|Reviews for Pariah|
| jubes chapter 3 . 10/12/2012
surprised this doesn't have more reviews. excellent writing, character development, and pacing of the story. hope you decide to continue.
| AxMxzainyxfan chapter 3 . 8/16/2012
OHMYGOSH! This is amazing! Why is there only three chapters!? Please tell me there will be more because I am dying to read it and see what's going to happen! :D
Keep up the excellent work!
| amphitritess chapter 3 . 8/8/2012
I love your OC, and I love that she and John aren't falling all over each other/already falling in love. Hope you update soon!
| marianasgirl chapter 3 . 8/7/2012
I LOVE this story. So good! I like how you take your time for character development instead of rushing it and making it not so realistic. You're a very good writer. I cannot wait until the next chapter!
| Lukaheim chapter 3 . 8/4/2012
Makes me think of banes men. The guys who they haven't seen before
| bayumlikedayum chapter 3 . 8/3/2012
Ohmygoodness, I love you. You said in your reply that I'm a woman after your own heart and I gotta say, the feeling is mutual! I'm on my phone, as I have been out of state for two weeks and my phone is dying, so my review might not be the longest (and if you're anything like me, - which I have the oddest feeling you are because you like the word pariah - you think long reviews are the best ones. I have heard people apologize for writing long reviews and I'm like NO WHAT IS THIS OMG THIS IS TREASON lol) but I promise I will do my best to speak my thoughts (and that is very easy) and omg I'm watching Michael Phelps with his gold medal. That's cool bro. I was happy for him. Anyways.
I LOVED THIS CHAPTER OMG OMG OMG I liked the blanket part and the coffee part and the chapter part and the marinara part and omg you write JGL so amazingly he's like spot on and omg this is a run-on sentence but I really couldn't care less. (Did you know that I just used proper grammar? "I could not care less" instead of "I could care less" because I COULD care less means that it's possible for you to care less...) Oh. Uh. I should warn you. I'm tired, so I will be very random. Hope you don't mind. ;)
JGL IS SO CUTE OMG YOU WERE RIGHT HE'S LIKE A LITTLE PUPPY IN A BOWTIE. You can't get much cuter than the way his eyes crinkle when he smiles, which I believe you described perfectly in perhaps the first chapter. :) I mean. He's like. Physical perfection. Ferrealz.
But! Your story is about more than JGL. Who I could talk about all day but I could also talk about your story all day so we're good. :) I really agree with you about human frailty and writing what you know best. Writers need to be very conscious about people and emotions and I think any good writer is conscious of their frailty. I adore you for understanding. (I'm odd.)
Words can't describe how much I loved this chapter. I like how well he already gets her, even though he doesn't understand her. I like how he runs her the wrong way because he's a person lol and she's just like GRRRR GET OUTTA MY PERSONAL BUBBLE AND STOP STALKING ME and he's just like WHAT'S YOUR PROBLEM? YOU SHOULD LIKE MY STALKING YOU BECAUSE IM SO CUTE. okay, okay. Maybe he wasn't like that. But still xD you get my point.
I love your writing style! You have so much talent, I'm frigging jealous!
Why are Olympian boys cute? They're like 30 and yet attractive. So competitive too. It's cute. Like they're trying to pr
| imaninja41 chapter 3 . 8/3/2012
Who are the dirt bags outside her apartment?
| Ally chapter 3 . 8/3/2012
LOVE LOVE LOVE. more please? :)
| starfire25 chapter 3 . 8/3/2012
interesting story. i like it a lot. it shows a different side of blake. i like the dynamic between blake and nina. she's like a mother hen. haha. keep it up. and post more soon.
| fortes fortuna iuvat chapter 3 . 8/2/2012
I would just like to write you a quick note of appreciation for your story! It's really great!
Nina is a fantastic OC; I'm already drawn in.
All the best,
fortes fortuna iuvat
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/2/2012
I like this chapter a lot :) It was entertaining and interesting to see the two interact together in the way that they did. Good job!
| Lafayette1777 chapter 3 . 8/2/2012
Wow! This is great. Super detailed, intriguing, and I really like your OC. Please keep it up!
| Saint-Brooke-Lynn chapter 2 . 7/31/2012
Love your story so far! One little pointer maybe is to watch a few episodes of the show Southland. Its a realistic cop drama set in LA. Would help you put with a few of the smaller, more technical details. But over all you do a pretty good job portraying policemen/women. (pops a baconator so i kinda grew up with the stuff)
| crazy.PLEASE chapter 2 . 7/30/2012
I really like this so far! You write first person very well and I like Nina's character quite a lot! Plus I'm just glad for some good Blake fanfiction. There isn't enough!
Anyway... awesome job and update soon! :)
| Dasiygirl95 chapter 2 . 7/30/2012
Love it! Update soon!