Reviews for Long Awaited Lust
Lizzy8 chapter 1 . 1/22
That was so hot!
Muggetbutt chapter 1 . 7/27/2016
Is this sex why !
There once was a girl and her name was Fiona was a girl who was alone most of her never really fit in so she ran away she had a mom she loved for dear life. But one day she didn't wake up on day. She also had a cat named cake, why you think she named her that... Well it was her her favorite food k now back to the story. But before all of that... There was a war there were many people who infectiod .many good people gone. Right after birth Fiona's mom was scratched and died the next day... Fiona was only a baby before her father gave up on her she was found by a cat family. She was raised there until... They got old and died. She and cake made house out of a tree. It was convinit. One day they found a girl called bmo. She swore her life to take care of her . One day she got infesting blood on her so she went to take a bath with homemade soap . She brought a towel . In the water in the creek far away she saw a man. This is unusual because only few left from the war. But he was floating in his hand he had a rifle so she took off for the hills the end... Until. Next time
jake chapter 1 . 6/10/2015
its land of Ooo not Aaa
Guest chapter 1 . 5/16/2015
dude that's was pretty good just add more to the story don't make it so fast. Also next story try food
peace
man that was hot
Monkey Butt chapter 1 . 4/4/2015
When he said "I love you"...and she woke up...the transition from realizing-what-he-said to realizing-it-was-true and teey both felt the same was too abrupt. You need to add more fluff nnd confusion there, otherwise it isn't taat realistic. You started off great though! They were very in character with their original personas until that point. Also, I'd sugest maybe extending the description of him thrusting into her. Add some more sounds, more senses, more heart beat descriptions, and maybe some more sweet complimets as they make love.

I enjoyed reading your story. :)
PhonkeyMonkey chapter 1 . 11/29/2013
An awkward twist to Adventure Time, but very amusing.
Guest chapter 1 . 11/20/2013
Omg do more stories but not so gross how about they skip all the finger stuff and go to just straight forward sexual activities
Amazing chapter 1 . 10/23/2013
That was amazing!
Jenna chapter 1 . 8/23/2013
Fionna has BLUE eyes.
fyi!
not trying to be mean!
Jenna
Jenna chapter 1 . 8/17/2013
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*nosebleeds and fangasms*
latenight chapter 1 . 6/20/2013
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Snowdrop chapter 1 . 4/3/2013
Ummm... Wow.
Rainbowmania chapter 1 . 2/11/2013
aha i was there..it happened kinda fast tho
Guest chapter 1 . 10/6/2012
Just a little bit cheesy. Just a little.
Lane Brewster chapter 1 . 9/5/2012
one with the oppisite. finn and marcy!
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