Reviews for Vitani's Mother
Lilly chapter 5 . 8/22/2014
I thought this story was good it's fine most people make mistakes but i think u should finish it
Jaylee chapter 4 . 5/19/2013
WHAT IN THE WORLD HAPPENDED TO NELA!?
Mia chapter 4 . 1/7/2013
hey im mia me and the okamiden team have something to say Kurow take it away

Kurow duuuude that rocked who knew tani had a real mother poor girl adios
T5Tango chapter 1 . 10/2/2012
Well, when I looked at the summary, I thought this was a great story idea full of amazing potential. While, I loved the way you jumped right into the thickness of the plot, it felt a little too fast paced for me. Because you didn't take your time with exploring the emotions and dynamics that deeply, the characters came off as a bit shallow and hard to connect to. Also, I thought some of the dialogue was a bit awkward and undeveloped. It was also weird for me that Tama randomly showed up just as Kiara and Vitani were discussing Vitani's real mother. Some descriptions of the setting would have made imagery better. I think if you slow the plot down and dig into your characters emotions and pasts it would greatly increase the depth of your story. Overall, I thought this was an interesting read and I'm excited to see where the story goes. Good work.
kate chapter 4 . 10/2/2012
Please put up chapter 5 soon and hurry
kate chapter 3 . 9/30/2012
Please put up chapter 4 soon and hurry
larry chapter 2 . 9/17/2012
this her story vatini was gave birth by tama and togo than zira stole her and scar kill togo tama ran away to find he than simba return than kovu was born after the week kopa was born than zira kill him and was ezial than stuff about simba pride than she had pregtant with kopa cub and name them tani nuka and iggi
Guest chapter 1 . 8/17/2012
good tama zira took vatini and kovu and kopa zira kill him she nerle kill simba and kiara
Guest chapter 1 . 8/14/2012
tama love her cub vatini but scar took her