|Reviews for But My Thoughts You Can't Decode|
| Sonorous Serendipity chapter 1 . 8/1/2012
Alright, constructive criticism.
Your spelling and grammar are flawless! :)
I feel like you should focus less on the dialogue and more on the emotion of the writing. What were they feeling? What was implied? Let the reader get lost.
I'm not going to comment on the characterization because of my opinion of Twilight. XD
I also feel like it moved too quickly... then again, it's Bella. She- *censorship*.
Great job so far!
| xXxhurting-insidexXx chapter 1 . 7/31/2012