric?
I could really see Red thinking that so he wouldn't have to dwell on it but I think he might have the actual breakdown soon.
I loved everything else, especially Kelso's thoughts.
| hayhey3 chapter 1 . 2/10
| Guest chapter 22 . 2/5
Omg love it! Updates wanted!