|Reviews for Good Business|
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/8
Yooooooo this was FANTASTIC! I feel like it’s hard to capture Doflamingo and Crocodile’s unique relationship and feelings for each other, but you nailed it! I especially appreciated Doffy losing his cool for the briefest of moments. It speaks a lot of a powerful man not used to not getting what he wants. No wonder he lusts for Crocodile ;)
I really loved how you built up to the moment as well. The pacing felt believable and Crocodile eventually giving in didn’t feel OOC. you really captured them both perfectly!
Thank you for writing and sharing this! I wasn’t finding Doflamingo/Croc fics that really enraptured me but your fic definitely slapped LOL
| holyscythe chapter 1 . 1/4/2017
this is so hot and i love it. can you make more of crocodile and doflamingo.
from a new fan.
| Yuki Artsa chapter 1 . 12/21/2014
DoflaCroc never ceases to disappoint. Most people take a competitive side for the two, but you took it in a different angle — Crocodile's little resistance — and mastered it, which, as a lemon writer myself, I admit it's hard to move out of the usual cliché; you pulled it off brilliantly with the word creativity, plot originality and non-OOC characters. I really loved reading this and I can't wait to read more of your content. Keep writing, 'kay?
| Vanillamoo chapter 1 . 6/10/2014
NUUUUUU! CROCODILE! IT'S LOVE! T.T doffy loves you. Hn. Love him back :3 doffy is so cute :3. Hurhurhur! Thank you for writing such a smutty fanfic :3
| MarauderGirl KS chapter 1 . 5/12/2014
This was freaking amazing! I love it, totally and completely love it *_*
| kireikitsune chapter 1 . 5/1/2014
Pleeeeeaaaasseeeeee make something like this mooooreeeee
| Venere Veritas chapter 1 . 7/28/2013
Wow, this was a great read. I’s really glad someone as talented as you chose to write for this pairing. I love these two together, and your one-shot (?) was absolutely spectacular. Both Crocodile and Doflamingo remained in character throughout the story, which is quite a feat when writing explicit work. However, with that being said, there are a few issues with this story. I’ll go over the ones I’ve spotted, but it’s important that you look over your stories once in a while to help fix past mistakes.
1. He remained there for the past three hours, huddled in the warmth of his thick, black coat, hands in the pockets of his pants, watching the rain.
-Crocodile only has one hand. Easy mistake, even easier to fix.
2. "Please, call me Doflamingo," he said smoothly, his voice as coaxing as a liquid trail of honey - poisoned, most likely.
-This one you probably didn’t even notice. You use the en dash (-) where you should have used an em dash (–). This is done a few times in this story, and can be very distracting since you leave spaces between the words and the dashes. Replace the en dash with the em dash and you can remove the spaces to create a nicer look, as well as proper use of dashes.
3. Blonde vs blond
-This one is very easy to make. In your second big paragraph you use “blonde,” but for the rest of the story use the word “blond.” I know I’ve done this many times, and it can be hard to keep track of which version of the word you are using. Luckily this only happened just once, so it should be a very easy fix.
4. “- if you let me go before I really have a reason to kill you."
- Once again, a misuse of the dash. Change it for the dialog between Doflamingo and Crocodile.
5. "I'll really kill you for that, you son of a bitch?"
-I honestly have no idea why this is a question, especially since Crocodile was yelling the previous sentence. If this was your intent then go ahead and ignore this one.
6. He unbuttoned to sole fastening on his white shirt and peeled it off his skin…
-Do you mean “the” sole fastening, or something else? Once again, if this was the intent, then bypass this one.
7. “incomplete” one-shot
-I made it to the bottom and discovered that this was, in fact, a one-shot. However, this story is not marked complete. In case you did not know how to, go to “Publish,” then to “Manage Stories.” Click on your finished story and scroll down to “status” (it should be highlighted blue). Here you can change your story to “complete” or “in progress.” Remember, some people on this site will only read completed works, so you’ll want to get this done very soon.
Once again, I was really impressed by the quality of this work. You did a wonderful job with detail, and the scenes moved along very smoothly. The more ”descriptive” parts of the story did not drag too long or become repetitious. I actually wish this wasn’t a one-shot as I’d really like to see you work with this pairing again. Oh well. I really hope you continue to write more wonderful fictions on this site.
Thank you for your time and happy writing,
| Adryen chapter 1 . 7/20/2013
I can't believe I didn't find this story earlier!
You are AMAZING! I love this!
It's such a good story, I love this pairing and the way you wrote about them... marvellous!
Please tell me you're going to write more story with these two, either as some kind of sequel for this or another story, but I hope there will be another story with them.
Once again, you're amazing
| The Animal Monster chapter 1 . 7/12/2013
You are amazing, you nailed their personalities perfectly Crocodile, being as arrogant as ever. Especially his "no matter how strong you are, you are still beneath me" attitude was really well portrayed.
Doflamingo is still a bit of a mystery to me but him saying he always get what he wants is true considering his line of work :)
I really did enjoy reading this but I think Crocodile would've followed Doflamingo home simply because he knew that if he didn't comply Flamingo would just force him, also dealing with someone as Flamingo can be quite fruitful...in many ways XD
Again, thank you very much
| GoldviAuvs chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
Wow... You did a very great job portraying the characters. This is definitely one of the best DoflaCroc fic I have ever read. Thank you so much for writing this awesome fic!
| Imma gay bitch chapter 1 . 4/27/2013
I think this story was gay literally
| hikaru.of.sora chapter 1 . 1/29/2013
o/o...well that was-*faints*
but really, really cool story i love how they stay in character really well done!
im gonna check out your other stories
| Filthy-Froot chapter 1 . 1/12/2013
Woooooww! I'm...amazed! You portrayed the characters perfectly! Not a single hint of OOC, it was a pleasure to read! I love how you gave that naughty old Doflamingo the nickname "The Joker" - It suits him so well! And Croc was so stubborn, and still he was the perfect uke for doctor pink feathers!
Keep it up!
| animechick57 chapter 1 . 1/10/2013
I LUV UR ONE-SHOT XD
"piracy" haha crocodile ur so cute X3
Thank u for posting this fanfic XD
| Alexa Hiwatari chapter 1 . 10/8/2012
poor Dofla he loves him