|Reviews for The Fury|
| Laur chapter 1 . 11/3/2012
Very well written. Keep going!
| The Jet chapter 1 . 8/11/2012
I'm a big fan of the series and I can't wait to see how this fanfic escalates.
I'm a big person on grammar and editing. I would be a beta if I could, but sadly I can't.
I cannot see any fixing, but I wonder . . . the apartment seems like a perfect shelter spot instead of trading it in to a settlement. I also would hope for some more street action, but I know that you didn't finish the chapter.
| Paled chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
It like it, Nine sounds like a character I can quickly warm up to and worry about. That aside, on the first paragraph there are some sentences that aren't needed. Like this one -she let it rain on her- it doesn't sound right because of the one prior to it, and it just sort of unnecessary. There were also some cases if wordiness but this is all just my opinion on the matter. I think you did well, almost no spelling errors and such. Nice work.