|Reviews for Beneath this Sky|
| Esme Incognito chapter 4 . 9/1/2012
Thanks for explaining the surge
| bemily chapter 4 . 9/1/2012
I don't know how this is only chapter 4. I feel like I have been in their time for way longer. I love all the things said and unsaid. I have no theories to guess - way to soon and complicated but I am loving the story.
| sassy991 chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
This story is so fascinating. The complexity and detailing of every chapter amazes me time and time again. I find myself immersed into another world, one darker and more dangerous, with every word. It is a heady and thrilling feeling. BTS is defintely one of the most creative and compelling stories I've read in quite a while. I'd like to thank you for that!
A few more pieces are added to the puzzle. I continue to wonder what occurred that created such hostility between the wolves and Bella (on the wolves part). Could it have to do with Seth? I suppose we'll find out.
I continue to adore Jessica! She really is the light to the tragic situation they are all in. Her presence always brings a smile to my face. :) as do your updates!
| 22blue chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
Okay. WHAT IS GOING ON?! lol I think I've got something figured out, but then...nope. Not a clue. :) And what is this? "...Having them nearby is why I started phasing. If they had just stayed in Alaska or where-the-fuck-ever, E―"
Now I think it might be something else but I'm probably way off base.
Enjoy your weekend, and if you do feel like updating before the 16th, please, feel free to do so. ha!
| ibleedscarletandgray chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
Just found your story and I really love it so far - can't wait for more!
I'm very intrigued by the back story, and it looks like it will be a slowly unfolding reveal. I like that! LOL!
Thanks for sharing this story - it's already amazing!
| BelieveItOrNot chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
I'm in love with the way you set a scene. You use few, but important details in description that imply so much with so little. This is a gift.
"Chicken wire and yellow caution tape had replaced a few of the missing safety rails on the bridge. Bella gave the rusty mess a wide berth, walking on the curb like she used to do when she was still young enough to pretend to be a tightrope walker." - god: scene, info. and characterization in the first two sentences, and done so subtly. Love your light touch so much!
And I like to think there's more to this tightrope walk thing. And there is, isn't there? These two, Jess and Bella, in different ways, are barely balancing. :') - for the prose
"A boy with sandy blond hair knelt as if receiving a blessing from the girl who attempted to scribble on his face with a stubby red crayon." And the "rings around the roses" 3 - for the prose again, for the symbolism and depth.
"It was one of Jessica's good days, and those were to be taken advantage of to the fullest." - I'm so worried about Jessica. I love her! (Love for Jess is rare)
She said nothing.
"That's more like it..." - I know Jessica was responding to Edward, but still, this right after Bella contemplating shutting Edward out and then deciding, passively, not to. Interesting. (Sorry if I'm being overly-analytic - I can't help it right now.)
I love how E and B compliment each other - her cooking meals, him baking. I'm so excited to see their relationship unfold. I already love their conversations. Edward is so intuitive and observant.
"I don't want her to die," he said. "You know I don't." - And the kiss to the forehead. I also love Jake. You're awesome!
This world you're creating is amazing and so riveting. I don't know where it's coming from. You're brilliant and have major talent. Keep writing!
| Ness1956 chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
| Nauticalmass chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
I'm following along as best as I can. I both love and hate that we're only getting pieces at a time. I'm so hungry for answers. If I weren't reading Fanfic, this is exactly the type of book I would be reading. I do want to clarify something (if it's supposed to be clear at this point). Edward's human, right? Or, no?
| thimbles chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
You are a master of intrigue, and yet the seemingly complicated plot unraveling doesn't get in the way of wonderful characterization.
I love gathering all these puzzle pieces, I'm looking forward to seeing everything slot into place.
Another great chapter! Thank you!
Sorry this is short, love, my brain is sleepy.
| kjghkf chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
"No. Well, not yet, at least. I'm going to make them into a pie tomorrow."
He makes me want to get up and bake.
"Don't worry. It's a platonic love. I only lust after your food."
Love this girl.
"Two years ago, Jake had burst into Bella's kitchen with a terrified, long-lost girl clinging to his back. Even before Jessica was sick, he was already saving her life."
Crazy intriguing to read about this. And Jake, always the silent protector.
"You were a recluse," Rosalie said, drawing her lower lip between her teeth as she paused to make a note. "Maybe she felt sorry for you."
"I don't think my dear neighbor spent a day in her life feeling sorry for anyone."
I adored this whole exchange between them.
"She'd only been eight years old when the first temporal event―the Surge―whipped through the planet, but even now it still seemed like a malevolent, dark sort of magic."
"One of her best friends was a time traveler, another could change into a wolf, and yet another was an immortal being who drank blood and sparkled in the sunlight"
Girl has one of every kind.
"Missed you too. Well, as much as I could, since to me it feels like I just saw you last week."
My mind cannot comprehend how fucking tragic that is. Four years but it feels like a week to him.
"You're way hot, obviously." Seth's arm circled her waist as he spoke. "And you have a pulse, so that's a bonus.
Why yes I do enjoy their banter.
"You and Seth, fine, but Leah and Quil can't even stand to look at me, and Paul... Paul would probably kill me if he got the chance."
"It's not like that," he whispered. "They don't... they don't blame you, Bells. They know you had―"
I want to know more of this.
The tone of this fic is full of mystery, you want to know more after given snippets of information. And Edward, is he really that clueless or being clever? He's the most mysterious of them all, I think. The way you write tragic situations, situations that grab your heart with anxiety, but then also with humour that is down to earth, makes me read on.
| Seagull83 chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
So very intriguing. Looking forward to everything unfolding.
| Jasper-replaces-edward chapter 4 . 8/31/2012
gah there is still so much to know, I am sooo confused. love it. xx
| evilnat chapter 4 . 8/30/2012
An amazing update.
I enjoy the depth you go to, its like reading a novel. The further we get in the more we find out; coz there's a bunch of stuff we're still wondering about. But it doesn't actually bother me, i like how things are slowly unravelling.
Edward is cool, i like him and i can see how he's making Bella come out a little more. The wolves are interesting, i wonder if the vamps really know that B and J actually know what they are and just dont let on. and does Edward know whats going on?
| HeavenlyAngel34 chapter 1 . 8/30/2012
| blueeyes11354 chapter 4 . 8/30/2012
Oh Jacob. So the wrong thing to say. :/