Reviews for Coming For You
GuardianWitchDemiGhost chapter 8 . 11/24/2013
GWDG:OMG that was a awesome story! :D I loved it greatly and maybe you can write more soon. :) I will end with my goodbyes,Ta.

boom-na-moon chapter 7 . 5/3/2013
I like Mary here! She's somehow nice and kind to her sister! :)))) Nice job! :D
DeluxeMagnum69 chapter 8 . 1/28/2013
Nice. Me gusta. Amazing job on the story by the way. :D
DeluxeMagnum69 chapter 7 . 1/28/2013
*review commenced*
Bleh. I understand of working I'm another story. I was about to publish my hard worked Ib story but my files crashed and lost them.
Bad luck here!
wind chimed chapter 3 . 1/28/2013
this captures the true beauty of a story this is wonderful
Guest chapter 7 . 1/25/2013
*deep breath* Okay. I personally enjoyed the premis. It was a good idea, and I like the idea of one of the art pieces not being out to get anyone. Unfortunately, certain things don't match the canon, and Marlene wandered in Mary Sue territory. Mary wanted to leave the fabricated world HERSELF, and she needed to REPLACE someone from the real world to do so. Mary revealed both of these things in her diary. Anyone who wanted to leave the fabricated world needed to take someone from the real world's place. Marlene also knew WAY to much. While some of this can be explained from living in the world, she started sounding like an explaination character. Some of the reveals should have come from discovery on Garry's part. The last one is kinda just a pet peeve of mine. Marlene should have needed something to remember. Garry didn't remember until he spoke to Ib and found the handkerchief. Now, I seem to be the only person who think's Marlene is sue-ish, so maybe I'm the only one who sees this. A few things could have been done better, but all in all, it was an interesting read.
Guest chapter 5 . 1/17/2013
DeluxeMagnum69 chapter 6 . 1/17/2013
Well... I don't know what to say here. Jolly good well job.
DeluxeMagnum69 chapter 5 . 1/17/2013
You beat me by a solid month! The longest time I haven't updated was about 30 days. You have just overthrew it. :D
By that, I kind of drifted away from Ib...
But lucky me to see that you updated! I'm going to read the next chapter now! _
FujoshiNinjaNumber6 chapter 6 . 1/17/2013
Oh no... did Mary do what i think she did? Please let my presumption be wrong...
AnotherGenericNerd chapter 4 . 11/25/2012
AnotherGenericNerd chapter 3 . 11/25/2012
Marline... thats a good idea!
Kuroshiroryuu chapter 4 . 11/22/2012
RUN IT'S MARY! Please update soon :)
Seena chapter 4 . 10/13/2012
Ahhh, the suspense is /killing/ me! I need to know what happened!
I love the "The Lady in Red" getting a personality, heh. I bet she's gorgeous...albeit haughty and rude.
Oh, not to be the Grammar Police, but did you make a mistake? When the doll says "...Allie isn't with us anymore." it says "Jolly's tone was different. It WAS playful or mysterious,..." you meant wasn't, didn't you? It confused me at first but I did understand what you meant, so no biggie
Don't let us down, we're all patiently awaiting a new chapter!
Sakura0Blosssoms chapter 4 . 10/14/2012
Please update soon! So far loving this fan fic!
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