|Reviews for John the Demon Slayer Book 1|
| general zargon chapter 3 . 8/13/2012
Still abrupt! And a little lacking in description, but other than that I enjoyed this chapter. I LOL-ed at the thought of John thinking he was actually short, and I totally get Rylan's reaction to that! I also liked the Hermes bit, and I loved George and Susan! :) Please update soon!
| general zargon chapter 2 . 8/9/2012
Yeah, definitely need some work on the spacing, mostly because it's hard to figure out when the p.o.v changes with everything all cramped together like it is. Other than that, and the story seeming a little abrupt, I'm really enjoying this! I'm also liking that John is actually taller than Harry, LOL! :D Please keep up the good work and update soon!
| general zargon chapter 1 . 8/8/2012
You might want to work on your spacing between paragraphs, but other than that I'm really enjoying this story. The basic idea is sound, but I think it needs a bit more description. I already like Jonathan, and John sounds interesting too, so please keep up the good work and update soon!