We're supposed to believe that Hermione, who knew Voldemort had tried to kill Harry multiple times, wouldn't believe Harry when he said Voldemort killed Cedric? What even is this garbage?

Unfinished

Gellerts father built the prison not Gellert

No its Lord Harry James Potter Black Not Hadrian ! Read the books.

Is he going to get his cloak back it not be in the hand of the scum weasel?

Enjoyable story. Could definitely tell when things were slowing down update wise. Do you have a beta or anyone around to help proof your stories? I'm betting after all the years that it's just easier to update on your own.

keep it up though! this story is great and I hope you are able to finish it.

damn thats a great story. please update.

This fanfictions has some good parts and some less good parts, for its good parts, the plot is well developed, the worldbuilding is interesting, and the plot diverges very much from canon and allows for a new story in a familiar world, with familiar faces to be built. Unfortunately, that is where the good ends.

Usually, when HP fanfictions play around with light vs dark vs grey families, they explain that either as good vs evil (canon), or they expand on it. This story does just that, though while usually, it is explained that dark refers to the intent of the spell, or the method by which it’s used (the esoteric component), etc. This instead seems to follow canon in that light vs dark is good vs evil but then suggests that this is not so clear-cut. The author has Harry do evil things, morally reprehensible things and then explains that this is justice, a karmic retribution and balancing of the scales. The characters are described to be grey, they are dark. What is evil is to act on one’s selfish desires, and that is exactly what Harry does. He is also, incredibly out of character, there is no element of his true self, as even in ‘dark harry’ fics, he usually still has some morality, or some code, here, this code is stick to my family, and make everyone fear me so as to ensure my power.

Harry’s ancestral family was killed off and so he goes and murders the descendants of the guilty parties, not just people who had nothing to do with it, but people who might never have done it. Moreover, like in many fics, pagan rites are involved though in this case, they are involved in their true nature, that is to say, sex is very involved. This is an issue largely because children are present at these events, and furthermore, even beyond these instances, throughout the school year, 11 year olds are regularly the subject or object of sexual innuendos or lust, and they themselves make such comments. 11 year old children, (girls at least) do not think about sex. They are not ‘hormonal’ as most have not gone through puberty yet! And the author still envolves them and is a parent! So they know full well what an 11 year old looks like, and acts like, and yet sexualizes them and includes and promotes perverted and depraved rites.

Finally, the main purpose for which I began this story, the love story, is very poorly written. Though it has potential, nothing is elaborated, the characters don’t face any romantic scenes, don’t interact much ‘on screen.’ Any conversation (romantic plot or otherwise) is usually mentioned and not shown. The romance happened in the first 5-10 chapters of the fic and disappeared after that. Harry and Bellatrix met, immediately were attracted to one another (with no development on that whatsoever), had only 1 described discussion (again, not shown) and chose to have sex (for a legitimate reason) and were married about a week after that. Within a month of knowing one another, they were married. Finally, rather than explore real avenues about how to go about changing the future, the author makes huge changes seem innocuous. All plans are developed meaninglessly and too much text is devoted to a description of events rather than a depiction of them.

Finally, Harry becomes way too overpowered in this, and not even in a normal magical way. He is a ‘special’ magical, with extra unique powers and abilities no one outside of his family can have. In the world JK Rowling created, there is so much potential (as countless fanfic writers can attest to) to develop and create a powerful character within the confines of the ‘rules of magic.’ This author didn’t put any effort into including anything magical. In all honesty, this story could happen outside of the wizarding world (with muggle stigma becoming racial stigma and wands becoming guns) with only Harry and his family’s superpowers! JK Rowling’s world and story become irrelevant, the only attachment I might have to this story is seeing familiar characters, nothing beyond that.

All in all, this story had such potential with its concept, but instead of being properly developed, it just became a really long, world-built 12 year old girl’s wattpad story

So sad this has been abandoned. It was an awesome story and I definitely recommend it despite its unfinished status. Hopefully one day it gets the ending it deserves.

Whats happening its been a while

so good so far but the commas! put some commas please!

why. so. rushed? I liked the story, so I persevered thus far. But only 5 chapters from the start to the "Make love to me" point of romances? I'm not inclined to read it anymore.

please update. cannot wait to see dumbbells downfall and all of the 11...

lol, I know it's a common trope in HP fanfic but the use of compulsion charms and love potions to change people's mind and behavior is just so silly. like if it was that easy anyone with a modicum of power would constantly be compelling everyone to their whims. nowhere. since anyone with power could do this everyone's compulsions would all be fighting each other.
not to mention that it is sort of a lazt deus ex machina that allows the writer to explain a completely OOC change in behavior without actually having to do any work explaining...

I wonder how Harry feels about the death of Petunia Evans. The younger self of the woman who helped make the first decade of his life a living hell is dead. Technically, she’s innocent of the crimes her adult self committed against him. For all Harry (as well as any of us) know, she died never having known Vernon Dursley.