Reviews for Challenger
JustGrace13 chapter 1 . 8/5/2013
This was absolutely beautiful :) The imagery was amazing
LawlietLennoxLove chapter 1 . 9/12/2012
Haha, very good!
Ratt9 chapter 1 . 8/4/2012
You write very well. Your word choice is nothing less than excellent and your descriptions superb. I love that way you get into Near's mind so perfectly. I believe that Near is more flawed than most regular people, despite his brilliance. His flaws are just less apparent at times.

There are some things you could work on, though. Overall, the sentences didn't flow very well, and when you were describing Near it started to sound more like you were just listing traits instead of writing a well-rounded depiction of a character. Try writing things that go along with what you're describing, to show us what you mean as well as telling it. Make an attempt to use variety in the structure of your sentences, so that it sounds more interesting than if it reads as though someone is droning out an otherwise very well-done story.

Feel free to message me if you have any questions or anything!

-Ratt Kazamata