Reviews for Passageways
Umad chapter 37 . 9/7
The reason Ltbutterfly287. Is upset is because I gave him surprise anal. Without lube.
And I used a kermit the frog hand puppet instead of my dick. My dick was in his sister.
She's 16.
So you can see why he is butthurt.
Imababysitter chapter 37 . 9/6
One thing I love doing is breath-play.
I kiss my 12yo stepdaughter while I'm inside her and keep my lips locked with her.
Makes me cum so quick.
Vacilica Malfoy chapter 37 . 8/13
What a stunning story, thank you foe this beautiful work of fiction! I really really hope you finish it.
prajm812 chapter 37 . 7/24
Когда продолжение
Guest chapter 37 . 7/2
Don’t flame you? You fucking retard lmao. This story has so much potential yet you squander it all over forced plot convenience and unnecessary exposition. You give Harry all this power but cripple him at the same time. You’ve basically turned Harry into Batman, if Batman was mentally handicapped and a paraplegic. I kept reading hoping that you’d somehow sort it out but nope, you ruined what could have been a great story then proceeded to abandon it. Good day and fuck you
jimmy.oz chapter 35 . 6/25
Pretty good story just needs updates.
Slytherin7Piece chapter 19 . 6/5
Ah, I just read the AN on the Black wards. That explanation makes some sense but that doesn't account for the fact that Harry is wearing the Black lord's ring.

From what I have seen so far, a Lord's ring is a magical semi-sentient magical object and is tied to the wards themselves as shown when the three Blacks arrived at the property a few chapters back. So in theory, the wards would not be able to distinguish one lord Black from the other as long as they were wearing the lord's ring. Harry may not be able to alter the wards because they are keyed to Orion's blood but they should not interfere with Harry passing through them as long as he is wearing his ring.
Slytherin7Piece chapter 18 . 6/5
Excellent chapter, bringing Dorea into pHarry's circle was a good decision for this story. Harry and Bellatrix really do need an advisor other than the painting of Walburga and from all of the hints you've given in previous chapters, she is a formidable witch. Also, every story needs a wise or elder character for a source of organic exposition and Dorea can easily fill this role.

I enjoyed the scene with Harry and the three Black sisters, Narcissa's character in particular was very amusing.

The scene with Lily was nice and I am glad you decided to bring her into the Eveningshade family. Her character could add a lot to the story if it continues through her Hogwarts career.

The final scene didn't make much sense to me. Harry is Lord Black as far as I remember. So going by that logic, the Black wards would recognize him as such and let him through or at the very least not harm him when he attempted to pass through them. I know the intention was to force the Black lord and Bella's father to swear fealty but it came across as being a bit contrived.

Also, I really don't like the Eveningshade magic angle, it basically handicaps Harry through the later half of the story. Granted if he could use it without becoming weak after only casting a few spells it would be useful but as is, it just doesn't seem worth it.

Though I am a bit biased as I never liked when a character suddenly developed an incredible ability via rituals or house rings or whatever. I think it's more realistic for them to have to work towards their goals over time. Though doing it that way does take a lot longer to write, it makes the character seem like he or she has earned their abilities instead of just uploading a new version of software.
Slytherin7Piece chapter 15 . 6/4
I have read this story many times before and I do greatly enjoy it for the most part.

One of the things that I never cared for was Harry's power-up because it essentially turned him into a bottle rocket. Now Harry is super-powerful but has next to no stamina which seems like it would be a major detriment in battle. I get that he has to work to learn to harness this new power but there is something very offputting about Harry nearly fainting every time he goes into battle.

On the plus side, I do enjoy Harry jumping between the past and future because we get to see how his changes in the past directly affect the future which is very rare in these types of time-travel fics.

The romance between Harry and Bellatrix is also very well done and I feel they have good chemistry between them.

My only other criticism is that the story hasn't been updated in six years but as someone who has three unfinished stories (one that has been on hold for going on six months) I can't really cast judgement, sometimes the muse just takes a vacation.

I had planned to wait to review until I got tothe end but I wanted to adress the magical exhaustion issue while it was still fresh on my mind.

This is an amazing story and I am very glad you took the time to write it.
Ltbutterfly287 chapter 17 . 5/29
Honestly in your desire to create a unique story you have really just written a jumbled up mess. Did you just make Draco a woman? Then the constant jumping from the present to the past just gets old.
Ltbutterfly287 chapter 8 . 5/29
The one thing I truly hate about your story is the Lady Hogwarts having a body bullshit. Your problem is that rather then give Harry and shred of maturity and ability to discern truth from lies you just strong arm the plot with compulsion charms or Lady Hogwarts to make things play out however you please.
Ltbutterfly287 chapter 4 . 5/29
There really is no reason for him to hide the fact that he’s a potter. I’ll never understand why fanfiction writers have a compulsive need to hide his name and history. It doesn’t change anything if he calls himself a potter and his name doesn’t work because the black family only name their children after constellations and Ancient Greek myths.
Ltbutterfly287 chapter 3 . 5/29
Honestly compulsion charms are truly the stuff of lazy writing. Honestly no insult to you but they really are just a lazy excuse to strong arm a plot that wouldn’t work without such things.
BillBrink chapter 37 . 5/4
I have hated to put this work down each night in order to go to sleep. The writing is captivating. I love the premise. What a shame it is that this terrific work isn't completed. Thank you for sharing it.
HalfBlood Prince chapter 37 . 4/17
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