|Reviews for Dark Blue|
| BlueIrish chapter 1 . 1/6
Well! I was just looking for something hot to read. And here I go pleasantly finding a solid story. Way to go you! Not often that sort of thing happens.
and I have to say, your writing style and plot progression in a narrative style is well done! I never can get that flow down without some dialogue, personally. Soo... thanks for that lesson, yo.
| ratedgdr chapter 1 . 10/24/2012
I thought I should say that I'm a huge fan of your Sabrina x Mewtwo work. Hopefully you'll do some more soon.
| Meneldur chapter 1 . 9/9/2012
Sorry for taking so long, but my new job requires more security, so little to no Internet access so far, and since I've been sleeping there most of the time... yeah, have time only on weekends. Eventually I just printed it out, wrote my review, and now I'll type it up.
The opening was already quite good, establishing their different personalities and inclinations, especially as in regards to Sabrina's seeming innocence versus Mewtwo's darkness. Of course, this is a lot more significant on the background of the rest of the story.
Sabrina being a cop... it's intriguing, but not something I can see that stick for long, especially after she finishes her undercover work. I feel the idea of a psychic (especially such a powerful one as Sabrina) is problematic. She notes later that she's neither judge nor jury nor executioner, but exactly because of her powers, that must be incredibly hard - we see what Mewtwo does to deal with it, and after what Sabrina goes through in this story, I find it hard to believe she didn't develop some of those tendencies as well.
"feigning the steel she'd eventually become, a man named Lucian was her mentor" - A nice reference to Lucian using steel/psychic types.
Sabrina being with Lucian and then his death causing her to completely separate from Mewtwo for 18 months was a very good development, to my mind. I feel the separation allowed them to grow as individuals, becoming more independent. At the same time, it forced them to face the sides of their personality the other had represented until now. I think that was what truly allowed them to enter in a relationship after everything.
Sabrina as a maid was fascinating. It was so counter to her character, but somehow you manage to keep her perfectly in character. I liked the touch with the singing, which was a nice throwback to the anime.
During her time with Giovanni, she may have felt like she was crumbling, but I feel this is exactly what allowed her to later be able to rebuild so that she could have a real relationship with Mewtwo.
Sabrina's work as undercover agent was quite interesting. She did it all very skillfully and patiently, and reaped great words. It was quite a feat, I think, managing to keep her cover throughout it all, and slowly bringing down Team Rocket from the inside.
The relationship with Clair was also inspired, giving Sabrina the proof and means that she could rebuild herself into something normal. The sexual nature of their relationship was also nicely done, styled very elegantly. I wonder if it continued with Mewtwo, or if she felt that with him she didn't need it anymore. In any case, I quite enjoyed what little we saw of Clair, and Clair and Sabrina together.
The conclusion was beautiful, very well written. I feel Hunting was better, but that's probably because Hunting's apex was basically one long scene (catching Sabrina and having sex with her), while here, the conclusion comes only after a very long and well-developed relationship. In any case, it was excellent. The writing style was also superb, not as detail-laden as it usually is, spare where it needs to be, and evocative elsewhere. I'll admit in some places I thought it was too spare, but considering it's a memory and the subject matter, I suppose that's fair.
Anywya, great story, and I can't wait to see what else you;re going to write. Until then, Meneldur.
"and in the thirteen months she'd been away" - but earlier in the story it was 18?
"she admired, for an instant, the taunt muscles of his arms, his chest" - taut, not taunt.
"It's going to be awhile" - a while
| Kosaten no Kokinatsuyosa chapter 1 . 8/17/2012
All in all, I quite liked this. There's a real sense of emotional depth in this piece that I didn't find in "Hunting For Your Hot Heart". Of all of your Psyshipping works, I do believe that this is my favorite.
One thing that I did find was a few error here and there. Nothing serious, I believe the issue was mainly omitted words. I'd post them here, but I don't recall where I saw them at the moment. If you have trouble finding them, I'd be happy to take another look. I know full well that it's easy to miss errors when you've looked at the same piece over and over and over again.
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/17/2012
omg omgomgomg amazing im crying it was terrific!
| Mai-danishgirl chapter 1 . 8/14/2012
Nice story, I really liked the focus on Sabrina.
But now I can't get the picture of Mewtwo in bunny slippers out of my head, not human Mewtwo, Mewtwo Mewtwo, in cute pink slippers.
| Renn Ireigh chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
I didn't get a chance to read this over lunch due to a minor case of the server having a hissy fit right before, but that's probably a good thing, as I'd have had to stop and wait to read the rest later. You neglected to tell me it wasn't work-safe! (Although I should have figured that.)
Stylistically, I really like the direction your writing is headed (or at least what you decided to do for this fic.) It's brisker; while still descriptive, the pacing doesn't drown in adjectives. In some places it verges on the too brisk, but given the retrospective nature of the story, that can be forgiven. It retains some of the lyricism you like where it's appropriate, turns starker where THAT is appropriate, and altogether, the style matches the story.
As you know, I have a hard time getting out of my OTP rut and reading other ships, but I liked the way that Sabrina's and Mewtwo's relationship progressed (involving other people as well- I hope Mewtwo didn't moon himself silly in the meantime!) since that lent their eventual togetherness a real sense of homecoming that was lovely to read. Even for someone who proudly flies another ship flag. After the trauma of two of her past relationships it was very sweet to see them get to interact on such a base-equal level, especially as they had a moment where it was very easy to see the relationship they may have had as children (exploding alarm clocks and all.)
Finally, I'm sorry for laughing in the midst of Sabrina's very serious undercover strivings. It was inappropriate and I'll try not to do it again. I must note that I can't take credit for that line. That was Kets. I just borrow it a lot. Share it forward!
| Kayasuri-n chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
I do, in fact, like this story. It's very, very good- very emotional. It has all the feels. Aaaaaall the feels.
You say you don't know how to write crime. I say HA, and HA again. Because this was good. I have a feeling you'd be able to write the takedown of a mob boss quite well- you can keep track of all the arms. Or heads. Or whatever.
The only thing I didn't like was Lucian, since he kinda sorta took advantage of Sabrina with the whole 'superior/teacher' thing he had going on, but he died so who cares?
Mewtwo's a clever cat.
| Codie - King of Hollows chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
Can't wait for the next chapter.
| stormseeker123 chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
asdfghgfd! i love your stuff!