|Reviews for Undeniable Consumption|
| jk chapter 17 . 7/19
17. chapter 16- lost? you should fucking delete the whole god damn thing...what a HUGE PILE OF SHIT!
she goes all comatose for 3 months? ummm why? she doesn't have a good enough reason ya know? she just doesn't, shut up, you cant change my mind.
that weird shit about make me forget! I want to be one of you whores! kisss me like you kiss your whores! shes actually kissing that prick? ARE YOU FUCKING SERIOUS?
GOD, JUST DELETE THE WHOLE STORY ITS A HUGE PILE OF SHIT
| jk chapter 16 . 7/19
That was Charlie getting what he deserved? hahhahahhahahahaha ya right!
she could have just left...and I don't get this whole I wont take their money bullshit...you act like that's a good thing but really? its all grandma dragons money so why the fuck not? if she has to put up with assward the least he can do is fucking pay for college with grandmas money. and you seem to think that because Edward likes bella that that excuses everything horrible about him and what hes done...like its a fucking redeeming quality or something...Edward can die in this story and I wouldn't even care
| jk chapter 15 . 7/19
I skipped over all that driving bullshit...cause I cant stomach bella and Edward being "friends" its fucking disgusting, why would she want to be friends with a pos like him? ohh that's right cause the bella you wrote? shes a fucking victim!
and oh please can we give Edward the WHORE a fucking virgin? really? Edward the whore gets bella the virgin? yaaa that's fair...shes pure and hes so used up he makes porn stars look clean...no fucking thank you
and bella is going to give Charlie what he deserves? no shes not, I don't believe it...if she was gonna give Charlie what he deserves shed walk away from this bullshit and let Charlie "go to jail" not that he actually would because of the black mail and shit. but whatever
| jk chapter 14 . 7/19
I don't understand why bella made such a big deal about Edward being in jail...SO THE FUCK WHAT? ohhh he got in a fight...so? no big fucking deal.
and now bella is gonna be friend with Edward? why?
why would she want to be friends with a gross piece of shit like him?
hes called her names
groped another woman in front of her
cheated on her numerous times
hes a seriously annoying little cunt
I just don't understand why she would even TRY to be friends with a guy like this, I'm sorry but you've written Edward as unforgivable in my eyes.
If I was bella I would write him off...and I don't mean for alittle while, I mean FOREVER...NO FORGIVENESS EVER! hes nothing, he means nothing, I don't care what he does, or who he does it with, he can fight, fuck, whatever doesn't matter cause I don't care about him and what he does.
| jk chapter 13 . 7/19
I thought Edward was gonna get drunk
I thought Edward was gonna show everyone how disappointing he could be? I thought he was gonna bring on the pain and agony...whatever the fuck that meant
big words lol and all he did was go to a club drink alittle and get into one fight...ya he sure showed us.
and he wasn't gonna run from the cops like a pussy? ummm I'm pretty sure running from the cops doesn't make you a pussy but whatever...
you need someone to read this crap before you post it cause its pretty bad...your characters...expecially the way you've written bella is just horrible...shes so fucking pathetic
| jk chapter 12 . 7/19
when bella joked with the whore and called him trouble and he winked at her and said you have no idea? I fucking puked in my mouth...just alittle...but seriously...YA ASSWARD WE ALL KNOW YOUR "TROUBLE" LIKE THE KIND THAT MAKES YOUR CROTCH ITCH FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE...THAT KIND OF TROUBLE..
he acts like its a good thing...bella is fucking pathetic by the way...so he touched a gross whore..so? like she didn't know that's hes been doing that shit this whole time..bitch please get over yourself
| jk chapter 11 . 7/19
bella should just leave...surely Charlie wouldn't do much time all he did was hit a old guy a few times...no big fucking deal PLUS with the cullens blackmail and shit it probably wouldn't even see the inside of a court so he could keep his job...bella could divorce Edward and get enough money to pay for college...its a win win
| jk chapter 10 . 7/19
Edward is going to shun and avoid bella? LOL yaaaa cause he really needs to teach bella a lesson...since hes been out fucking other woman all week...and by the sounds of it it was a lot more then just one a day...I wonder how many woman he fucked since they've been married? 10?20?
| jk chapter 9 . 7/19
why would she have to "lock her heart away" from the nasty used up selfish egotistical arrogant manwhore?
she should have to "protect her heart" from a piece of shit like Edward. plane and mother fucking simple...she should want NOTHING to do with him.
really all she has to do is not much...go to a few parties...pretend shes Edwards wife a couple times a month...whatever...she can still go to school like she planned...she can hook up with whoever as long as shes discreet, shes already made "the deal" with assward. all she had to do is pretend through five years...no biggie! she'll have free room and board...free school...its a sweet deal!
| jk chapter 8 . 7/19
bella already knows what kind of person Edward is...so there should be no more pining for him going forward correct? hes insulted her one too many fucking times for my liking. What hes said is unforgivable...even if waaaay down the line bella decided that she liked him how could she forget about how he said that hes fucked "hotter bodies" then hers...and how he fucked a new girl EVERYDAY...gross could you even imagine what his number is? fucking disgusting...even if he changed his attitude he cant change how filthy he is
| jk chapter 6 . 7/19
I'm pretty sure it wasn't bella dad that got Edward into that mess...first off it was Edward and his fucking grandmother that got BELLA into that mess...im pretty upset that bella didn't say ANYTHING when Edward said that...
second bella was gonna cry cause she had to sleep on the floor? and did she really think "I'm supposed to sleep on the floor like a common whore"? ummm common whores don't sleep on the floor dumbass... that didn't even make any fucking sense!
and I don't give one fuck how bella sees her body she should not let Edward talk shit about it!
and like she couldn't have just grabbed the blanket and went and slept on the fucking couch...ive never heard anyone whine so much about sleeping on the floor...fucking get over it
| jk chapter 5 . 7/19
I really don't get why bella keeps talking about how beautiful Edward is. The ugliness inside him has ruined the outside for me. Hes the ugliest guy in the family as far as I'm converned
| Guest chapter 16 . 8/14/2015
Bella's overreacting. yes what Charlie did was unbelievable, and she has right to be angry but its not reason for her to disowned her parents especially after in the first chapter they potrayed as a loving parents. its not like he's doing it for money. he also left no choice bcos Elizabeth threatening him. plusss its not like she's been thrown to bad family. and she start to enjoy her new rich family.
| wantonlytoread chapter 16 . 6/15/2015
It's 2015, is the next chapter ready? :)
| Guest chapter 17 . 5/9/2015
I sooo love this story. Its so hard to find a good intense, angsty story and with an interesting plot. I'm glad everything doesn't come together so quickly. I love the journey. I hope you didn't abandon this and you update.