|Reviews for Immortal|
| x Bout as Stable as the Wind x chapter 5 . 6/4
I live off Alby & Newt friendship like a vampire does off blood.
so this is wonderful. A great story of Newt's limp that ISN'T bloody slash.
| x Bout as Stable as the Wind x chapter 4 . 6/4
good chapter :)
| x Bout as Stable as the Wind x chapter 2 . 6/4
looove this so much
| AlbyLovesNewt chapter 9 . 10/18/2014
Loved it! Update soon, please!
| DolbyDigital chapter 9 . 9/2/2014
This was a nice story, and I did enjoy reading it, but it really does not feel complete at all. This seems more like a cliffhanger at the end of a chapter rather than something at the end of a story.
| DolbyDigital chapter 7 . 9/1/2014
What was Alby right about? That Newt wouldn't be able to run anymore? And I thought the leader before Alby was called Nick? Again, I think that this would benefit from proof-reading, but the plot is nice.
| DolbyDigital chapter 6 . 9/1/2014
Newt :( I think some of your chapters are getting a little short, though. Maybe you could try adding more detail to help readers to visualise the scene.
| DolbyDigital chapter 5 . 9/1/2014
I really liked this chapter; I think that you write the relationship between Newt and Alby really well. I would suggest you maybe get a beta, though. There were a few - minor - mistakes, but sometimes it's difficult to spot things like that in your own work because you've been looking at it for so long and you know what you meant to say.
| DolbyDigital chapter 4 . 9/1/2014
I really want to know if Newt's going to tell Alby what really happened. And if Alby actually believes Newt's lie. Great job so far :)
| DolbyDigital chapter 3 . 8/31/2014
Oh, poor Newt :( Poor Alby, too. I would suggest that you go into more detail, though. Describe a few things more in depth. It would really help to engage the reader more.
| DolbyDigital chapter 2 . 8/31/2014
I like the alternating point of views, it really helps to show what each character's thinking and feeling. I'm really interested to see where you go with this next.
| DolbyDigital chapter 1 . 8/31/2014
This was a good start, and I'm really interested to see where you go with this next. I like the background information about Alby and Newt becoming friends as soon as they entered the Glade.
(I didn't know you could comment on your own fics. Mind Blown)
| possessedbutterfly chapter 9 . 9/29/2013
You need to update! Awesome!
| vertical-to-the-horizon chapter 9 . 2/17/2013
oh my feels 3 one of the best stories of Newt i've read yet! you really captured the feelings and dialogues perfectly! :)
| Guest chapter 9 . 1/13/2013
Asdfghjkl! I love this :D there are no words...