Reviews for Long Awaited Lust
jake chapter 1 . 6/10/2015
its land of Ooo not Aaa
Guest chapter 1 . 5/16/2015
dude that's was pretty good just add more to the story don't make it so fast. Also next story try food
peace
man that was hot
Monkey Butt chapter 1 . 4/4/2015
When he said "I love you"...and she woke up...the transition from realizing-what-he-said to realizing-it-was-true and teey both felt the same was too abrupt. You need to add more fluff nnd confusion there, otherwise it isn't taat realistic. You started off great though! They were very in character with their original personas until that point. Also, I'd sugest maybe extending the description of him thrusting into her. Add some more sounds, more senses, more heart beat descriptions, and maybe some more sweet complimets as they make love.

I enjoyed reading your story. :)
PhonkeyMonkey chapter 1 . 11/29/2013
An awkward twist to Adventure Time, but very amusing.
Guest chapter 1 . 11/20/2013
Omg do more stories but not so gross how about they skip all the finger stuff and go to just straight forward sexual activities
Amazing chapter 1 . 10/23/2013
That was amazing!
Jenna chapter 1 . 8/23/2013
Fionna has BLUE eyes.
fyi!
not trying to be mean!
Jenna
Jenna chapter 1 . 8/17/2013
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*nosebleeds and fangasms*
latenight chapter 1 . 6/20/2013
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Snowdrop chapter 1 . 4/3/2013
Ummm... Wow.
Rainbowmania chapter 1 . 2/11/2013
aha i was there..it happened kinda fast tho
Guest chapter 1 . 10/6/2012
Just a little bit cheesy. Just a little.
Lane Brewster chapter 1 . 9/5/2012
one with the oppisite. finn and marcy!
Fionna's Lover chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
me likey do more on-shots please!
Awesome story chapter 1 . 8/6/2012
I love your Story! I really liked it! I would like you to write more chapters, if you can because it's very very cool. 3
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