|Reviews for Inbetween the Lines|
| Guest chapter 11 . 9/23/2013
these are all so wonderful
| jewel415 chapter 11 . 7/20/2013
My goodness what a delightful tale! Please keep writing this story until it is finished!
| jewel415 chapter 6 . 7/20/2013
I have read the first 6 chapters of your story and I am in love! You write wonderfully well. What an imagination to come up with this story line-yet you are able to remain true to the characters we have come to love watching Once Upon A Time! Thank you so much for sharing your talent.
| she.s.a.shy.one chapter 1 . 6/14/2013
This is phenomenal! Loved every chapter, well done!
| Rubens Lilium chapter 4 . 5/18/2013
I. Love. This! RumBelle forever! xD
| Avatar-Scarlett chapter 11 . 4/29/2013
Please do the S2 missing scenes! We all need a bit of fluff right about now! I love your stories and your style of writing. Thank yu so much!
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 11 . 4/5/2013
"If you were my wife, I think perhaps you would try more valiantly to leave." Ooooooh!
"I took the liberty of moving the dungeon. It's now in the tower." Laughed out loud. Oh, Rumple.
One thing I love about your writing is your references, like Winston Churchill and Mark Twain (plus, of course, the Oz reference in the deal chapter). Brilliant and subtle. :D
Overall, fantastic. Really, really, outstandingly well done. I'd like to see the proposal scene, if you want to tack that on the end?
Thank you for writing such a wonderful collection of vignettes!
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 10 . 4/5/2013
"She had been left with a livid red mark on *her* pale skin". I suspect that was the result of originating this scene in first person? :)
As for that last question...oh dear! O.O
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 9 . 4/5/2013
*Disdain*, not "distain"
That's not true," needs an opening quotation mark.
The actual line was "My price is her," not "The price is her." Other than that...that is perfect. Perfectly perfect.
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 8 . 4/5/2013
Please, at the end of a question, even if it's in quotation marks, don't put a comma. It always needs to be a question mark at the end of a question.
"It strikes me that anything worth having is not without grief." ABSOLUTE PERFECTION. The End.
Accidental paragraph in between "grasp" and "his damaged knee".
"Belle has left you" put a comma here "Mr Gold" &c.
"I would have said yes way back then too." Yes, exactly. Good for her.
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 7 . 4/5/2013
That is simply speaking one of the most wonderful things I've ever read!
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 6 . 4/5/2013
"Lowly" does not mean "in a low tone of voice"; it's an adjective, like "cowardly".
"Alright" should be "all right".
Sorry if these seem kind of curt; I'm commenting as I go. This is actually really good. Sometimes you have different punctuation than I would use, but other than the occasional dropped comma at the end of a clause and one or two missing question marks, I admire your writing style.
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 5 . 4/5/2013
Thank you for making Gaston a good person. Thank you, thank you, thank you. That is what I have always believed about him.
You want a period or perhaps a semicolon, not a comma, in "In a manner of speaking, It means you are an untouched person."
And *Lumiere* should wave *its* arms. Not "Lumeire" & "it's".
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 4 . 4/5/2013
I think you want *scalded* his skin, not *scolded*
He would find sleep *elusive*, not *allusive*
I LOVE death by combustion. That's absolutely hilarious.
| IrrelevantLogic chapter 1 . 4/5/2013
Because you said to volunteer errors:
You have it "Come alone, come along." Perhaps a typo?
Otherwise didn't notice any in chapter 1. I will continue reading.
Oh, did I mention that so far it's ABSOLUTELY FREAKING ADORABLE?