|Reviews for His Mum's Boyfriend|
| For the Fish chapter 5 . 9/22/2012
AAH! HARRY! NO! WHY?! HELP! IT'S NOT INCEST!
Sorry, dramatic moment, I'm sad now :( I do hope things are all right and it gets sorted and Harry stops being like his father and realise that as Leo isn't biologically Nikki's dad and they wouldn't be biologically related anyway so it wouldn't be incest and... you get the idea.
Angsty... now I'm scared, scary things scare me easily and scared Checky is scared. The last 'That was you. The blemish on her perfection.' was just so brilliant and clever and asdfghjkl, you get the idea. It was amazing, seriously, my jaw was practically through the floor.
You're a very brilliant writer and this is a very brilliant story.
| For the Fish chapter 4 . 9/22/2012
Wow. I was right about who the boyfriend was! Yay! I bet most people guessed that but I'm proud I knew.
Harry's silly logic about him and Nikki being incest amused me, simply because it isn't incest yet in his crazy little mind it is and the whole concept of Leo being Harry's potential step-father is really interesting, I love it! I can't wait to see where you take this- how it affects work and Harry and Leo's relationship, not to mention Nikki and Harry's.
I like the part from Leo's point of view simply because it meant we could see a little bit of what he was thinking, his view on the whole thing because from Harry's point of view he's in the wrong but by hearing what he has to say we can decide for ourselves whether he's made a massive mistake or not.
I didn't notice any grammar or spelling issues and sentence structure was, as always, brilliant.
| For the Fish chapter 2 . 9/22/2012
Well, I get the feeling I have an idea who the partner is (actually I had a feeling I knew after the first chapter) but I'm not going to say anything in case I'm completely wrong!
This is going to seem like rather an odd comment but I think you used the swearing effectively (I did tell you it would be an odd comment!) because in some situations, people just fee they have to swear but you didn't use it in every expression, which is believable and means that when Harry did swear it added to the effect.
The fact Harry wondered if his dad really was his dad was just the type of thing someone might wonder if their mum was like the and how he reacted was in-character for not just him but probably most of the world.
The spelling and grammar was. once again, good with only a few minor errors- 'before she looked at you and a smiled' obviously shouldn't have the 'a' and 'You knew quite understood Nikki and men.' I think is meant to say 'You never quite understood Nikki and men'
I'm still enjoying this and Nikki talking about the photos and asking if there were any embarrassing photos even before they got there made me laugh and seemed like something she would do or say.
I need to stop being distracted by my brothers and sisters and read this without breaks! It took me ages to write this review because of my youngest brother (naughty Alfie!) climbing on me.
| For the Fish chapter 1 . 9/22/2012
I love the characterisation of this fic- the fact that all the characters seem in character and though I'm not usually a big fan of second person narrative, I like it in this case as I think it does work well and you write it in such a way that it doesn't irritate me.
I also like the idea- it's unique and could lead to a very interesting story that ends up affecting all sorts of characters and causing so many issues, despite the original idea of someone's mother having a boyfriend being perfectly normal.
Your sentence structure, spelling and grammar are generally good and I do like the style of writing and the amount of detail you put in. There are, howevr, a few mistakes- 'Scared that this knew man would hurt her.' should be 'Scared that this new man would hurt her.' 'You shook you head' should be 'You shook your head' 'Not that is was your desk really, you both shared them equally.' was probably just a typo but 'is' should be 'it' or maybe 'this' and 'Where that was just an illusion by physical presence being there more you didn't know.' I think should be WHETHER instead of WHERE. But I'm not 100% I just know it doesn't make sense as where...
Either way, I really like the first chapter and I can't wait to read on :P
| dinabar chapter 5 . 9/14/2012
Oooh and you promised angst, have always thought that H&N definitely had brother/sister issues but really played out to the fore here. Not sure technically it counts though if the 'parents' are only dating and that one is only a nominally adopted parent, but actually who cares this is a great fic and I shall read more happily.
Thanks for writing.
| elle121 chapter 5 . 9/12/2012
omg..amazing! :o what has harry become? NOOOOOOOOO please please update!
| doctorwho-fanatic2010 chapter 5 . 9/3/2012
ah, can't believe he would do that, please make it better!
| Lizziginne chapter 5 . 9/3/2012
You're a mean mean person, Poppy McCartney! :P my for baby Harry would never ever do that, ever! :( well maybe he would in this situation :( but he does love Nikki and he'd never ever purposely hurt her :( *cries* I don't like you, make everything better instead of the cruel plan you've told me! 3 xxx
| whutttttttttt chapter 5 . 9/2/2012
Harrryyyy! :''''( he doesn't mean it, he does love her and wants to be with her! 3
Nikkkiiiii! :'''''( *hugs* poor thing, Harry needs her & she needs him!
Poppy you are cruel...make them happy again...NOW! :p
This is awesome though, I can't wait for more! :)
Love you lots xxx
| Cariad1987 chapter 5 . 9/2/2012
No Harry you havent turned into him! and its not wrong Leo is not Nikki's father and even if he was it still wouldnt be wrong please fix this you ...you ... dork!
| hotvause chapter 5 . 9/2/2012
You've reduced me to tears, fml :'( as amazing as this story is, please don't keep H/N apart for too long! :P
Can't wait for the next chapter! xo
| Clufie chapter 5 . 9/2/2012
Oh wow, I was so not expecting that! I think Harry's being too dramatic, after all Leo isn't genetically Nikki's Dad, but I can imagine him getting too over the top because he does have a temper...it's an incredible story, can't wait for the next chapter! Love Carrie xx
| Cariad1987 chapter 4 . 8/28/2012
eeek angry Harry is scary though I fully understand his reaction. hugs for him and Niki go look after him
| Lizziginne chapter 4 . 8/17/2012
Harrryy! (that is said in my head in Nikkis whining voice from some episode I can't remember if the top of my head) naughty naughty boy. Don't hurt your Mummy, she loves you, she doesn't like it when you scare her! And Leo, you are a right idiot. That is all I have to say because its 8:15am and I still want to be asleep :P have a lovely holiday! :D I'll miss you :( xxxx
| EmmaJ1996 chapter 4 . 8/16/2012
Oh my word - Leo and Anne! *speechless*
Poor Harry! I can see why he's so upset and this was so heartbreaking, especially with the smashing of the picture - it's like Harry sees Leo as betraying him :)
Love the bit about having to choose and having to not see Janet anymore :(
And yes, Harry and Nikki do seem a tiny bit incestuous now...