|Reviews for Immortal|
| AlbyLovesNewt chapter 9 . 10/18/2014
Loved it! Update soon, please!
| DolbyDigital chapter 9 . 9/2/2014
This was a nice story, and I did enjoy reading it, but it really does not feel complete at all. This seems more like a cliffhanger at the end of a chapter rather than something at the end of a story.
| DolbyDigital chapter 7 . 9/1/2014
What was Alby right about? That Newt wouldn't be able to run anymore? And I thought the leader before Alby was called Nick? Again, I think that this would benefit from proof-reading, but the plot is nice.
| DolbyDigital chapter 6 . 9/1/2014
Newt :( I think some of your chapters are getting a little short, though. Maybe you could try adding more detail to help readers to visualise the scene.
| DolbyDigital chapter 5 . 9/1/2014
I really liked this chapter; I think that you write the relationship between Newt and Alby really well. I would suggest you maybe get a beta, though. There were a few - minor - mistakes, but sometimes it's difficult to spot things like that in your own work because you've been looking at it for so long and you know what you meant to say.
| DolbyDigital chapter 4 . 9/1/2014
I really want to know if Newt's going to tell Alby what really happened. And if Alby actually believes Newt's lie. Great job so far :)
| DolbyDigital chapter 3 . 8/31/2014
Oh, poor Newt :( Poor Alby, too. I would suggest that you go into more detail, though. Describe a few things more in depth. It would really help to engage the reader more.
| DolbyDigital chapter 2 . 8/31/2014
I like the alternating point of views, it really helps to show what each character's thinking and feeling. I'm really interested to see where you go with this next.
| DolbyDigital chapter 1 . 8/31/2014
This was a good start, and I'm really interested to see where you go with this next. I like the background information about Alby and Newt becoming friends as soon as they entered the Glade.
(I didn't know you could comment on your own fics. Mind Blown)
| possessedbutterfly chapter 9 . 9/29/2013
You need to update! Awesome!
| vertical-to-the-horizon chapter 9 . 2/17/2013
oh my feels 3 one of the best stories of Newt i've read yet! you really captured the feelings and dialogues perfectly! :)
| Guest chapter 9 . 1/13/2013
Asdfghjkl! I love this :D there are no words...
| Anonymous chapter 9 . 1/10/2013
I like the different points of view here! When I read I tend to get stuck on one character, and this didn't let me do that, so I think I got more of the story. Also this scene/event was one of the ones I was most able to connect with in my head while reading the book, and it seems like we had a pretty similar vision :)
| Randomcat1832 chapter 2 . 12/28/2012
I love this! I love Newt.
| shyyumi chapter 9 . 10/30/2012
I completely understand the computer thing..I just got done my story for the Maze Runner books and I started it last year but never completed my first chapter until sunday cause of my computer! Computers are useful, but suck half the time lol. Anyways, great story keep writing! I missed Alby in the books and threw the book when he died, but felt bad for Newt and Minho as well. Now I feel bad for Alby and completely understand what he's going through. Nice job capturing their characters btw.