|Reviews for Oh Darling, we are fucked up'|
| QuirkyWritings chapter 1 . 8/27/2013
Oh Darling, you story is fucked up!
I don't mean to be rude, oh who am I kidding that's just who I am, ok so there's a bunch of things wrong with this shitty story:
1. Straight away I noticed you just the word Fucked in the title, which if you didn't know immediately classes this story as rated M not K, please change the rating!
2. No one thinks like that they normally just go off on a rant in their mind, well that's what I do...
3. You never write the characters speech like that! Make sure you use 'speech marks' round their words not, Noah: You are a stupid.
4. Look up the words 'you are a stupid' is not even correct you don't need the 'A'.
5. Sweetie have you ever thought about getting a beta? Try do wonders on stories if you choose the correct one.
6. I have not even read past the second paragraph yet I know that this story is toooooo fucking hard to consider reading.
I'm sure you have noticed now that I am not one to tread lightly and have already decided to delete this comment but I thought that I should tell you because I find joy in making writes become something new
Well then here is a shitty goodbye to end my comment...
See you on the other side TM
| tiarashine chapter 7 . 9/2/2012
| tiarashine chapter 5 . 8/19/2012
I really like this story