|Reviews for The Rise of Overlord Vulcan!|
| Ahrondude chapter 17 . 1/20
Great new chapter
| Guest chapter 17 . 1/20
You keep introducing so much useless clutter into your story.
*He can use magic which is very versatile and can be adapted to almost anything. But he received a power-up that closed some of branches that has only happened a few times in history, but is obviously common knowledge, just because.
*He gets an artifact from a game that gives him abilities that he could've acquired through some other means more interesting that would have been made as the story develops rather than a random thing.
*He received a lacrima, another power up, because an OC dark lady gifts them away, and have abilities that he doesn't need or can acquire.
And it goes on and on.
The thing you need to better your writing is to FOCUS, and stop going on a tangent. All this is well and all (well, not really), but what's the point? What does Averna adds to the story? What does the subplot with the Veela Queen matter? And all this? All this random abilities that drop on his lap that will never be used, all this irritating plot that doesn't seem to have a point. What? What?
| talesfanjmf chapter 17 . 1/21
The whole Fire/Shadow thing is something I can see the kid of Harry and Astoria having in Animagus Mishap
| Halitar chapter 17 . 1/21
I truly enjoyed this chapter :) and it is nice seeing an update for this story, thank you for your wonderful work :)
| shugokage chapter 17 . 1/21
Wow nice job on creating and interesting twist with his abilities!
| Iryelb chapter 17 . 1/21
This chapter feels a little awkward, like Harry passing out for a week than waking up only to expend even more energy for a barely heard of rare magical phenomenon that the doctor just so happens to know about only to pass out again for several more hours wake up and than go back to sleep. I'm just saying there are other instances like this but the chapter just seems like it could use another couple comb overs. Like how you just sort of glazed over Harry's meeting with the queen and she just happened to have a stand that would keep the egg safe and warm, and over all it feels like there just wasn't enough alliteration, like you just tell us "...he wondered what to do." when you could have said something like he wandered off to find something to do or he could have started talking to himself or even just walked down the hallway saying "what to do, what to do, what to do." that is just one example. I did enjoy the Fairy Tail shout out, the subtle byplay between Aisha and Harry, and Hermione finding out about Harry's darker side. I hope that Hermione at least takes a more direct approach in questioning Harry than he plans to take with her because Hermione always struck me as a straight forward type of person. Sorry for the slightly disjointed review, good chapter over all but I think it could have stood to have a little more time in the shop, anyway I eagerly anticipate the next chapter.
| TheWritersNightmare chapter 17 . 1/20
Alright, you said you wanted longer reviews, so I'm gonna give you one. First off, i really enjoy your stories, all off them, but this one especially. Now I got a few ideas you might find interesting, but I'm a little pressed for time at the moment, so I'm going to give you them over several chapters. My first idea is this. I really think Harry needs some kind of dragon, as a second familiar. It just suits his personality( which I love by the way. Cool new spin to a Dark Harry. Also with the massive crossover.)
Now it may make him overpowered, but come on. It's clear by this point, that Harry is going to be God-like( Again, I love these kind of stories). But that is just one off my ideas, I'll post more at a later point in time. Keep up the good work.
| Z-Breezy chapter 17 . 1/20
I still don't like that Harry agreed to follow any one even if he is he came to the point of agreement was was kinda of pathetic, an Overlord is the Boss of all Bosses, with the mindset that they own every him to allow his self to be torture naked was lame.
I still think the story is ok but Harry lost some major points with me.
| SalemTheSpeakerOfTruth chapter 17 . 1/20
Keep up the good work, Dragen!
| Dark Lelouch3221 chapter 17 . 1/20
Great job with the Lacrima and the fight scenes, I didn't see that coming yet. As for everything else, I like how you mentioned the minions but didn't go into detail, thank you for that. It helps that now you've put the silent thought of wondering into Harry's head about what problems occurred between the Dark One and the Driders.
Another great chapter. To prevent others from looking at this review to grab at possible ideas for the next chapters and upcoming parts of the story I will PM you. Thanks again and keep in touch mate.
| tylermech66 chapter 17 . 1/20
This chapter was worth the wait, but the wait was still excruciating. I know the feeling of writer's block, that thing is an ancient evil more powerful than any lovecraftian horrors.
And as to ideas for the story, uh... .. ... .. ... hmmm... how about... a muggle experimental powersuit that is refitted with magic resistant armor, sorry, I love armor :P
| KailSakray chapter 17 . 1/20
thanks for the update
| Ecomadness chapter 17 . 1/20
I enjoyed this chap can't wait for more.
| TheTrickster96 chapter 17 . 1/20
It's a great story and I've loved it from the beginning but I think you're spending too much time with the Veela. I think you should get back to Hogwarts and Harry and the Granger women. Nevertheless great story. But no more veela!
| Lighting-Squall chapter 17 . 1/20
so great to see another chapter! ;A; but i have to ask when is emma's turn to be with harry haha been waiting for that part for a long tine now u_u, anyway great chapter and cant wait to read the next one!